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Hello, I would really appreciate some feedback on my resume. I am working out of state right now in my first job after nursing school with wonderful people and AMAZING management but my husband and young kids can't move here and they need me home after being away. I would really appreciate some feedback on my resume.

Thanks in advance!! Format looks much better in PDF file. Just cut and pasted here.

FIRSTNAME LASTNAME, RN, ADN

ADDRESS, CITY STATE ZIP

CELL: XXX-XXX-XXXX

EMAIL ADDRESS

OBJECTIVE:

To be hired as a staff registered nurse in a hospital Medical/Surgical Unit.

QUALIFICATIONS SUMMARY:

· Staff nurse in Medical/Oncology Unit of major hospital

· Robust critical thinking experience with clients as an insurance advisor as well as an acute care RN

· Extensive assessment and report giving experience in an acute care setting

· Managerial experience including leadership of small business specializing in customer service

EDUCATION:

· University of Texas, Arlington

o Bachelor of Science in Nursing (BSN) degree candidate, expected May 2016

· College of xxxxxxx, city, state

o Associates Degree in Nursing (ADN). Graduated May 2014. GPA 3.79

LICENSES, CERTIFICATIONS and RELEVANT TRAINING:

· State 1 RN License: xxxxxxxxx valid through 3/2016

· State 2 RN License: xxxxxxx valid through 12/2015

· BLS - American Heart Association, March 2014 – March 2016

· ACLS - American Heart Association, March 2014 – March 2016

· American Nurses Association - Active Member

· EPIC, Health Connect and McKesson experience and training

PROFESSIONAL EXPERIENCE:

Staff Nurse-Medical/Oncology Unit, Medical Center, City, State, Aug-2014 to present

· Act as a patient advocate while adhering to policies and procedures

· Administer total patient care through a team nursing process attending to 5-6 high acuity medical, oncology and stroke patients per shift

· Recognized by management and fellow staff for my critical thinking, quick learning, robust report and teamwork

· Recognized by patients for my empathy, attentiveness, patience, caring and competence

· Supervise LPNs and CNAs

· Contributes as a resource for other staff during shifts

Office Manager, Insurance Agency, City, State Jan 2003-May 2010

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I'm glad no one has provided any feedback yet because I just edited it and here is the edited version. Please provide feedback if you can. Thanks!!

FIRST LAST, RN, ADN

ADDRESS CITY, STATE ZIP

CELL: 555-555-5555

[email protected]

OBJECTIVE:

To be hired as a staff registered nurse in a hospital Medical/Surgical Unit.

QUALIFICATIONS SUMMARY:

· Staff nurse in Medical/Oncology Unit of major hospital

· Robust critical thinking and problem solving experience; currently as an acute care RN; previously as an insurance representative and office manager

· Exceptional assessment and report experience in an acute care setting

· Superior organization and time management skills honed in acute care nursing and in fast paced chaotic insurance customer service

· Demonstrates maturity by recognizing limitations and not being afraid to ask for help when necessary

EDUCATION:

· University of Texas, Arlington

o Bachelor of Science in Nursing (BSN) degree candidate, expected May 2016

· College , City, State

o Associates Degree in Nursing (ADN). Graduated May 2014. GPA 3.79

LICENSES, CERTIFICATIONS and RELEVANT TRAINING:

· State 1 RN License: xxxxxxxxx valid through 3/2016

· State 2 RN License: xxxxxxx valid through 12/2015

· BLS - American Heart Association, March 2014 – March 2016

· ACLS - American Heart Association, March 2014 – March 2016

· American Nurses Association - Active Member

· EPIC, Health Connect and McKesson experience and training

PROFESSIONAL EXPERIENCE:

Staff Nurse-Medical/Oncology Unit, Medical Center, City, State, Aug-2014 to present

· Recognized by management and fellow staff for calmness under pressure, critical thinking, quick learning, thorough report, flexibility, and teamwork

· Recognized by patients for empathy, attentiveness, patience and caring

· Administer total patient care through a team nursing process attending to 5-6 high acuity medical, oncology and stroke patients per shift

· Act as a patient advocate while adhering to policies and procedures

· Supervise LPNs and CNAs

· Consistently looked to as a resource to other staff during shifts

Office Manager and Customer Service, Insurance Office, City, State, Jan 2003-May 2012

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Anybody?? For the best since I've got another iteration. Here it is. Hopefully someone will provide some feedback. Thanks in advance!!

FIRSTNAME LASTNAME, RN, ADN

ADDRESS, CITY, STATE ZIP

CELL: 555-555-5555

[email protected]

OBJECTIVE:

To be hired as a staff registered nurse in a hospital Medical/Surgical Unit.

QUALIFICATIONS SUMMARY:

· Staff nurse in Medical/Oncology Unit of major hospital

· Robust critical thinking and problem solving experience; currently as an acute care RN; previously as an insurance representative

· Exceptional assessment and highly thorough report experience recognized by fellow staff

· Superior organization and time management skills well sharpened in acute care nursing and fast paced insurance customer service

· Maturity and a strong commitment to patient care demonstrated by recognizing limitations and asking for help when necessary

EDUCATION:

· University of Texas, Arlington

o Bachelor of Science in Nursing (BSN) degree candidate, expected May 2016

· College of xxxxx, City, State

o Associates Degree in Nursing (ADN). Graduated May 2014. GPA 3.79

LICENSES, CERTIFICATIONS and RELEVANT TRAINING:

· State 1 RN License: xxxxxxxx valid through 3/2016

· State 2 RN License: xxxxxx valid through 12/2015

· BLS - American Heart Association, March 2014 – March 2016

· ACLS - American Heart Association, March 2014 – March 2016

· American Nurses Association - Active Member

· EPIC, Health Connect and McKesson experience and training

PROFESSIONAL EXPERIENCE:

Staff Nurse-Medical/Oncology Unit, Medical Center, City, State, Aug-2014 to present

· Recognized by management and fellow staff for calmness under pressure, critical thinking, quick learning, thorough report, flexibility, and teamwork

· Recognized by patients for empathy, attentiveness, patience and caring

· Consistently attends to 5-6 high acuity medical, oncology and stroke patients per shift

· Acts as a patient advocate while adhering to policies and procedures

· Supervises LPNs and CNAs

· Consistently looked to as a resource to other staff during shifts

Office Manager and Customer Service, Insurance Office, City, State, Jan 2003-May 2012

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Anyone? No feedback? I guess it must be perfect?:)

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My only suggestion would be to remove your objective. They aren't really used anymore.

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Thanks resqbug!! I was starting to think that I did something wrong in posting and no one could actually see my resume.

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Specializes in Emergency Nursing.

As someone who reviews resumes I would say that your resume is better than many I have reviewed from potential job candidates.

With that in mind I have some suggestions...

Remove the objective because it doesn't do anything but take up space on your resume.

Consider looking at your description of your position as a staff nurse on the oncology unit. Those bullet points under a previous position are where the best details are for a hiring manager to see what it is that you have done with your career. For example, I like that you list your average number of patients that you care for (5 - 6) and that you supervise LPNs and CNAs. If you are a charge nurse or are on any committees I would include that as one of the bullet points.

Personally, I don't care for personality descriptors such as "recognized by management and fellow staff for calmness under pressure, critical thinking, quick learning, thorough report, flexibility, and teamwork". While that all may be true, how would I know that if I was just reading your resume? How is that quantifiable? I know plenty of nurses that I have supervised who rate themselves highly as critical thinkers, leaders and team players but I do not necessarily agree with that assessment. As human beings we tend to over-exaggerate our strengths and are notoriously poor at identifying our weaknesses (myself included) so I think its easier if we just stick to facts.

I am not implying that I am the authority in resume creation but I just think it is easier to make the bullet points be something that cannot be refuted (committee membership, charge nurse designation, participation in the multidisciplinary treatment team, precepting new nurses and/or nurses students).

As it currently reads, your resume will be better than the majority of your competitors and will likely get you many offers. But if you agree with my recommendations maybe you could consider tinkering around with a few of those bullet points and see how you feel about it. Best of luck!

!Chris :specs:

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You might consider rethinking your use of descriptor words. For example, what is "robust critical thinking"? If someone asks, you better have an example ready. Perhaps you shouldn't use "maturity" either as it can age you.

Delete your GPA because that screams new grad.

List your accomplishments: relief charge nurse, preceptor, teach skills lab, etc.

List the committees and projects you worked on.

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