Resume Critique...Any help would be much appreciated!

[deathisastar13]

I just updated/re-did my resume today. I have a job interview coming up! Any comments would be AMAZING! Same with my cover letter...I hate writing them!

Thank you in advance!

COVER LETTER

I was pleased to learn of your IMC RN position, as my career goals and experience are directly in line with this opportunity. My experience and education have provided me with excellent knowledge of IMC practices, patient care, family liaison, and other relevant skills required of an effective team member. Ogden Regional Medical Center has an excellent reputation in the community with your patient-centered care; I would like to be apart of your team.

The following are highlights of my qualifications and accomplishments:

- Patient care on Tele/ICU and strong stroke background

- Clinical Nurse Leader Certification allows focus on patient outcomes--increase patient satisfaction, patient safety, and cost effectiveness

- Compassion and dedication to patients--noticed by patients, supervisors and coworkers

- Patient advocate

I am looking for a nursing position to advance my skills and challenge me, and to be part of a team that prides itself on compassion and advocacy. I am highly organized, work well under pressure, and a quick learner. I have a very strong work ethic and a positive attitude. I have a calling to help those in need, especially the vulnerable populations. I enjoy spending time with my patients and their family, and being present to answer any question no matter how minor they may appear.

I will make a substantial contribution to Ogden Regional Medical Center. I believe that a challenging environment such as your IMC will provide an excellent opportunity for ME to best utilize my skills while contributing to the healthcare community, patients, and their families.

I welcome the opportunity to meet with your any time to further discuss the chance to become a part of your team. If you have any questions, or if you want to schedule an interview, please contact me at (XXX) XXX-XXX or (XXX) XXX-XXXX.

Sincerely yours,

Nicole MSN, RN, CNL, PHN

Enclosure: resume

Nicole MSN, RN, CNL, PHN

OBJECTIVE STATEMENT

Registered Nurse position in inpatient [specific unit applying to...]

QUALIFICATIONS SUMMARY

Over 10 years of healthcare experience with nursing experience in clinical rotations in labor and delivery, trauma med/surg, tele/ICU, pediatrics, psychiatric, community health

EDUCATION

University of San Francisco School of Nursing, San Francisco, CA, 2011

Master of Nursing degree, Clinical Nurse Leader

University of Utah, Salt Lake City, UT, 2007

Major: Health Promotion and Education

CERTIFICATIONS AND LICENSES

Registered Nurse

California--RN789802

Utah--8017535-3102

Washington--RN60261943

Clinical Nurse Leader--American Association of Colleges of Nursing--10640223

California Public Health Nurse--79959

Basic Life Support for Healthcare Providers Certification

Advanced Cardiac Life Support Certification

National Institute of Health Stroke Scale Certification

Institute of Healthcare Improvement Certifications: Quality Improvement, Patient Safety, and Leadership

PROFESSIONAL EXPERIENCE

Snowcreek Emergency Medical Center, Park City, UT (2011-Current)

Registered Nurse

- Collaborates with physicians to develop and manage nursing care plans

- Counsel patients and families in proper treatment

- Responds to inquires in responsive and professional manner

- Performs physical assessment of patients, including triage duties

- Performs other procedures including: Intravenous therapy, venipuncture, wound care, physicals, applying splints/casts, collecting cultures and collection of body fluid specimens, nursing assessments

Tele/ICU, San Francisco General Hospital, San Francisco, CA (2011)

Leadership Internship, 400+ hours

- Served as new-grad nurse under California RN license while immersed in CNL role

- Implemented unit improvement project

o Assembled bedside emergency kits designed by unit assessment

Kit delivered respiratory and suction equipment to bedside to be utilized during emergencies

Trauma Med/Surg, San Francisco General Hospital, San Francisco, CA (2010)

Clinical Rotation 270 hours

- Proficient in assessment, wound management, tubes/drains, pain management, nursing skills

Psychiatric, San Francisco General Hospital, San Francisco, CA (2010)

Clinical Rotation 90 hours

- Proficient in assessment skills, therapeutic communication, therapeutic relationships

Ashbury House, San Francisco, CA (2010)

Community Health Rotation 90 hours

- Residential treatment program for mothers who have lost custody of their children due to mental illness

- Proficient in therapeutic communication, group sessions, therapeutic relationships

o Health education group session about STI's, birth control, self-esteem

Neuro, Children's Hospital of Oakland, Oakland, CA (2010)

Pediatric Rotation 90 hours with added simulation lab

- Proficient in assessment skills, medication calculations, neurological conditions in children, family liaison

Institute on Aging, San Francisco, CA (2009)

Health Promotion Rotation 90 hours

- Proficient in providing care and planning activities for those with altered mental status (dementia and Alzheimer's disease)

Labor and Delivery/Postpartum/NICU, Kaiser San Francisco, San Francisco, CA (2009)

Maternity Rotation 90 hours

- Proficient in assessment skills, NICU, postpartum, NICU, counseling new mothers in breastfeeding

Inpatient Neuro Rehabilitation, University Healthcare, Salt Lake City, UT (2008-2009)

Health Unit Coordinator

- Performed clerical functions for patient care unit facilitating flow of information between medical staff and department to maximize unit efficiency

Inpatient Neuro Rehabilitation, University Healthcare, Salt Lake City, UT (2008-2009)

Healthcare Assistant

- Delivered patient care under supervision of RN on unit specializing in patients with TBI, Spinal Cord Injuries, and Strokes

o Trained in feeding tubes, ventilators, sterile urinary catheterization, LVAD

Salt Lake Valley Health Department

Health Educator

- Administered Salt Lake County's work site wellness program

VOLUNTEER/COMMUNITY EXPERIENCE

Peoples Health Clinic, Park City, UT (2011)

Volunteer RN

- Performed phlebotomy skills, obtained vital signs, and health history

Fox Hills Elementary School, Salt Lake City, UT (2011)

Health Educator

- Instructed first through fourth grade students importance of hand hygiene and microorganisms

Volunteered at various health clinics and elementary schools for 10 years

PROFESSIONAL ORGANIZATIONS

Sigma Theta Tau International

- Beta Gamma

- Gamma Rho--Board Member--Publicity/Newsletter Chair

[Jolie, BSN]

Please delete this information and re-post your resume and cover letter without your personal and professional identifying information.

[hafsa2009]

Please delete this information and re-post your resume and cover letter without your personal and professional identifying information.

can you plz let me know how you delete your own message

[Stevenyzwife]

I actually like it the way you have written your resume'.

Here in Australia, they like to see your personal info and as crit care can be a stressful and demanding job, the managers like to know how you will/do deal with the stress from work so you don't get burnt out quickly.

Did you get the jo? :)

[Stevenyzwife]

I actually like it the way you have written your resume'.

Here in Australia, they like to see your personal info and as crit care can be a stressful and demanding job, the managers like to know how you will/do deal with the stress from work so you don't get burnt out quickly.

Did you get the jo? :)

I would however put your "professional organizations" up after your education and then your

CERTIFICATIONS AND LICENSES after your professional experiences.

[Meriwhen, ASN, BSN, MSN, RN]

Your resume doesn't back up your "10 years of healthcare experience" statement, as you're only listing jobs from 2008 on, and in fact most of that is clinical experience. In addition, your volunteering statement is vague since you don't list actual duties or locations: for all the interviewer knows, you could have been there working a gift shop or running errands instead of performing actual healthcare duties, or you may only have put in minimal time volunteering over the years (e.g., a weekend every other month).

Whether you realize it, that statement and your resume comes across as somewhat misleading and may end up hurting more than helping you.

I think you need to include and elaborate on all this experience and/or retool your qualifications summary to more accurately reflect your actual experience.