Advice on Essay Q: Why did you choose nursing as a career?

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Hello all! Below I have pasted my first draft for the essay question: Why did you choose nursing as a career. Please give me constructive criticism or any advice. This is one of 8 essay questions in which I must answer. I will touch on healthcare experience, volunteering, and extracurricular in other categories. My hope was that this essay would stand out amongst others. I didn't want it to be cliche. Thoughts, suggestions?

I have spent a magnitude of time pondering the reasons why I have chosen nursing as a career. With many, this is a simple question to answer. They can pinpoint a specific moment in their life, when nursing just clicked with them personally. I, on the other hand, can not. Looking back, I struggle to recall times when I did not plan to pursue nursing. So, when I receive this question, I proceed to explain my childhood hobbies.

My parents were worried. It was a valid conclusion to make, as I watched them stare with widening eyes. As a little girl, I spent a vast amount time injuring my barbie dolls, stuffed animals, and my infant brother. I remember tearing limbs off my collectable dolls I had received for Christmas. I recall seating my stuffed animals in remote control cars and purposefully ramming the vehicle into walls. Then I would proceed to fly it off of a 'cliff', which typically, was the staircase. I used my mother's scrapbook supplies to artistically paint 'blood' all over my brother's tiny limbs.

After inflicting my toys and brother with fictional pain, off I would go with a blood pressure cuff in one hand, a first aid kit in the other, and a plastic stethoscope hanging around my neck. After tearing off arms, I would take gauze from the kit to mend the breaks. I would bandage the car wreck victims. I would clean the painted wounds off my baby brother. My parent's were never very pleased, as the first aid kit was constantly needing to be restocked. As a five year old, I never understood why they found my actions to be strange. Honestly, I still don't. As a child, I strived to heal others. To this very day, that has not changed. What has changed, however, are the following two things. First, the desire to have two significant letters following my name: Nurse Nancy, RN. Second, the passion to expand my knowledge of medical care past the first aid kit.

I never had that click when choosing nursing. That is not to say I have not experienced it, though. It clicks when I visit my nurse practitioner, Christi. While she talks me through the procedures she performs on me, it clicks.. When I enter a hospital and fill with excitement and ambition, it clicks. The decision was practically innate. Regards to the debate of nature versus nurture, Plato, I would have to side with you. I do not know why I chose nursing. Somedays, I believe it chose me.

Specializes in Critical Care, ED, Cath lab, CTPAC,Trauma.

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OP, I think we understood your intention with your essay. Historically, there have been nurses who harmed or even killed their patients so they could have the thrill of being the rescuer and "saving" them. We did not want the admissions team to think you were the next potential serial killer.

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I think you have some great points, but I would work on the grammar/wording. See attached for grammar suggestions.

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Please do not take this the wrong way, but you write as though you are in high school with the simple compound sentences. I am aware that is how high school students are expected to write, however, that style of writing makes any paper very mundane and boring to read. Keep in mind that many student write similarly; so if you want to stand out, be a little more colorful in your paper. Use transitional words and keep the dictation semi formal. I hope this helps.

Specializes in Critical Care, ED, Cath lab, CTPAC,Trauma.
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looks good to me

@MsDanielle. Which school is this for?

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OP, I think we understood your intention with your essay. Historically, there have been nurses who harmed or even killed their patients so they could have the thrill of being the rescuer and "saving" them. We did not want the admissions team to think you were the next potential serial killer.

(See Genene Jones)

Kind of like the fireman who sets off fires in his district so he can then ride the truck with his co-firemen and fight the fire.

I have recently applied to nursing school. Although an essay wasn't required during the application process, I am in the process of writing my own essay as to why I chose nursing for an Earn As You Learn program related to school (also not a requirement but I’m hoping for an edge). For me, it shouldn't be just about a person being a caring person or how she will benefit. I think most applicants are thinking in terms of what nursing can do for them. However, I think it's not unlike applying for a job; employers don't want to hear about what they can do for you but the other way around. What can you bring to the profession of nursing? What makes you stand out from the multitude of applicants? Your passion for healing others and learning does stand out but I can guarantee you many will write something similar to your rough draft. Look around this site, if you haven't already. Have you been on the ANA website or read the Code of Ethics for nurses? Read what novice and experienced nurses, students, etc., are saying. Nursing is a difficult field and it will take more than a healing nature to not only succeed but to further the profession. Nurses wear many hats and have to make difficult decisions in the interest of their patients, sometimes at the risk of their own jobs. Can you do this? If not, what type of personal growth do you feel is needed in order to be capable of this?

I guess what I'm trying to say is do your research, not just into the nursing field though. Truly look inside yourself as well. I truly believe in self-awareness and its necessity in life and any profession one chooses. Who are you as a person and how does that translate into nursing? Show the school that you really thought through this life-changing decision and stand out for all the right reasons.

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