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I am applying to a nursing program and i have this question why should i be admitted into the nursing program. so far this is what i have...

"Being admitted into the University of North Dakota nursing program would be a sense of success. The past couple of years as I previously stated, have not been easy on me. It felt like the whole world was against me and I was being pushed around like I was worth nothing. I have always put everything I have into the work I preform and nothing less. By finally being able to help people in need will be the greatest feeling of becoming a nurse. You should select me because I am passionate about the work I preform and I am willing to do whatever it takes to be successful in the profession of nursing. "

Any tips or suggestions to add to it? thanks!

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Specializes in Urology, HH, med/Surg.

You're misspelling 'perform'. Other than being able to spell- I'm not great at the writing & wording. Others on here will be of more assistance with that.

Good luck!!

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I would suggest taking down the post and PMing specific people. Universities often use anti-plagiarism programs, and they have no way of knowing if you're the original poster of this or just a lazy copy cat.

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Does your current college have a writing lab? You may want to start there. Have you taken English comp? Your instructor might be of assistance with grammatical issues and wording.

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How do you delete the post?

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Specializes in Complex pedi to LTC/SA & now a manager.
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You cannot. You can start a thread in the admin help desk for assistance

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Specializes in Critical Care, Education.

It's not a good idea to use the "poor me" approach. Everyone has a hard luck story and plenty of excuses as to why they have not achieved more / make higher grades / won scholarships / . . . etc. Trust me, they have a sufficient number of students who explain any type of poor performance with a litany of excuses rather than taking ownership for their own situations.

Instead, focus on informing the admissions committee about your positive traits. Hint: attributes such as discipline, optimism, accountability, persistence, adaptability, resilience, etc. are associated with academic success. If you feel the need to add something about your hard life, a better way to phrase it would be something like "Each time I managed to overcome an obstacle, it strengthened my resolve to become a nurse".

I also encourage you to polish up your submission. Try to be as crisp and articulate as possible. Use some 'big' words. Remove slang expressions or phrases. Triple-check your check grammar and spelling.

Wishing you the best of luck on your nursing education journey.

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Specializes in Neuroscience.

I agree with the poster above. You can't expect nursing to give you the sense of satisfaction that you are seeking. Start by questioning why being a nurse would give you a sense of accomplishment. Make a list, take the best reasons and expand on them.

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Specializes in 15 years in ICU, 22 years in PACU.
I am applying to a nursing program and i have this question why should i be admitted into the nursing program. so far this is what i have...

"Being admitted into the University of North Dakota nursing program would be a sense of success. The past couple of years as I previously stated, have not been easy on me. It felt like the whole world was against me and I was being pushed around like I was worth nothing. I have always put everything I have into the work I preform and nothing less. By finally being able to help people in need will be the greatest feeling of becoming a nurse. You should select me because I am passionate about the work I preform and I am willing to do whatever it takes to be successful in the profession of nursing. "

Any tips or suggestions to add to it? thanks!

If you have previously stated something, you don't need to state it again.

It is highly doubtful you (or anyone for that matter) have always put everything into your work. That kind of exaggeration makes the rest of your statements less genuine.

The "I've had a hard knock life approach" doesn't win sympathy points. Makes you sound pathetic.

I agree with previous posters you need some help writing this essay, more than we can give you here on AN.

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What skills do you have that can actually help you succeed in nursing?

Last sentence... sounds kinda desperate...

When I wrote my personal statement essay...I always think about my skills that I have.. skills that I can apply in nursing.. including my education background, work, and volunteer experience... because I wanted to sound promising and unique...

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I agree with the poster above. You can't expect nursing to give you the sense of satisfaction that you are seeking. Start by questioning why being a nurse would give you a sense of accomplishment. Make a list, take the best reasons and expand on them.

Be specific. Why nursing and not social work or religious ministry?

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Specializes in Pediatrics, Emergency, Trauma.
What skills do you have that can actually help you succeed in nursing?

Last sentence... sounds kinda desperate...

When I wrote my personal statement essay...I always think about my skills that I have.. skills that I can apply in nursing.. including my education background, work, and volunteer experience... because I wanted to sound promising and unique...

This.

What do you bring to the table that will make you a viable candidate in representing their program?

This is where your personality gets to shine-it's your elevator speech, so to speak.

What in your background-give examples- that are from an empowering place; be the victor, so to speak.

Utilize the college writing center as well.

Best wishes!

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