hello. i am applying to bsu and the application does not say how much of admissions is based on the essay. i have a 3.96 in pre-requisites and all of the co-requisites as well. the application can be up to six pages but i have only managed to write about two. is short and succent effective or should i elaborate? below are the two questions i am answering and my responses. i appreciate any feedback as this is my original essay and i am much better at science than writing!
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1. what factors influenced your decision to become a nurse?
as a teenager i developed an interest in health and healing and took several noncollege courses in massage therapy, acupressure, and reflexology. over the years i have developed a desire to advocate for and assist others in dire situations. i did not know nursing was for me since i have an affinity for non allopathic systems of health and healing until i heard about caring theory. once discovering the holistic nature of nursing regarding caring for an individual both physically and emotionally instead of medically i knew nursing was for me. the philosophy behind healing has remained withme throughout the years which i hope to expand up on through obtaining a bachelors degree in nursing. during future patient interaction i hope to utilize theskills i have from massage training and yoga instruction while practicing massage and range of motion exercises on residents. i have a long range goal of becoming a registered nurse with a certification in holistic nursing.
2. share an experience in your life in which you demonstrated compassion and empathy for another person.
working as a cna in hospice care was a constant lesson on compassion and empathy. from this experienceihaveafondness for the nurses whoprovidedcriticalcareto the residents whom i assisted with activities of daily living. on several occasions i would accompany residents during their last days with unrelenting compassion and kindness inawe of the measures taken by the nurses to ensure comfort and dignity towards the residents. i have made an obligation to provide constant compassion and companionship in addition to the required care for the residents that i had interacted with.