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hello all. first, i am so excited i found this discussion. this is the best site :)

anyway, i was hoping you guys could look at my cover letter and tell me what you think. i add different things depending on the position, but this is basically it. any help would be appreciated. be mean because i would rather you guys say something then to lose my chance at a great position.

thank you all so much.

dear :

i am sending this letter in regards to the lvn position. i believe that i have the skills and qualifications needed to be successful in this position. i recently received my lvn license and am looking for an entry level position that allows me to help clients and make a difference in their lives. i have a ba in psychology, am bilingual, and know how to work with difficult clients. i am dependable, able to multitask effectively, have excellent communications skills, and am friendly and cooperative.

if you have any questions or would like to schedule an interview please call or email me.

thank you for your time and consideration.

respectfully yours,

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hello all. first, i am so excited i found this discussion. this is the best site :)

anyway, i was hoping you guys could look at my cover letter and tell me what you think. i add different things depending on the position, but this is basically it. any help would be appreciated. be mean because i would rather you guys say something then to lose my chance at a great position.

thank you all so much.

dear :

i am sending this letter in regards to the lvnposition. i believe that i have the skills and qualifications needed to be successful in this position. i recently received my lvn license and am looking for an entry level position that allows me to help clients and make a difference in their lives. i have a ba in psychology, am bilingual, and know how to work with difficult clients. i am dependable, able to multitask effectively, have excellent communications skills, and am friendly and cooperative.

if you have any questions or would like to schedule an interview please call or email me.

thank you for your time and consideration.

respectfully yours,

i am a new grad and within 1 year found a hospital position in an er where i act as a primary nurse for patients with ailments ranging from pneumonia needing iv abx to simple or complicated lacerations.

i would like to recommend you switch the placement of a key sentence in ur cover letter. please write,

i am sending this letter in regards to the lvnposition. i have a ba in psychology, am bilingual, and know how to work with difficult clients. i believe that i have the skills and qualifications needed to be successful in this position. i recently received my lvn license and am looking for an entry level position that allows me to help clients and make a difference in their lives. i am dependable, able to multitask effectively, have excellent communications skills, and am friendly and cooperative.

if you have any questions or would like to schedule an interview please call or email me.

thank you for your time and consideration.

respectfully yours,

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Done. Thank you so much and congratulations.

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Specializes in ICU.

Me me me.

It will always come across best if it's addressed to THEM and their needs. I know what your values are, I know how you value XYZ and ABC, and here's how I support that and be of service to you. It shows that you've researched their company and not just mailed out the same letter to 50 different companies.

That goes for nursing, journalism, or any field and will put your application in the "YES!" bin rather than the trash. :p

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Specializes in General Internal Medicine, ICU.

I'm sorry but your cover letter doesn't stand out at all. It doesn't sell what you have to offer to the employer--all it tells me is that you have the licence to work, that you speak two languages and that you want a job. Your cover letter sounds generic and not tailored to the position; it tells me that you meet the bare minimum criteria for the job, but nothing more. You need to spice up your cover letter to make it uniquely you and to tailor it to the position. A longer cover letter with more substance would be better than what you have right now.

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Specializes in Critical Care.

I have applied for 130 RN positions as a new grad looking for a position. There is NO way I can tailor the cover letter to every single hospital's posting. And, some hospital's websites only allow you to upload a different resume/cover letter a maximum of 5 times. Here's the thing, I love taking care of my patient's, I am compassionate and qualified, I am licensed, dependable and drug free, but now I have to read HR's minds on cover letter mumbo jumbo. You can't win.

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Thank you Biffbradford and Diffindo_lumos for your suggestions I will take them into consideration. Best of luck skygirl, I hope you find a wonderful position really soon.

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