Critique my resignation letter

[Mrs.RN85]

I have found a better paying RN position at the hospital I have wanted to work at since nursing school I graduated over a year ago and have finally got my foot in the door. I enjoy my current job and would like to stay prn if possible but can't turn down a $5 base rate pay raise with higher shift diffs. So let me have it tell me what to fix with this letter. Thanks in advance.

XXX, RN

Street

City

date

XXX, RN, BSN

Director of Medical Surgical Unit

XXX

street

city

Dear XXX,

Thank you for the past seven months of full time employment. I have benefited greatly from my experiences with XXX. I am extremely appreciative for the opportunities to learn and contribute to this outstanding Health Care organization.

At this time, I regret to inform you I must resign from my full time registered nurse position on the Medical Surgical Unit at XXX. I genuinely enjoy working on this unit and would be delighted to continue employment on a PRN basis.

This letter is my official fifteen day notice, effective immediately. My final date of full time employment will be date. Again, I appreciate the opportunity to work at this facility and would like to continue on a PRN basis if possible.

I would hope that, if in the future, should the opportunity again arise for XXX and me to engage in a mutually benefiting relationship, that consideration would extend to me.

Thank you,

XXX, RN

[sandanrnstudent]

It looks good to me other than I wouldn't mention the hospital by name (use a pronoun or something else) three times (greeting, first sentence, in the middle). It just seems excessive to me.

Also, I think you may want to add one more sentence close to the end so it will flow a little better. But if not, I think its sufficient as is.

sandan rnstudent

[chihuahuaman]

You might want to put the "would like to continue on a PRN basis if possible" later or get rid of the first instance. It sounds like you are just repeating yourself.

The syntax of the last sentence is wonky and the wording is convoluted. Perhaps "I hope to continue our professional relationship and look forward to future opportunities with XXX"

Erik

Edited to add:

Actually, I think you could get rid of "and would be delighted to continue employment on a PRN basis." You've said it near the end which is what will stay in their mind and they will take away from this letter. The word "delighted" sounds like you are going to start giggling! ;-) Perhaps "appreciate the opportunity to..."might be more appropriate if you decide to keep it?

[Whispera, MSN, RN]

it's kind of repetitive, but otherwise looks fine. here's what i'd cut out, using a copy of what you wrote, possible cut-outs in red:

thank you for the past seven months of full time employment. i have benefited greatly from my experiences with xxx. i am extremely appreciative for the opportunities to learn and contribute to this outstanding health care organization.

at this time, i regret to inform you i must resign from my full time registered nurse position on the medical surgical unit at xxx. i genuinely enjoy working on this unit and would be delighted to continue employment on a prn basis.

this letter is my official fifteen day notice, effective immediately. my final date of full time employment will be date. again, i appreciate the opportunity to work at this facility and would like to continue on a prn basis if possible.

i would hope that, if in the future, should the opportunity again arise for xxx and me to engage in a mutually benefiting relationship, that consideration would extend to me.

one other comment i have is that you are very flowerly in your adjectives, and maybe you could tone some of it down a bit ("greatly, extremely, outstanding, genuinely").

before you leave, be sure your manager knows you'd still like prn work. it's possible that can start immediately...

[tex42cares]

i have found a better paying rn position at the hospital i have wanted to work at since nursing school i graduated over a year ago and have finally got my foot in the door. i enjoy my current job and would like to stay prn if possible but can't turn down a $5 base rate pay raise with higher shift diffs. so let me have it tell me what to fix with this letter. thanks in advance.

xxx, rn

street

city

date

xxx, rn, bsn

director of medical surgical unit

xxxx

human resources

xxx

street

city

dear xxx,

i have enjoyed working with my team at xxx. i am very appreciative for the opportunity to contribute to this outstanding health care organization. at this time, i regret to inform you i am resigning from my full time position on the medical surgical unit at xxx. this letter today will serve as my official fifteen day notice, as required . my final day employment will be ______.

i genuinely have enjoyed working with a fantastic and dedicated team on this unit and would be available immediately to continue employment on a prn basis.

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thank you,

xxx, rn

xxx, rn, bsn

director of medical surgical unit

xxxx

human resources

xxx

street

city

dear xxx,

i have enjoyed working with my team at xxx. i am very appreciative for the opportunity to contribute to this outstanding health care organization. at this time, i regret to inform you i am resigning from my full time position on the medical surgical unit at xxx. this letter today will serve as my official fifteen day notice, as required . my final day employment will be ______.

i genuinely have enjoyed working with a fantastic and dedicated team on this unit and would be available immediately to continue employment on a prn basis.

(re-evaluated this made changes)

[Mrs.RN85]

ok i revised the guts does it sound better?

thank you for the past seven months of full time employment. i have benefited greatly from my experiences with xxx. i am extremely appreciative for the opportunities to learn and contribute to this outstanding health care organization.

i regret to inform you i must resign from my full time registered nurse position on the medical surgical unit at xxx.

this letter is my official fifteen day notice, effective immediately. my final date of full time employment will be date. i genuinely enjoy working on this unit and would be available to continue employment on a prn basis.

i wish to continue our professional relationship. however if that is not possible, i hope that consideration would extend to me in future employment opportunities with xxx.

[tex42cares]

Please make sure you include yourself,HR and your Direct Manager.... CYA

[GadgetRN71, ASN, RN]

It's fine.

[hiddencatRN, BSN, RN]

I have found a better paying RN position at the hospital I have wanted to work at since nursing school I graduated over a year ago and have finally got my foot in the door. I enjoy my current job and would like to stay prn if possible but can't turn down a $5 base rate pay raise with higher shift diffs. So let me have it tell me what to fix with this letter. Thanks in advance.

XXX, RN

Street

City

date

XXX, RN, BSN

Director of Medical Surgical Unit

XXX

street

city

Dear XXX,

Thank you for the past seven months of full time employment. I have benefited greatly from my experiences with XXX. I am extremely appreciative for the opportunities to learn and contribute to this outstanding Health Care organization.

At this time, I regret to inform you I must resign from my full time registered nurse position on the Medical Surgical Unit at XXX. I genuinely enjoy working on this unit and would be delighted to continue employment on a PRN basis.

This letter is my official fifteen day notice, effective immediately. My final date of full time employment will be date. Again, I appreciate the opportunity to work at this facility and would like to continue on a PRN basis if possible.

I would hope that, if in the future, should the opportunity again arise for XXX and me to engage in a mutually benefiting relationship, that consideration would extend to me.

Thank you,

XXX, RN

Here's what I'd do:

Dear XXX,

I am writing to inform you that I am officially resigning from my position as a full time RN on the medical surgical unit. My final date of employment will be X.

I have benefited greatly from my experiences with XXX and am extremely appreciative for the opportunities to learn and contribute to this outstanding Health Care organization.

I have genuinely enjoyed working on this unit and would be delighted to continue employment on a PRN basis.

Thank you,

XXX, RN

Short, sweet, to the point.

[tex42cares]

Here's what I'd do:

Dear XXX,

I am writing to inform you that I am officially resigning from my position as a full time RN on the medical surgical unit. My final date of employment will be X.

I have benefited greatly from my experiences with XXX and am extremely appreciative for the opportunities to learn and contribute to this outstanding Health Care organization.

I have genuinely enjoyed working on this unit and would be delighted to continue employment on a PRN basis.

Thank you,

XXX, RN

Short, sweet, to the point.

Go with this option - Short and to the point, make sure you ,HR and Mgr gets a copy -that way no one can say you walked off

[L8RRN]

When I changed to PRN status on my floor, I did not need to resign. I just applied for a PRN opening and they changed me from full time to PRN since I was still an employee. Do you really need to resign? Could you just talk to your manager about changing employment status? If there are no PRN openings, then you could resign.

Good luck

[netglow, ASN, RN]

ok i revised the guts does it sound better?

thank you for the past seven months of full time employment. i have benefited greatly from my experiences with xxx. i am extremely appreciative for the opportunities to learn and contribute to this outstanding health care organization.

i regret to inform you i must resign from my full time registered nurse position on the medical surgical unit at xxx.

this letter is my official fifteen day notice, effective immediately. my final date of full time employment will be date. i genuinely enjoy working on this unit and would be available to continue employment on a prn basis.

i wish to continue our professional relationship. however if that is not possible, i hope that consideration would extend to me in future employment opportunities with xxx.

you should delete what is in red. sounds unprofessional.