Help with resume, trying not to use 1st person!

[Shyhaylee]

I am trying to finish my resume, and from the websites that I have read from its says do not use any type of pronoun like I or me. So this is what did have

Highly motivated and am able to keep up at a steady pace. Provides quality care based on high-standards and kindheartedness. During clinical rotations I worked in an urgent care setting where sometimes 50 patients were seen within hours. I am an excellent patient advocate, and can relay patient teaching very efficiently. During my clinical rotations I worked in Senior Care, Medical-Surgical Unit, Intensive Care Unit, OB, and Nursery at Harris Hospital in Newport. I also worked in surgery (pre-intra-and post operation) and orthopedics at White River Medical Center.

Then I tried to get rid of all the I's, and came up with this:

Highly motivated and am able to keep up at a steady pace. Worked in an urgent care setting where sometimes 50 patients were seen within hours. Provide quality care centered on high-standards and compassion. Excellent patient advocate and can relay patient teaching very efficiently, able to communicate commendably with physicians. Also worked in Senior Care, Medical-Surgical Unit, Intensive Care Unit, OB, and Nursery at Harris Hospital in Newport, along with surgery (pre-intra-and post operation) and orthopedics at White River Medical Center in Batesville.

Does that sound crazy or is it just me? Am I wrong not wanted to use any I's? If this is in the wrong spot I am sorry by the way!

[Double-Helix, BSN, RN]

you're right to not use 'i'. here's what i came up with:

highly motivated graduate nurse able to work in a fast-paced environment. urgent care experience, often assessing 50 patients within an hour. provides compassionate, quality care through evidence-based interventions. proven ability to communicating with patients and the interdisciplinary team. excellent teaching and advocacy skills. further clinical experience includes geriatrics, medical-surgical, intensive care, obstetrics, nursery, orthopedics and peri-operative care.

there really isn't any need to put the location of your clinicals in your professional profile. you can give that information in your resume, but your professional profile should be all about your strengths and qualities and nothing else. i rephrased a few sentances to make it flow a little better. what do you think?

[Shyhaylee]

you're right to not use 'i'. here's what i came up with:

highly motivated graduate nurse able to work in a fast-paced environment. urgent care experience, often assessing 50 patients within an hour. provides compassionate, quality care through evidence-based interventions. proven ability to communicating with patients and the interdisciplinary team. excellent teaching and advocacy skills. further clinical experience includes geriatrics, medical-surgical, intensive care, obstetrics, nursery, orthopedics and peri-operative care.

there really isn't any need to put the location of your clinicals in your professional profile. you can give that information in your resume, but your professional profile should be all about your strengths and qualities and nothing else. i rephrased a few sentances to make it flow a little better. what do you think?

i absolutely love it! how did you do that? i have been trying sooo hard!

[Lunah, MSN, RN]

proven ability to communicating with patients and the interdisciplinary team.

one correction: should be "communicate," not "communicating." great job! sounds very professional and concise. sorry, i spent 10+ years as an editor, among other things... haha. :)

[hiddencatRN, BSN, RN]

That narrative should go in the cover letter, not the resume, imo.

[Double-Helix, BSN, RN]

That narrative should go in the cover letter, not the resume, imo.

Many resume templates will suggest starting the resume with an "objective" such as "seeking employment in a registered nurse position to further enhance my clinical skills while providing quality care to patients" or something like that. My problem with objectives is that, no matter how you word them, they all sound the same- "I want a job." The employer obviously knows this, so the objective doesn't really serve a purpose, not does out make a candidate stand out.

A professional profile, on the other hand, is a brief explanation of the candidate's title, experience and best characteristics. It is essentially a summary of the resume highlights. It is the first part if the resume the employer will read and it automatically gives him or her a positive impression of the candidate. It allows the candidate to be immediately differentiated from the people who wrote objectives and gives the candidate the chance to showcase his or her writing ability and best attributes.

For that reason, I suggest starting a resume with a professional profile narrative, rather than an objective.

[hiddencatRN, BSN, RN]

I just forgo an intro on the resume. I'd rather use that real estate for my certifications, job and volunteer work, organizations and recognitions.

[MrChicagoRN, RN]

Many resume templates will suggest starting the resume with an "objective" such as "seeking employment in a registered nurse position to further enhance my clinical skills while providing quality care to patients" or something like that. My problem with objectives is that, no matter how you word them, they all sound the same- "I want a job." The employer obviously knows this, so the objective doesn't really serve a purpose, not does out make a candidate stand out.

For that reason, I suggest starting a resume with a professional profile narrative, rather than an objective.

I also feel the objective is not necessary, unless it is something very specific.

In reviewing applicants, I would get new grad resumes that are even more blatantly "I want, I want." What I want to know is what you are bringing to the table.

If you do include an objective, be sure to succinctly include the value you will be bringing to the unit. otherwise leave it out.