Would you hire me?

[Janinern84]

Here's my letter to my corrdinator....

To Whom This May Concern:March 16, 2006

I am very interested in a full time 12 hour 7am-7pm position in Labor and Delivery at Lake East Hospital.

I believe I deserve this position because of the commitment I've made with Lake Hospital Systems since I was 17 years old. Prior to that, I was a volunteer for three years in the OB department, which totals 7 years of experience with Lake Hospital Systems, and I am only 21 years old. I have put forth my best efforts as a Patient Care Associate and educator and would continue to do so as a Registered Nurse. In the past, as a PCA, I have come to work on my days off, worked extra time, and worked all different shifts.

7am-7pm would be a great shift for me. Not only would I get more time with my son, but also I would cover a good amount of time on the shift where theres the most prevalent amount of inductions, C-sections, deliveries, and procedures. I would love that experience!

Please take my dedication to LHS, willingness to learn, positive attitude, and room to grow into consideration for this position, I would truly be grateful.

Sincerely,

Janine Walsh

Please revise as necessary, my interview is tomorrow!!!!!

[NaomieRN]

I dont think you should mention your age and why you will have more time with your son. If I was the supervisor hiring you, it would not make sense to me why you think working 7am-7pm would help you spend more time with your son. You will be away from home practically all day. Just a few changes and you will be fine. Everything else looks great!

[luvmy2angels]

I agree with some of the other suggestions, don't state that you "deserve" the position, also take out your age and reference about having time to spend time with your son. Focus more on the skills you have learned and what you can contribute to the hospital. More of what you can offer than what you need or what would fit you best. Just my opinion.