my updated resume/cover letter. needing honest critiques

malicexmirage · Sep 19, 2012

so i kinda posted days ago but none replied, luckily someone from the real world (thru email means) helped me "up" my resume, but Im not really in the habit of always disturbing them as they are always busy and we have different times (other side of the earth). in my desperation i had to ask again once more I really need your help guys I've been working on this 2 weeks already *sob* im open to any comments, Thank you in advance!

here is my resume, there's actually 3 versions:

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1st VERSION

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NAME, RN, BSN

ADDRESS ● PHONE ● [email protected]

PROFILE

Highly-motivated, goal driven, and client-focused professional seeking position as a Registered Nurse.

EDUCATION

Bachelor of Science in Nursing, April 2010, University, CITY, COUNTRY

LICENSE

New York State Registered Nurse, granted August 22, 2012

RELATED EXPERIENCE

Volunteer: Clinical Research Assistant - March 19-30, 2012; INSTITUTE NAME, PLACE

Assisted with research-related procedures and patient care per protocol.
Organized and filed regulatory documents and other research-related files in fast working pace.
Performed other tasks as instructed by Clinical Research Director and Research Coordinator.

Home Caregiver - March 6-13, 2012; PLACE

Provided care for a bedridden client based on health status & continuance of already implemented actions

Physical Therapist Aide - February 2012;PLACE

Assisted clients from admission to therapy under the direction of a physical therapist

Home Health Aide - August 2011 - January 2012; PLACE

Provided structured, adaptive, and consistent activities to the disabled directed towards reaching daily goals based on general and health needs on an afterschool care basis.
Promoted positive behaviors.
Reported daily activities and discussed events and ideas with other health care providers to create convenient solutions to existing problem.

Home Health Aide - February 2011; PLACE

- Assisted with activities of daily living to a fully dependent individual.

Relief Operations Volunteer, "Operation TYPHOON Program - September 2010; , PLACE

Donated, prepared, and delivered relief goods to Typhoon victims and implemented orders assigned by a team leader.

Volunteer: "Operation Smile" - September 2009; Medical Center

Participated in a program under proctor/clinical instructor supervision, which offers free surgeries for children with cleft lip, cleft palate, and other facial deformities.

ACTIVITIES & AFFILIATIONS

Red Cross Youth Collegiate Council - Disaster Management Committee, Member, ( University, 2006-2008)

Voluntarios De Rescate - Kampo Uno Rescue Organization, Member, (College, 2005-2006); Basic high angle rescue, rappelling, and survival; experienced first-aid and rescue simulation drill and practice.

OTHER SKILLS

Computer and internet proficient - MS Office, search engine, typing speed up to 70-75wpm
Bilingual English and Foregin language

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2nd VERSION

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NAME, BSN, RN

PHONE,ADRESS,EMAIL

PROFILE

Highly-motivated, goal driven, and client-focused professional seeking position as a Registered Nurse, Recognized as independent, self-starter, and a quick-learner. Excellent communication and organizational skills.

EDUCATION

New York State Registered Nurse, Active since August 22, 2012

Bachelor of Science in Nursing, UNIVERSITY,CITY,COUNTRY April 2010

EXPERIENCE

Volunteer: Clinical Research Assistant - March 19-30, 2012; PLACE

Home Caregiver - March 6-13 2012; PLACE

Physical Therapist Aide - February 2012; PLACE

Home Health Aide - August 2011 - January 2012; PLACE

Home Health Aide - February 2011; PLACE

Relief Operations Volunteer, "Operation TYPHOON" Program - September 2010; PLACE

Volunteer: "Operation Smile" - September 2009; PLACE

SKILLS

Management and Leadership

Trained and assigned as Shift Person-in-Charge at leading a 3-4 team to maximize efficiency and effectivity. Assisted the Manager in training newly employed staff
Acted as leader in a college research group and provided research related tasks to 12 members.

Patient/Client Care

Provided home health assistance to a partially dependent mentally disabled individual based on general and health needs on an afterschool care basis.
Provide assistance to clients recovering from injuries, illnesses, and surgeries under the direction of a physical therapist
Reported daily activities and discussed events and ideas with other health care providers to create convenient solutions to existing problem.
Assisted with research-related procedures and patient care per protocol.

Administrative

- Computer and internet proficiency - MS Office, search engines, typing speed up to 70-75wpm

- Organized and filed regulatory documents and other research-related files in fast working pace.

Language

- Bilingual English and foreign language

ACTIVITIES & AFFILIATIONS

- Member, Red Cross Youth Collegiate Council - Disaster Management Committee, (UNIVERSITY, 2006-2008)

- Member, Voluntarios De Rescate - Kampo Uno Rescue Organization

(Basic high angle rescue, rappelling, and survival) experienced first-aid and rescue simulation drill and practice, (COLLEGE, 2005-2006)

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COVER LETTER

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[DATE] 2012

[iNSTITUTION NAME]

Dear [Hiring Manager Name],

It is of my utmost interest to work as a Registered Nurse at your institution as referred by a relative who happens to be a personal contact of your employee. I strongly believe with my accomplishments and excellent capabilities, as an entry-level nurse I am a great match to your needs.

I am offering you four years of progressive experience of patient care as a student nurse in hospital and community, excellent organizing, strategic planning and problem solving skills demonstrated often in my home health aide experience and during nursing process, and attention to detail. In addition, I can offer to participate in research, familiarization with protocols, assist execution of screening procedures and filing data in great detail. I can assure you great relations with people involved. I usually set goals to work in a fast-paced manner, and absorb information quickly as inspired by previous mentors. I am proud of my being positive, knowledge/skill-hungry, professional and a believer that I can do anything I believe you will be interested to witness with which should make me an ideal candidate for the position.

Enclosed is my resume and references for your review and in any case would welcome the opportunity to speak with you in time. I thank you for giving my resume your time and consideration.

Respectully,

NAME