I need your opinion..please!

TheCommuter, BSN, RN · Jan 12, 2006

You're being honest, and I think the board will probably appreciate your honesty at face value.

Illness is a valid excuse for not performing well in school. After all, you cannot fully focus on higher-level needs such as education if your health and safety are being threatened by a medical affliction.

Good luck to you!!! :)

Daytonite, BSN, RN · Jan 12, 2006

as long as i can remember, i have wanted to be a nurse. i love being able to help others and make them smile. my fascination with the human body and how it works has motivated me to pursue a career in nursing. for me, being involved in healing others and seeing the process in action is what makes nursing such a rewarding profession.i consider myself a very dedicated, diligent, and goal oriented individual. i set high expectations for myself and feel confident in my work. i take pride in the things i accomplish because i know that i have given it my all. having the inner strength to accept the decisions that you make is important in nursing. being competent and confident in my work is a strength i see for myself as a nurse. also, my ability to think fast on my feet and make decisions quickly is a strength. nurses are expected to make decisions under extreme conditions in an instant. i see myself as self sufficient yet capable of working well in a team setting. when ever i am put in a situation where i am required to work with a team, i make sure that not only am i able to rely on the people i am working with, but also know that they will rely on me. in nursing, most situations require a team effort so it is important that reliance and trust with other nurses and doctors is present.
the summer following graduation from high school in 2003, i became very ill and spent several weeks in the hospital. it took a long time (for the doctors) to properly diagnose my condition, perform surgery and repair the problem. to maintain my health insurance it was necessary for me to be enrolled in college as a full time student. during my first semester of college i was in and out of the hospital while i was recovering. i was not able to perform my best in school. the grades i received during this very difficult recovery period are not indicative of my dedication toward my goal. (here is a good place to talk about how your grades have improved) (you need an ending or summation here.)

i took the liberty of making a couple of changes in your last paragraph. you need to edit for agreement of tense throughtout the essay. i would also refer to a thesaurus and try not to repeat the same words in any two successive sentences. the writing just stops and kind of leaves the reader hanging on waiting for you to say something more or to sum up. you need an ending. otherwise, the ideas and organization of the essay sound ok to me and this is, i think, one of the most important things they will look for. the other will be grammer and flow of the writing. this is just my opinion, so don't feel that i know what i'm talking about. :wink2:

NaomieRN · Jan 12, 2006

If I were you, I would go to a college writing lab and ask them to assist you before submitting it. It does not hurt to have an English Teacher reads it and put the right words in the paragraph to make sounds very interesting. The essay sounds ok to me, and I agree with Daytonite.

**RosesrReder, BSN, MSN, RN** · Jan 12, 2006

I think it's very good.

Angels' · Jan 13, 2006

futurenurse85:

I wish you well with your "Supporting Statement" essay.

:) :) Welcome to the All Nurses Forums

and wishing you the best in all of your Nursing career :) :)

A Returning Student :)

Angels’

"Footsteps In The Sand"

beepeadoo · Jan 13, 2006

[color=maroon]supporting statement
[color=maroon]please refer to the instructions below for the statement required by the school to which you are applying.
[color=maroon]school[color=maroon] of [color=maroon]nursing[color=maroon]
[color=maroon]please provide information that you believe supports your application. such information might include discussion of health-related experience, work experience, personal experiences affecting grades; your strengths and weaknesses; your rationale for choice of profession. please explain any interruptions or breaks in your education. your statement will be used by the admissions committee in their deliberation.
as long as i can remember, i have wanted to be a nurse. i love being able to help others and make them smile. my fascination with the human body and how it works has motivated me to pursue a career in nursing. for me, being involved in healing others and seeing the process in action is what makes nursing such a rewarding profession.
i consider myself a very dedicated, diligent, and goal oriented individual. i set high expectations for myself and feel confident in my work. i take pride in the things i accomplish because i know that i have given it my all. having the inner strength to accept the decisions that you make is important in nursing. being competent and confident in my work is a strength i see for myself as a nurse. also, my ability to think fast on my feet and make decisions quickly is a strength. nurses are expected to make decisions under extreme conditions in an instant. i see myself as self sufficient yet capable of working well in a team setting. when ever i am put in a situation where i am required to work with a team, i make sure that not only am i able to rely on the people i am working with, but also know that they will rely on me. in nursing, most situations require a team effort so it is important that reliance and trust with other nurses and doctors is present.
the summer following graduation from high school in 2003, i became very ill and spent several weeks in the hospital. it took a long time to properly diagnose my condition and surgery was performed in late august to fix the problem. in order to maintain my health insurance, it was necessary for me to be enrolled in college as a full time student. throughout my first semester of college, most of my time was spent in and out of the hospital. because my main focus was directed towards recovering, i was not able to perform my best in school. the grades i received during this very difficult recovery period are not indicative of my dedication toward my goal.
ok, so just a little background information..the summer after high school, i was diagnosed with superior mesenteric artery syndrome. my first semester in college i got 3 b's and 1 c. my second semester i got all b's. and since my third semester i've made all a's..i just finished my fifth semester. do you think the school will look at how my grades have progressed over the years? i'm a little confused on how much to write for this section of my application b/c i'm not sure if they're wanting like a lengthy essay or just tell a little bit about yourself. are any of you applying to utmb..if so, what did you do for this section of the application? anyway, please tell me what you think of what i have written and if i should change/add anything. thank you sooooo much!!! good luck to you all!

ok here's just a thought. i'd tell them specifically what you had going on. think about your audience. these are people who understand medicine. they are going to know what you were up against and there is a good chance that they'll be impressed that you didn't flunk out altogether. turn it from a negative into a positive. life learning is not always in the classroom, and not always reflected in grades. use this opportunity to help clarify from them how much you learned about yourself, and your chosen goal. tell them how you gained wisdom in being on the other side of the equation, as a patient, and how that will make you such a better nurse. don't apologize for this. my god, you got three b's and a c after your diagnosis? and all a's since? toot your horn! that's impressive! it's all about spin isn't it? something like, "and in spite of my diagnosis, and my major surgery in august, i was able to finish that next semester with four classes and maintain an xxx.xxx average. that experience brought me a new perspective and a new drive, and since then, i've had excellent grades..."

of course they'll look at how your grades have progressed. heck. it's supposed to get harder and you've done better. it will be very clear to them exactly what has gone on. but it's up to you to let them know how much better you are because of it. not that you got by, but that you're actually better for it.

good luck!!!!