Can somebody help me correct my spellings/grammars pls about a pt harassing me!

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Can somebody help me correct my spellings and grammars pls. B/c I need to submit this paper in tomorrow to the social service at my workplace b/c I have a patient that's harassing me which I can't stand anymore so I need to inform them about it. Thx so much for your help all!!!

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May 11, 2013

Dear Social Service Staff,

I have a concern about a patient in room 832, John smith (fake # rm & name). This patient always bother me and I feel like he's harassing me. He said things to me which makes me feel uncomfortable to mention it all out here. He touching me a few times before which make me feel uncomfortable. I had patients that touching me before but I have no problem with that it's just that I don't feel uneasy with this patient's behaviors at all. Before he came to me and asked me that "Can we have a private talk when you done?" I told him that I'm always busy until the last-minute. Then he asked me "Can I have your number?" I said "I'm sorry, we are not allowed to give our number to the patient." Then another time he asked me for my number again and asked me out to eat with him. I just declined and walked away. With his behaviors I told him that I'm going to report him, I said that to him many times before but he still doesn't stop. The nurse didn't assign him to me anymore but he still bother me. Usually when he bother me I just ignore him and walk away but when I do that he still followed after me and trying to talk to me. Last week when he was bothering me so I just ignore him and walked away and he said to me "You make me feel disgusting." And just recently on May 10 he came up to me and said "You have a mind of a ten years old. Do you know that?" He said that to me because I'm always ignore him when he trying to talk to me. So I told him "Don't bother me again." And he said to me "**** you". This thing has going on for a long times ago but I didn't inform you about this patient's behaviors yet because I thought he would stop when I ignore and don't talk to him but he still bother me. The other coworkers told me to report him because they said "If you don't report him then how do they know that his behavior is like that." And they said "What if he do something to you later." That's why I decided to inform you about this patient behaviors now. I was told to stay away from him because they don't want me to get in trouble. And I always did because I'm scare of him but he still doesn't leave me alone. I just want to inform you about this resident behaviors so that it wouldn't happen to others later too. I'm very appreciated for spending your time reading about my concern. Thanks so much!

Sincerely,

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This has a thousand and one errors. I will suggest you summarize what you've written in a sentence or two so as not to end up being retrenched from your place of work. No pun intended.

You can summarize it by hitting the nail on the head. Example:

The patient in room x has been sexually harassing me for a while now, and I feel it's about time the organization interfered because the harrassment is getting out of hand. However, I will be glad to provide more details if the board of authorities choose to contact me for further explanation as regards to this issue.

(Dear ... should come first and the above should stand as the body of the letter)

Leave a paragraph and write your conclusion.

Thanks for using your good office in looking into this matter.

Sincerely,

Your name and surname.

This is just a model and it doesn't have to be written word for word. I am not perfect either, but I think making a summary is better than what you wrote up there because the more you write, the more you tend to make mistakes. It's advisable to use clear, concise, and simple words in order to avoid ambiguity and also for clarity purposes.

Hope this helps?

Good luck.

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I agree with the above poster. You should summarize and give more information when you are able to meet with the board of authorities. Good luck and I hope everything works out okay!

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Specializes in Med-Surg, Telemetry, ER.

I agree with the previous post- way too many errors! Honestly, you are better off not sending a letter like that. It is too detailed, and I would think it will not reflect well on you in the end. Have you talked to the manager, or the person who is directly above you? A lot of times having the manager, the patient, and you in the same room and the manager informing the patient that this behavior will not be tolerated, will put an end to the bad behavior. He has continued to do this because you have failed to adequately address this in a timely manner. I am not saying his behavior is your fault. But I do think sending the letter that you wrote would be a poor decision, and there are better and more effective ways of dealing with this.

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Specializes in Neuroscience.

First and foremost, you want to go through the appropriate channels available to you. If that's the nurse, then the DON, then to management, that's what you do. And document as you do it. If you have exhausted all options, and this is the final step...

Try this

______________________________________________________________________________________

YOUR NAME

YOUR PHONE NUMBER

YOUR EMAIL ADDRESS

To Whom It May Concern:

I have an issue with the patient in room 832, John Smith. He has been sexually harassing me both verbally and physically, and I wanted to call the harassment to your attention.

I have spoken with my other coworkers and taken their advice. I politely asked him to stop, I have ignored him, and I have even been reassigned by the nurse. However, he continues to seek me out and the harassment has changed from sexual to menacing. I will be more than happy to provide examples of the harassment should it be necessary.

I am concerned not only for my well-being and safety, but also for my co-workers. I am certain that no one has reported him before, and I wanted to bring this specific issue to your attention. I appreciate any efforts on your behalf to make the workplace a safer place, and look forward to answering any questions you may have.

Sincerely,

YOUR NAME

____________________________________________________________________

Hope that helps, but again. Do not send that letter without going through all proper channels first.

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Specializes in Pedi.

I agree with what everyone else has said. You would need to rewrite this whole letter to fix the grammar issues. Better to be short and to the point. Have a list of examples if they ask, but it's unnecessary to point them all out here.

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Way way way to many erroros to even correct. You need to toss it, start from scratch.

I'm not trying to be offensive when i say this, but you don't sound like the best writer. Some people are great at it, some not so great. I don't mean it to be rude. The only reason i'm telling you that is because i think you may need assistance writing a letter and there is nothing wrong with that. Ask a coworker, a friend, a parent, an older sibling maybe? Someone that can assist you in writing something more professionally.

The letter also makes it sound like you, yourself, are not handling the situation correctly and maybe "fueling the fire" with this patient. That's just how it comes across. So you don't want to get yourself in trouble either with writing something so detailed.

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Specializes in Maternal Newborn.

I like missmollie's letter - well written and detailed enough, though concise.

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Way way way to many erroros to even correct. You need to toss it, start from scratch.

I'm not trying to be offensive when i say this, but you don't sound like the best writer. Some people are great at it, some not so great. I don't mean it to be rude. The only reason i'm telling you that is because i think you may need assistance writing a letter and there is nothing wrong with that. Ask a coworker, a friend, a parent, an older sibling maybe? Someone that can assist you in writing something more professionally.

The letter also makes it sound like you, yourself, are not handling the situation correctly and maybe "fueling the fire" with this patient. That's just how it comes across. So you don't want to get yourself in trouble either with writing something so detailed.

It sounds like OP doesnt have a good grasp of the English language.

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It sounds like OP doesnt have a good grasp of the English language.

No, it sounds like the original poster sincerely came to us concerned about how to present her case. She recognizes that her grammar is flawed (Lord, we all have our shortcomings...) and asked for our help. Isn't that what we are all here for? I don't think this is the place to insult her.

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I do not feel that the poster was trying to insult the op. I think she was just trying to say that English is probably not the op's primary language. I think some wonderful examples have been given by previous posters, and I wish the op the best of luck in her future :)

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No, it sounds like the original poster sincerely came to us concerned about how to present her case. She recognizes that her grammar is flawed (Lord, we all have our shortcomings...) and asked for our help. Isn't that what we are all here for? I don't think this is the place to insult her.

i agree. i think that when one is in need of our help we should extend our hand rather than saying things that would demean them.

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