(LPN)Nursing school-why i want to be a nurse

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I was wondering if anyone can give me feedback on why I want to be a nurse essay for admission into an LPN program, thanks.

I want to be a nurse because I am a general caring and compassionate person, who has a soft spot for the geriatric population. At the young age of 9 and 10. I use to volunteer at the nursing home where my mother worked and assisted the nurse aides by collecting food trays from the residents. During this time in my life, I became fond of the elderly. As I got older and occasionally volunteered with the senior population, I quickly found that I would like to have a career working with the aging population. It seems that most people often forget about the geriatric population when it comes to nursing, and other healthcare careers; however I like it because I view it as a way to give back to others who have paved the way for me. I witnessed that nurses, primarily LPN’s are the backbones of long term care and rehab facilities, and provide exceptional care to the elderly in the last stages of their lives. In my opinion, there is nothing greater than helping others when they are at the most vulnerable period in their lives. Giving back and contributing to the well-being of others is a principal that I was raised by at an early age.

Additionally, what inspired me even more to be a nurse was the care that my elderly grandmother received when she was diagnosed with breast cancer. One oncology nurse in particular showed true compassion and dedication to my grandmother and family members. She helped our family members cope during the grieving period by being reassuring and able to answer questions with her acquired knowledge from working with cancer patients over the years. This nurse motivated me even more to get into a helping profession where I can make a difference in other people lives. Her knowledge, skills, and communication were vital in providing continuity of care.

These two particular events in my life, has shaped me into wanting to pursue a career as nurse, so I can help others and feel good about it at the same time. Nothing is more rewarding than assisting and restoring the greatest gift of all; health, when people are in need the most. I believe a true compassionate and caring person such as I, will always be blessed and looked upon as a positive role model for providing excellent care to the less fortunate population. I look forward to being an advocate for those who are in need. Eventually, I would like to further my career and become a Geriatric Nurse Practitioner where I can deliver the highest level of care for the elderly.

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Specializes in LTC.

I think it is a great essay. It really paints a nice picture of why you want to be a nurse.

I'm not a grammer person so hopefully someone will be able to spot any grammer errors if there are some.

good luck ! I think you are going to be a knock nurse. Residents don't care how much you know until they know how much you care- Author unknown.

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Specializes in Private Duty/Geriatric/Home Care/MedSurg.

I THINK YOU SHOULD ADD SOMETHING IN THERE (MAYBE AT THE END) SHOWING THAT YOU WILL BE ABLE TO PROVIDE QUALITY CARE AND/OR HAVE INTEREST IN CARING FOR ANY TYPE PT - NOT JUST GERI. JUST TO SHOW THAT YOU ARE OPEN TO OTHER AREAS.

Additionally, what inspired me even more to be a nurse was the care that my grandmother received when she was diagnosed with cancer. - I THINK YOU SHOULD OMIT THE WORD ELDERLY BECAUSE THAT IT A GIVEN,IN MOST CASES :) I ALSO THINK THAT MAYBE YOU SHOULD REMOVE THE WORD BREAST, MAYBE ITS TOO PERSONAL. JUST SEE WHAT OTHERS THINK, THATS JUST MY OPINION.

As I got older and occasionally volunteered with the senior population, I quickly found that I would like to have a career IN THIS FIELD. - IT JUST SEEMS KIND OF WORDY AND REPETITIVE THE WAY YOU HAVE IT.

At the young age of 9 and 10, - I THINK IT MAY NEED A COMMA HERE INSTEAD OF A PERIOD.

Giving back and contributing to the well-being of others is a principal - WRONG PRINCIPAL, I THINK. PRINCIPLE.

IM NOT GREAT WITH GRAMMER, THAT IS JUST A FEW THINGS THAT POPPED AT ME. MAYBE SOEMONE ELSE WILL HELP MORE. SORRY ABOUT YOU GRANDMOTHER, THAT IS DIFFICULT.

VERY GOOD!

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I THINK YOU SHOULD ADD SOMETHING IN THERE (MAYBE AT THE END) SHOWING THAT YOU WILL BE ABLE TO PROVIDE QUALITY CARE AND/OR HAVE INTEREST IN CARING FOR ANY TYPE PT - NOT JUST GERI. JUST TO SHOW THAT YOU ARE OPEN TO OTHER AREAS.

Additionally, what inspired me even more to be a nurse was the care that my grandmother received when she was diagnosed with cancer. - I THINK YOU SHOULD OMIT THE WORD ELDERLY BECAUSE THAT IT A GIVEN,IN MOST CASES :) I ALSO THINK THAT MAYBE YOU SHOULD REMOVE THE WORD BREAST, MAYBE ITS TOO PERSONAL. JUST SEE WHAT OTHERS THINK, THATS JUST MY OPINION.

As I got older and occasionally volunteered with the senior population, I quickly found that I would like to have a career IN THIS FIELD. - IT JUST SEEMS KIND OF WORDY AND REPETITIVE THE WAY YOU HAVE IT.

At the young age of 9 and 10, - I THINK IT MAY NEED A COMMA HERE INSTEAD OF A PERIOD.

Giving back and contributing to the well-being of others is a principal - WRONG PRINCIPAL, I THINK. PRINCIPLE.

IM NOT GREAT WITH GRAMMER, THAT IS JUST A FEW THINGS THAT POPPED AT ME. MAYBE SOEMONE ELSE WILL HELP MORE. SORRY ABOUT YOU GRANDMOTHER, THAT IS DIFFICULT.

VERY GOOD!

Lol, i totally meant to put a comma instead of the period. Wrong choice on grammar with the principal/principle

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Specializes in Peds OR as RN, Peds ENT as NP.

i hate writing papers but love reading personal statements and essays! all of my comments are in red and i will be the "voice of grammar and sentence structure." please don't think i am ripping you apart, its just that when i read, i read:d

i want to be a nurse because i possess two qualities every should nurse have: caring and compassionate. am a general caring and compassionate person, who has a soft spot for the geriatric population. ( i am just suggesting that you reword that first sentence- not that you need to use what i wrote j.your opening sentence needs to grab them and make them want to keep reading. at the young age of 9 and 10. i do not dispute that that is a young age:)-no need to mention. when i was younger, i used to volunteer at the nursing home where my mother worked and assist the nurse aides by collecting food trays from the residents. during this time in my life, i became fond of the elderly. i would reword this, try "it was during this time that i developed a passion for the geriatric population [color=#3413ad]and was taught the principle of giving back and contributing to the well-being of others." as i got older and occasionally volunteered continued to volunteer with the senior population, i quickly found began to realize that i would like to have pursue a career working with the aging geriatric (we are all aging :)) population. it seems that most people often forget about the geriatric population when it comes to nursing, and other healthcare careers; be careful with the claim "most people". reword this sentence because i understand exactly what you are saying. try: although some nurses and other healthcare professionals may shy away from geriatrics i gravitate towards it however i like it because i view it as a way to give of giving back to others who have paved the way for me. see how i combined those two sentences? i witnessed (???) that nurses, primarily lpn's are the backbones of long term care and rehab facilities, and provide exceptional care to the elderly in the last stages of their lives. how about " i believe lpn's are the backbone of long term care and rehab facilities and are an integral part of providing exceptional care to the elderly. saying "in the last stages of their lives" should be left out- some pts only come short-term because they need skilled nursing care.

this should begin the next paragraph.in my opinion, there is nothing greater than helping others when they are at the most vulnerable period in their lives. giving back and contributing to the well-being of others is a principal that i was raised by at an early age. i combined this sentence and moved it up [color=#3413ad]in blue because it doesn't belong here- you essay should tell a story and build. additionally, what inspired me even more to be a nurse was the care that my elderly grandmother received when she was diagnosed with breast cancer also inspired me to be a nurse. one oncology nurse in particular there was an oncology nurse that showed true (try genuine or sincere) compassion and dedication to my grandmother and family members. she helped our family members cope during the grieving period by being reassuring and able to answer questions with her acquired knowledge from working with cancer patients over the years (not needed) i would reword this sentence a little . this nurse motivated me even more try something authoritative so they know you mean business to begin this next sentence. example: i am determined to get into a helping profession where i can make a difference in other people lives and help them cope with illness as this oncology nurse did for my family. her knowledge, skills, and communication were vital in providing continuity of care instead transition this sentence to you- write a sentence about you and continuity of care to show you know this concept. that sentence would end the paragraph nicely :up:.

these two particular events in my life, has shaped have shaped me into the person i am today and my pursuit of wanting to pursue a career as a nurse, so i can help others and feel good about it at the same time. nothing is more rewarding than assisting and restoring in the restoration of the greatest gift of all; dont use semicolon, use - health, when people are in need the most. i believe a true compassionate and caring person such as i, will always be blessed and looked upon as a positive role model for providing excellent care to the less fortunate population. i understand where you are going with this sentence and you should reword it a little and make it concise. is working for the less fortunate a passion too? i would mention that in previous paragraph. i don't suggest you use "less fortunate" in this sentence because it can be interpreted different ways. you want to give them a clear picture of who you are. i look forward to being an advocate for those who are in need my patients. eventually, i would like to further my career and become a geriatric nurse practitioner where i can deliver the highest level quality of care for the elderly.

great job and best of luck. with a few tweaks you should be on your way........:)

i personally think your focus on geriatrics is good and should stay everywhere you mention it. it separates you from other applicants.

edit: it didn't post things i crossed out so i attached the actual word doc so you wouldn't be confused

essay.doc

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Specializes in ASC, Infection Control.

CNA Sam, those are good ideas and corrections - however, just remember to keep your tenses in symmetry - always use past-tense or present-tense in one sentence, don't mix them up.

ADOGLOVER, great job :) You did very well at making it personal and truly giving them a feel of why you'd be a great pick for the program. Best of luck to you!

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Specializes in Peds OR as RN, Peds ENT as NP.

That is why you always need more than one eye!

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thanks, i really appreciate it you guys

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I don't know if this post is still active but I could use someones input on my short essay on why I want to be a nurse.

My experience in a healthcare setting inspired my interest in nursing. I am currently a certified nurses aide and have been in practice for 8 years. My passion for taking care of others is why I want to be a nurse. Nursing is not just a profession, it is an opportunity to make a difference in someones life.

I have had my own personal experience that struck a chord. I was in a car accident a few years back . A couple of nurses were headed home from their shift at our local hospital and immediately stopped to see what they could do to help. They assesed my injuries to make sure none were life threatening while we waited for an ambulance. I was scared and in pain but those two nurses were my anchor in my time of need. They held and comforted me at my worst. It didn't matter that they were tired from being on their feet for 12 hours taking care of patients, or that their families were waiting for them at home. What mattered was that someone was in trouble and they put my needs before their own. The selflessness and compassion I witnessed reflected in the way they cared for me.

I have been given the opporotunity to develop my skills to become the best nurse I can be. Learning to treat patient illness, help maintain health, and better their quality of life. Becoming a nurse is like winning the metaphorical lottery, where wealth isn't measured in money, but in the knowledge you aquire and the reward you recieve in touching someone's life.

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