Suggestions for appeal letter

BuckyBadgerRN, ASN, RN · Jun 7, 2015

I'm glad you were able to pull something from that. Seriously, I have NO idea what the OP is looking for. It is obvious that English is not his/her first language and I wonder if that was a large part in why s/he failed the class(es) to begin with?

I don't think she is actually appealing her failure.
Looks like a an essay/letter asking for a second chance to repeat the class. She has to reapply for the rest to the program, and this is required.
As for the original poster, maybe your failing fundamentals has something to do with the language barrier. This letter, isn't very good in my opinion.

caliotter3 · Jun 7, 2015

I imagine this is not very politically correct, but OP, I strongly recommend you take an English writing course. You might have excellent interpersonal skills, but your English writing skills are going to get in the way of things you want to do. You will have a much easier time of anything you attempt if you build a solid foundation with your communication skills.
Good luck to you.

A better command of the English language will also help you in all of your courses. Who knows how many test questions you may have missed because you may have missed the meaning behind the question.

Meriwhen, ASN, BSN, MSN, RN · Jun 7, 2015

After I have accepted to the nursing program at SCC I've understood what the real meaning of nursing so I am very connected to the nursing career. In my first semester nursing class I did not pass the course because I did not enough time to study the material.

You admitted that the reason you failed was your own fault. You don't really have much to appeal.

If you have the chance to retake the class, then retake it without question or complaint, and learn from your past mistakes. Nursing school only gets tougher from here on in, and it takes more than "I always wanted to be a nurse" to be successful in school. It takes a lot of hard work and time...as you've just seen firsthand.

If you are out of the program because of this failure, then you can certainly try appealing the decision...but the fact remains that it's no one else's fault but yours that you failed. And "I always wanted..." doesn't exactly do a lot to sway academic boards. You can and should certainly try to appeal, but don't pin a lot of hope on an appeal being successful.

I'm sorry if this isn't what you wanted to hear, but better I'm honest with you than give you false hope.

I sincerely wish you the best of luck whatever happens.

42pines · Jun 7, 2015

Welcome to America Misrak, and in reality most here who have criticized your writing have missed the point, at least to a degree. It would not surprise me if you have a background as a MD, or perhaps you already have a long experience as an RN. Few realize that a MD from Ukraine, even a highly respected one, cannot practice medicine here and must repeat virtually all courses, in essence, start over. I suspect that you have no trouble at all mastering the subject of nursing.

Your post is well written and if you read it to anyone here, meaning said it aloud, not one of us would criticize it. But speaking and writing is an entirely different thing. I can see how much effort you put into it and it must be exceedingly frustrating getting so much negative criticism.

The reason people have difficulty with your post is your writing lacks the ability to be in accordance with what it is you are thinking. It has conceptual and syntactical errors that simply make it difficult to discern exactly what is you are trying to convey. For instance, I believe as pikiestudent2 did, that you want to appeal,â€ to the person who may or may not let you continue in the nursing course of study. There is a big difference in wanting to appeal to someone and that of entering into a formal action to appeal = change/overturnâ€ a decision.

I understand what it is that you're trying to do. It's simple. You tried to hold a job, perhaps manage a family, and take courses. Overload. Now you understand and have made adjustments and feel that you can now do what is necessary to pass. It's simple.

How to wire a letter asking to be allowed to continue is something that you cannot do, that is my opinion. It would take several hundred hours or more of English study for you to get to the point where you can convey your feelings clearly and write your request in a manner that impresses a review board. You cannot do this on short notice.

You could ask whomever will make the decision to allow you to stay and continue to hear you in person, verbally, and bypass writing entirely.

You also can ask a native speaker, perhaps a friend, or perhaps someone at a community center that helps immigrants to write your letter. If you can find an accomplished teacher /person who grew up speaking Russian (or Ukrainian) as the case may be, but someone who has lived in America for >20 years who is totally comfortable speaking English, that would be ok because they can easily understand you and your thoughts. You are also welcome to PM me here, and I'll try to write it for you.

For the group: Watch the movie Red October, it's a great movie, or I think so. It's about a submarine and the captain is Marko Aleksandrovich Ramius. Misrak wrote: I would like to see myself to make patient feel better.â€ Well, I can literally see/hear Ramius in the same accent that Misrak (of course I am guessing)probably uses say: I would like to see myself to make submarine better.â€ The structure of the sentence is classically Russian/Ukranian. Were one of us, on the floor, let's say, in a Med/Surg unit hear I would like to see myself to make patient feel betterâ€ from a Russian or Ukraninian we would not, for a moment fault them. In reality, many of us enjoy accents and the Russian accent is unique as well as its unique syntactical structure.

And as a reminder to all, I am not sure there is one single person here whose ancestors did NOT come here once upon a time as an immigrant. (Do we have a member/members who are 100% native American Indian)? (Note: Misrak if you are not Russian or Ukrainian I do apologize, but I'll be very surprised).

Misrak Bereka · Jun 7, 2015

I am a Nursing student at SCC. I would like to ask you about my nursing career. A nursing career is my Ultimate goal, because I like to see myself helping patients feel better and comfortable. To meet my goal I have to cut my work hours and study more in order to pass the nursing course. It must be said that nursing is the only thing gives me a sense of purpose in life.

After I have been accepted into the nursing program at SCC I've understood the nursing Profession which makes me very connected to nursing as a career. In my first semester nursing class I did not pass the course because I did not have enough time to study the material. Now I would like to continue my nursing education therefore I am preparing myself to give more time for studying the material. I would do whatever it takes until I can see my mind, body and soul giving good quality patient care.

I am focused in safe and quality patient care, such as how to read a patient's feelings in a physiological and psychological way. I am good at handling many types of patients' behaviors such as calming agitated, anxious, and or distressed patients. Patient are very sensitive to our actions and words so I am accountable and responsible for my actions and words for patients in my care.

I need your help to build my nursing skill at SCC. In my first semester nursing program, I have learned about nursing skills to promote health, prevent illness, restore health, and facilitate coping with a disability or death. I want to be a skillful nurse in our society. I Hope you will give me a chance to grow my nursing knowledge at SCC.

Thank you for your help.

Misrak Bereka · Jun 7, 2015

]My first Language is Hebrew Language. I am working on my English Language just like anybody who likes to learn second language.

Misrak Bereka · Jun 8, 2015

Thank you very much for the comment. You understand my situation very well. I have posted the second version of my letter you can help me with proofreading.

Thank you so much.

SierraBravo · Jun 8, 2015

I am a Nursing student at SCC. I would like to ask you about my nursing career. A nursing career is my Ultimate goal, because I like to see myself helping patients feel better and comfortable. To meet my goal I have to cut my work hours and study more in order to pass the nursing course. It must be said that nursing is the only thing gives me a sense of purpose in life.
After I have been accepted into the nursing program at SCC I've understood the nursing Profession which makes me very connected to nursing as a career. In my first semester nursing class I did not pass the course because I did not have enough time to study the material. Now I would like to continue my nursing education therefore I am preparing myself to give more time for studying the material. I would do whatever it takes until I can see my mind, body and soul giving good quality patient care.
I am focused in safe and quality patient care, such as how to read a patient's feelings in a physiological and psychological way. I am good at handling many types of patients' behaviors such as calming agitated, anxious, and or distressed patients. Patient are very sensitive to our actions and words so I am accountable and responsible for my actions and words for patients in my care.
I need your help to build my nursing skill at SCC. In my first semester nursing program, I have learned about nursing skills to promote health, prevent illness, restore health, and facilitate coping with a disability or death. I want to be a skillful nurse in our society. I Hope you will give me a chance to grow my nursing knowledge at SCC.
Thank you for your help.

I just can't... Beyond the copious and obvious grammatical issues here, I'm so confused. Are you currently a student? Are you on probation or something because you didn't pass a class? Did you get dismissed from the program and are now trying to get back in (as evidenced by multiple appeal letters?) I understand that English may not be your first language, but that doesn't preclude you from being responsible for writing and communicating in a clear and concise manner, particularly as a nurse.

OrganizedChaos, LVN · Jun 8, 2015

I just can't... Beyond the copious and obvious grammatical issues here, I'm so confused. Are you currently a student? Are you on probation or something because you didn't pass a class? Did you get dismissed from the program and are now trying to get back in?

This is the second post she made. She is trying to get back into the nursing program & English is her second language.

cayenne06, MSN, CNM · Jun 8, 2015

Was that the letter? There is a lot of editing that needs to be done. I'd start by trimming down 90% of the stuff about how committed you are to nursing, and replace it with concrete examples of how you plan to remediate. Did you look up your school's policy about readmittance after failing?

There are a large number of grammar and style errors here. I would also rethink some of your word choices. The letter is very hard to follow overall- I don't even think you directly stated that you are asking for readmission.

You might consider bringing this to the Resource Room at your school- even if you are not currently enrolled i bet they would help you. I mean this with kindness, but the writing style is not what I would expect from someone in a nursing program. I'm not trying to insinuate that you aren't smart-obviously you are intelligent enough to get into nursing school! But plenty of smart people never get the opportunity to become fluent readers or persuasive writers. Do you think you might benefit from some tutoring in this area? If your reading/composition skills are not where they should be, that might be a big reason why you were not successful this time around.

eta- ah, just saw that english is not your first language. I'd definitely recommend some tutoring/classes in this area then, assuming you are in an english speaking program. It will probably greatly enhance your ability to study effectively. You can't get far in any difficult/specialized educational program without being able to persuasively and professionally write in the primary language of the country you are residing in.

Being bilingual is a huge asset in nursing though!

caliotter3 · Jun 8, 2015

"My primary strategy for achieving success, if allowed back in the nursing program at Spell Out Name of School, is to cut down on my hours at my job. I have identified that working full time and adding overtime to my schedule seriously impeded my school work last semester and in my analysis of the situation, was the biggest reason for my failure. My serious approach is demonstrated by the fact that I have already discussed this with my employer and a reduced schedule, consisting of no more than twenty hours in any week, starts on June 15. A second strategy that I am working on, is to obtain a one on one tutor. I have connected with Ms. Smith in the Learning Resources Center, who has paired me with Susanna Smith, an above average sophomore nursing student. We have come to an agreement for her to provide tutoring for nursing classes and are only waiting upon me to start fresh in the upcoming term. A third strategy that I am pursuing to help myself improve, is a dedicated schedule at the Learning Resources Center for help in remedial English. I believe that improving my English language ability will go far to ......."

As you can see, the above is somewhat easier to understand, and while maybe not grammatically perfect, an improvement over what you wrote. Get someone close to your situation to help you with this. You want to provide concrete examples of what you plan to do to be successful, not present clouds in the sky generalized statements about patient care, etc. Address the issues, not the philosophy behind you going to nursing school.

This is all I can do to help. I hope it gives you an idea of what you need to do, based on what your real problem is, as stated by the first poster. Good luck.

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