Too much fluff in new grad resume? LMK!

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In microsoft word, this resume takes up 2 1/2 pages. It's not even that impressive so I'm starting to think a lot of it is "fluff" that no HR manager wants to see. Here it goes:

Jane Doe

30 Doll Court, Middleofnowhere, XX 10418

H: 9xx-xxx-xxxx | C: 9xx-xxx-xxxx | [email protected]

Professional Profile

Graduate nursing student seeking position as a Registered Nurse in an environment that will promote growth of knowledge and skills within the healthcare team. As a nursing student, I have had the following experiences to develop my clinical and critical thinking skills:

  • Experience in acute care, long term care, intensive care, comfort care and from collaboration with Registered Nurses and other members within the healthcare team.
  • Ability to safely and effectively apply the nursing process within a holistic framework.
  • Experience with many different disease processes and co-morbidities, with much experience with CHF, DM, acute and chronic renal failure, bowel obstructions, post-op patients, COPD, pneumonia and CVA's.

Education

Coolidge College. Coolidge, NY

Associate of Applied Science: Nursing, 2014.

Wiffleball Community College. Wiffle, NY

Associate of Arts: Liberal Arts and Science, 2011.

Work History

Coolidge College Alumni Association. Coolidge, NY

04/2013-03/2014

Student Phonathon Caller

  • Informed alumni of new programs, events, and construction at the college.
  • Raised funds to support college programs, academic departments and student scholarships.
  • Established rapport with Alfred State Alumni.
  • Gained skills in communication, marketing/sales and problem-solving.
  • Data entry.
  • Received award for raising the highest average dollar during the Fall semester of 2013.

Trailside Café. Silver Hills, NY

05/2013-08/2013

Juicer/Barista

  • Prepared smoothies, fresh juices, breakfast and coffee drinks.
  • Promoted menu options and educated customers on the nutritional benefits.
  • Inventory checks and organization of the store and the warehouse.
  • Thrived in a short-staffed, and fast-paced environment.

The Market. Silver Hills, NY

04/2013-08/2013

Cook/Cashier

  • Cooked breakfast and prepared sandwiches.
  • Stocked shelves and other supplies.
  • Handled lottery transactions.

A.C.E. Silver Hills, NY

08/2010-08/2012

Telephone Operator

  • Taking urgent and non-urgent messages for doctors and hospitals and dispatching per client protocol while working in a fast-paced environment.
  • Data entry
  • Obtained excellent communication skills.
  • Supervising and mentoring new employees.

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Volunteer Experience

Nursing Skills Tutor. September 2013-December 2013.

Taught fundamental nursing skills to a group of first semester nursing students. Guided students to perform skills safely and effectively and tailored teaching style based on individual needs.

Clinical Experience

LONG TERM CARE:

Rehab and Nursing Center. Coolidge, NY.

October 2012-November 2012.

MEDICAL/SURGICAL:

Memorial Hospital. Coolidge, NY.

November 2012-December 2012.

Nick's Memorial Hospital. Coolidge, NY.

January 2013-May 2013.

St Peter's Hospital. Coolidge, NY.

September 2013-December 2013.

January 2014-April 2014.

SPECIAL ROTATIONS/EXPERIENCES:

Nick's Memorial Hospital. Coolidge, NY.

Newborn nursery (8 hours), C-section delivery, Respiratory Therapy (8 hours), Operating Room and PACU (8 hours), observation of a Swan-Ganz catheterization procedure and experience with close monitoring of the patient post-procedure (8 hours).

St. Peter's Hospital. Coolidge, NY.

Intensive Care Unit (24 hours) including care of long-term ventilator patient, Operating Room (7 hours), Emergency Department(18 hours), OB/GYN (6 hours), Group Leadership assignment involving management of care for multiple patients (24 hours), Preceptorship on a medical/surgical unit (16 hours).

New Horizons. Coolidge, NY.

November 29th, 2013. Mental Health Rotation. (6 Hours).

Addiction Treatment Center. Coolidge, NY.

November 30th, 2013. Mental Health Rotation. (6 Hours).

Stony Point Pediatrics. Coolidge, NY.

April 10th, 2014. Pediatric Rotation. (6 Hours).

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Now that I look at this, the font is terrible and harsh on the eyes.

Please give me all the criticism you want.

Thank you!! :D

I would take out everything in the "professional profile" and do not list student clinicals as clinical experience. it really isn't.

have a section for licenses/certifications where you put your RN/ACLS/BLS/etc. i also have a section for references, or you could write "references available upon request"

Specializes in Leadership, Psych, HomeCare, Amb. Care.

"Graduate nursing student seeking position as a Registered Nurse in an environment that will promote growth of knowledge and skills within the healthcare team. As a nursing student, I have had the following experiences to develop my clinical and critical thinking skills:

Experience in acute care, long term care, intensive care, comfort care and from collaboration with Registered Nurses and other members within the healthcare team.

Ability to safely and effectively apply the nursing process within a holistic framework.

Experience with many different disease processes and co-morbidities, with much experience with CHF, DM, acute and chronic renal failure, bowel obstructions, post-op patients, COPD, pneumonia and CVA's."

You are not in grad school: you are not a Graduate nursing student. You are a nurse ing school graduate. You don't have experience in these areas, you've had experiences. Experiences similar to every other new grad. As a new grad, you have not had the opportunity to use the nurse process safely and effectively.

Hiring managers skim resumes. At first glance, it appears you are experienced. When the recruiter realizes their error, they will torpedo your resume. Keep it accurate, short, and sweet.

In my new grad resume, I focused on my clinical experience and did not even mention my past work history as it did not apply. I would not even mention your past work history, that's for your application. Like someone else said, no one cares how long your clinical rotations were either. Do not list a certain group of patients or special skills observed, unless you are trying to seem more competent for the unit...

Specializes in retired LTC.

I agree with the comment from MrChicagoRN - I thought OP was a grad student in an MSN program. I was thinking the resume was very problematic for a such a student. Then I realized that OP was a newbie.

There is a lot of fluff as other PPs comment. But their suggestions are very appropriate. Gives this antique one (me) suggestions for my own resume & documents.

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