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Looking for some professional oppinion from people that actually look at these things. If you are a staff nurse or other I welcome your input as well. I only ask that you state your position when you critique(so I can understand where you are coming from)...thank you in advance

(I also had to edit the structure a little because when I pasted it from MS word it started to look a little weird)

PROFESSIONAL OBJECTIVE

To obtain an entry level position as a staff nurse in an acute health care facility or institution.

EDUCATION

Sept, 2003- June, 2005

Associate in Applied Science Degree, Nursing

PhillipsBethIsraelSchool of Nursing, New York, New York

Sept, 2000- May 2003

Bachelors Degree (BA) in Biology

BrooklynCollege, City University of New York, Brooklyn, New York

Sept, 1998- June 2000

Biology Major

RutgersUniversity, State University of NJ, New Brunswick, New Jersey

EXPERIENCE

May 2005

Student Nurse

St. Luke's Hospital, Emergency Department, Trauma center, NY, NY

Sept, 1997- Nov, 2004

Optician

Dr. Ronald Goldstein, Dr. Howard Freid, Brooklyn, New York

Auto-refracting and obtaining ocular pressures

Obtaining patients medical history

Adjustments and taking measurements for eyewear

Patient follow up calls and overview

Instructing patients on contact lens insertion and removal training

July, 1995- August ,1995

Volunteer

AmbulatoryCareCenter, MaimonidesMedicalCenter

Answering patient inquiries

Preparing charts for clinic

Russian/English translator between physician and patient

AFFILIATION AND CERTIFICATION

National Student Nurses Association (NSNA) member

Nursing Students Association of New York State (NSANYS) member

American Heart Association Basic Life support (BLS) certified

Expected to take NCLEX June 2005

ACTIVITIES AND AWARDS

Phillips Scholarship Recipient

Peer Advisor to PhillipsBethIsraelSchool of Nursing Class of 2006

Vaccinated Beth Israel Medical center staff for influenza, November 2004

ADDITIONAL SKILLS

Fluent in Russian

Proficient in Windows XP, 2000, MS Word, MS Powerpoint, Type @ 56 WPM

REFFERENCES

Available upon request

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Experience goes before education. You might also want to develop a cover letter.

Most employers will look at your application first and resume second, so if you have an application make certain to fill it out completely and include your resume.

Other than that, it looks pretty good.

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Jolie has 34 years experience as a BSN and specializes in Maternal - Child Health.

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Gomer said:
Experience goes before education. You might also want to develop a cover letter.

Most employers will look at your application first and resume second, so if you have an application make certain to fill it out completely and include your resume.

Other than that, it looks pretty good.

I am a former nurse manager of a NICU, and now a stay-at-home mom.

I respectfully disagree with Gomer. As a new grad with no relevant nursing work experience, education should come first.

I wouldn't bother with the professional objective, as it is essentially the same for EVERY new grad. Objectives become more important for subsequent positions, when the nurse is looking to move into a more specialized niche such as administration, education, research, or a specific clinical area such as transport. I would use the space to expand on your student experience instead. Was this a clinical rotation or an externship? What were your duties?

Double and triple check grammar, punctuation and spelling.

"Obtaining patient's medical history" This is singular. Did you mean for it to be singular? Or plural? "Obtaining patients' medical histories"

"Instructing patients on contact lens insertion and removal training" This phrase is redundant. You either instructed them or trained them. Not both.

Overall, it looks very good. As you said, the format didn't translate very well, so I can't tell how long it is, but keep it to one page. In your cover letter, emphasize your work experience as an optician, and how that has prepared you for patient contact. Your computer skills and language abilities are important to mention as well.

When sending out resumes, I recommend sending at least 2 to each institution. One to Human Resources, which will probably garner the least attention, and one to the manager of each unit that interests you. Find out their names, if at all possible, and address your letters directly to them. Follow up with phone calls about 2 weeks later. If positions are not immediately available, ask the manager(s) if they would be willing to give you an "informational" interview. That will be a way to form an "in" with them, should future positions become available.

Good luck!

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Hi

In addition to what the previous posters have stated, the formatting needs to be aligned. Some of your bullets are done in a margin alignment and others are indented. The "certified" must be removed from the BLS. BLS is not a certification. It should be written BLS Provider mm/yyyy.

Good luck

Holly

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If you want to use a professional objective, I think the use of facility and institution is redundant. They both more or less mean the same thing. I would use facility alone.

As mentioned, I would elaborate on your experience as a student nurse.

I do not think References upon request is used any longer at the end of a resume. Potential employers know references are available if they ask for them. Use those few lines for more useful information about yourself. Maybe use a few positive adjectives (about yourself) when describing your experience.

Overall, it looks good. A few tweaks here and there and you will be good to go. I am constantly changing small things on my resume. It is an on going process.

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Jolie said:
I am a former nurse manager of a NICU, and now a stay-at-home mom.

I respectfully disagree with Gomer. As a new grad with no relevant nursing work experience, education should come first.

I wouldn't bother with the professional objective, as it is essentially the same for EVERY new grad. Objectives become more important for subsequent positions, when the nurse is looking to move into a more specialized niche such as administration, education, research, or a specific clinical area such as transport. I would use the space to expand on your student experience instead. Was this a clinical rotation or an externship? What were your duties?

Double and triple check grammar, punctuation and spelling.

"Obtaining patient's medical history" This is singular. Did you mean for it to be singular? Or plural? "Obtaining patients' medical histories"

"Instructing patients on contact lens insertion and removal training" This phrase is redundant. You either instructed them or trained them. Not both.

Overall, it looks very good. As you said, the format didn't translate very well, so I can't tell how long it is, but keep it to one page. In your cover letter, emphasize your work experience as an optician, and how that has prepared you for patient contact. Your computer skills and language abilities are important to mention as well.

When sending out resumes, I recommend sending at least 2 to each institution. One to Human Resources, which will probably garner the least attention, and one to the manager of each unit that interests you. Find out their names, if at all possible, and address your letters directly to them. Follow up with phone calls about 2 weeks later. If positions are not immediately available, ask the manager(s) if they would be willing to give you an "informational" interview. That will be a way to form an "in" with them, should future positions become available.

Good luck!

Yes, I agree with the above, that your most important point needs to stand out at the top. Also, regarding the objective, unless you have special requirements such as: part-time, nights, weekend option, it goes without saying. Also I would space the larger categories together, and consider some bullet points regarding skills, etc. WOW!! Great information on your resume.

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Here's my unsolicited opinion as an RN with experience dating back to the late l970's!!! You would be a god send to patients recovering from eye surgery or going into eye surgery. I speak from experience!!! I've had two corneal transplants. Ever consider Ny Eye and Ear of MEENT? Or Columbia ( now NY Presbyterian Harkness). Perhaps you're more into obtaining a wider variety of experience, but I tell you, finding a good RN who knows about eyes is VERY VERY RARE.

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