Cover Letter advice please

[Srubio92]

Hi all! Im a newly licensed RN and this is my first cover letter. Really need some constructive advice from all you pros out there as to whether or not this is a good start. Thankyou in advance :)

My info

Date

Company

Address

City, state zip

RE: Registered Nurse position

Dear Hiring Manager,

I am writing to state my interest in your Job advertisement for the position as an RN with the We care Health System. I believe I am a qualified, avid candidate for this position, considering my previous 3 year experience as an LPN and recent hands-on clinical experience as a newly Licensed RN. Throughout my extensive Nursing career, I have acquired an exceptional knowledge base and many vital skills that would pair excellently with your opening.

These well developed skills are as follows:

In-depth health assessment technique

Assigning appropriate nursing diagnosis's

Ability to implement proper nursing interventions & follow-up

Proficiency in educating patients & families using open ended communication and return demonstration

Aptitude for effectively participating with all members of the Health Care Team

Furthermore, acknowledging We care to be deemed as a teaching Hospital goes a long way when considering my education. Completing my clinical experience as an LPN and RN at We care North, We care Memorial & We care South gives me an edge regarding familiarity with equipment, software, and procedures. Additionally, We care has been ranked top hospital in South Florida by FindTheBest, I can conclude that your Hospital makes a great impact on all aspects of healthcare, down to all who come across this facility, such as employees, patients and students. I would find honor in becoming a part of this remarkable Health System.

My enclosed resume will provide you with supplementary information involving my nursing education, skills, and history. I honestly feel I can adequately fulfill this position and become a great asset to your company. I am quite excited to apply for this position and extremely grateful for this opportunity.

Sincerely,

Sashienne Rubio - R.N.

P.S. Thank you for taking the time to review my cover letter. I would be grateful for the opportunity to meet you, at the time of your convenience. Please feel free to contact me at [phone], to arrange a meeting or an interview. I look forward in hearing from you and thanks again for your consideration.

[MrChicagoRN, RN]

Overall it's good, but a too long.

And watch the superlatives. Avid? Exceptional? Be prepared to justify those terms in an interview. Also, 3 years is not anywhere close to being an extensive nursing career.

Remember, you want to sell, not oversell yourself.

[Srubio92]

Ok thanks! Yea I guess it's not lol feels like forever to me..but I'm having an issue with shortening it. I made a few minor changes, but don't know what I should take out & btw it's a bit less than 1 page.

Hi all! Im a newly licensed RN and this is my first cover letter. Really need some constructive advice from all you pros out there as to whether or not this is a good start. Thankyou in advance

My info

Date

Company

Address

City, state zip

RE: Registered Nurse position

Dear Hiring Manager,

I am writing to state my interest in your Job advertisement for the position as an RN with the We care Health System. I believe I am a qualified, avid candidate for this position, considering my previous 3 year experience as an LPN and recent hands-on clinical experience as a newly Licensed RN. Throughout my nursing career, I have acquired a considerably beneficial knowledge base and many vital skills that would pair excellently with your opening.

These well developed skills are as follows:

In-depth health assessment technique

Ability to implement proper nursing interventions & follow-up

Proficiency in educating patients & families using open ended communication and return demonstration

Aptitude for effectively participating with all members of the Health Care Team

Furthermore, acknowledging We care to be deemed as a teaching Hospital goes a long way when considering my education. Completing my clinical experience as an LPN and RN at We care North, South & Memorial, gives me an edge regarding familiarity with equipment, software, and procedures. Additionally, We care has been ranked top hospital in South Florida by FindTheBest, I can conclude that your Hospital makes a great impact on all aspects of healthcare, down to all who come across this facility, such as employees, patients and students. I would find honor in becoming a part of this remarkable Health System.

My enclosed resume will provide you with supplementary information involving my nursing education, skills, and history. I honestly feel I can adequately fulfill this position and become a great asset to your company. I am quite excited to apply for this position and extremely grateful for this opportunity.

Sincerely,

Sashienne Rubio - R.N.

P.S. Thank you for taking the time to review my cover letter. I would be grateful for the opportunity to meet you, at the time of your convenience. Please feel free to contact me at [phone], to arrange a meeting or an interview. I look forward in hearing from you and thanks again for your consideration.

[Bayat]

Let's prune it down to an extreme and see how y'all feel about it:

Sashienne Rubio, RN

Street address • City, State ZIP • 123-555-9876 • [email protected]

Date

Company

Address

City, state zip

. . .Is your staff still short a qualified Registered Nurse?

Dear Human Resources Professional,

I have a proven track record of:

. . .• Familiarity with the latest equipment, software, and procedures gained at We Care Health during clinical rotations.

. . .• Utilizing my 3-year LPN experience as well as recent RN hands-on experience.

. . .• Demonstrating beneficial knowledge bases and many vital skills We Care Health can gain from.

We Care Health makes a great impact on all aspects of healthcare. As a graduate RN, I understand the criticality of:

. . .• Implementing proper nursing interventions & follow-ups.

. . .• Applying In-depth health assessment techniques.

. . .• Proficiency in educating patients & families by using open ended communication and return demonstration to ensure their understanding for continued care.

. . .• Having an aptitude tor effectively participating with all members of the Health Care Team.

Though my resume is detailed and comprehensive, it cannot fully demonstrate the manner in which I have achieved success. Character, personality, and the ability to work in a team environment can be demonstrated in a personal meeting. I would welcome an interview at your earliest convenience. Thank you for your time and consideration. I am certain that I would become a valuable addition to your staff.

Respectfully yours,

Sashienne Rubio, RN

123-555-9876

[email protected]

P.S.: I've read recently my mentor was mentioned when FindTheBest ranked We Care Health as the top hospital in South Florida. Call me and I'll tell you a funny story during my rotations with her and why I so repect her.