Nursing Entrance Essay (Plz Read)

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Specializes in Geriatics.

So this is my Nursing School Entrance Essay please tell me what you guys think

Essay Question : "What do you expect to obtain from this program?"

In this program I aspire to obtain all the necessary skills, techniques, and methods possible to be a thorough

and prudent nurse. I also plan to learn more about the different types of nursing, such as, geriatrics, pediatrics,

or even psychiatric. I'm interested in learning new things about the human anatomy, and also the dynamics of the human's physiology. I hope to learn the technical aspect of caring for people to compliment my natural love and passion for nursing.

Working as a C.N.A for almost 4 years now has made me gain a curiosity and interest for more advanced levels of nursing. During this time I have gained a love and a new respect for this profession. One can't help but notice the importance of this career, along with the satisfying feeling that helping another human-being can give you. Being a C.N.A, I know what that feels like, but now I want to take it to the next level. I've eagerly observed nurses perform various important tasks including save lives. I expect to be taught all the skills required to emulate this behavior.

From this program, I plan to become more familiar with the theory of nursing. Upon learning the technical aspect of being a nurse. I plan to learn more about a professional nurse's persona. I hope to learn the appearance, speech, behavior, and work ethnic of a professional nurse.

I've seen some less-than-perfect nurses. I've also seen some not-so-good nurses, and I've seen some flat out bad nurses. But its not my place to judge them or their nursing skills. My goal is NOT to be a perfect nurse, but to be the best nurse that God has given me the capability to be. That is what I expect to obtain from this program.

Constructive Comments please.....

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Specializes in NICU.

Wow this essay was short and sweet. Is there a maximum length that you can write? I liked most of it. I definitely think the CNA experience will work to your favor! I might get rid of the part where it says "various important tasks including saving lives" and be a little more specific. I think adding specific things like what you do to go above and beyond in your patient's care or how you actively try to be knowledgeable about nursing at your current job would be great topics. I don't like the last paragraph because to me it sounds kind of critical of other nurses and has a negative feeling. I wouldn't even add you don't want to be perfect since it is a given no one is anyways. Good luck and I enjoyed reading your essay! :)

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Specializes in Geriatics.

Thanks for the tips, and the essay only has to be one page. Thanks so much!

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Specializes in ICU, ER, EP,.

I'm concise, so personally....

1. skills, techniques and methods... all the same word salad, pick one

2. The comparison of nurses... the good the bad and the ugly is a no no in my opinion. Not being an RN yourself, you're not in a position to make that determination. You can certainly state your commitment to applying yourself 100% in your own words.

3. Because this is part of an application process I personally avoid all references to my religion as it can be grounds for discrimination, even though "god given ability" is general, you certainly don't want to arm someone who may think thoughts and use any info against you.

4. My CNA's here tonight stated they did not get nursing theory in their classes.... so maybe a re-write about that becoming more familiar in nursing theory.

Wish you the best, I hope this helps!

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Hello~

I agree with ZooKeeper3. I will also suggest the use of transitional words and/or phrases in some of your sentences like for instance, such as, specifically, etc. There are many lists available online.

Best wishes!

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Specializes in Operating Room.

I would delete the last paragraph. It sounds critical and judgemental. You should talk about you and want your ambitions are. Use wording that projects that you are going to build on the skills and knowledge you already have because you are a CNA. I would spell out CNA and not use abbreviations. Also, watch out for complete sentences and proper sentence structure.

Good luck!!!!

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Specializes in ICU, ER, EP,.

I didn't want to nit pick and add more, but I re-read this hours later. I'll never forget my college english professor who never allowed us to write in the first person.... your use of "I" is way too much. They know you are talking about you, the "I"... use the thesaurus and word programs to assist you in writing this from a personal standpoint. You should never have more than three "I's" in a letter, because we know it's from you.

Not snarky or nasty intended at all, all meant to help, and criticism is hard to "hear", but it's sent with the best intentions for your to succeed, I mean that!

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Specializes in OR, OB, EM, Flight, ICU, PACU.......

My $.02:

-Instead of thorough and prudent nurse,how about Professional Nurse.

-Too many "I"s. 'Nuff said.

-Definitely eliminate the last "nonjudgemental " paragraph!

-Don't "hope". "expect" and "plan". Use concrete words and ideas to convey your goals.

- Experience- Good.

- Length- Good.

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Specializes in Geriatics.

Thanks SOOOO Much Zookeeper 3. I will definitely be emailing you my revision!!!

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Specializes in Trauma Surgery, Nursing Management.

OP, I am PMing you.

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Specializes in Trauma Surgery, Nursing Management.

OP, did you get my PM?

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