critique please

[fromtheseaRN, BSN, RN]

I was fortunate enough to land a job in an outpatient surgical center only 3 months after I graduated(this past December). It is only per diem and my hours have continually gone down since I started, so I have been looking for another job, albeit a bit lazily. So of course I just got a call from my dream hospital, they want me to do their online assessments and send in with my updated resume(reflecting current job), TOMORROW. The last person who looked at my resume(a colleague) said it sucked. So, I removed my unrelated past work experience, moved my volunteer work up, and took out the unnecessary details about my clinical rotations. I want to make sure it looks good when they get it tomorrow, and I am not very good at talking myself up. Here it is:

My name, address, phone, email

Professional Summary

Registered Nurse with hospital and outpatient surgical training. Self directed and highly organized, with well-regarded work ethic. Team player with all members, efficiently delegates tasks as necessary, and also gladly accepts delegation. Reliable and calm in all situations, allowing for proper assessment, intervention, and collaboration with healthcare team members. BLS and NRP certified.

License and Certifications

Registered Nurse, License #xxxxxxxx: January 2012 BLS: January 2012 NRP: May 2012 ACLS: June 15, 2012

Education

Associate in Applied Science, Nursing, with Honors, December 12, 2011

My College, my town, state

Honors: Phi Theta Kappa International Honor Society, 2008-2011

Completed clinical practicum included 816 hours of experience at X Hospital and Y Healthcare facilities, with a final preceptorship of 96 hours in Labor and Delivery at X hospital.

Bachelor of Science in Nursing, December 2013

My University, My town, State

Experience

Registered Nurse, Outpatient Surgical March 1, 2012 - Present

Prepare rooms, instruments, medications, and supplies for surgery. Prepare recovery room prior to beginning of clinic. Orient new members of healthcare team. Provide pre-operative preparation and recovery for up to 20 patients daily, including beginning and monitoring intravenous access; assisting patients before and following procedures with emotional and physical support; monitoring vital signs, bleeding, and pain during recovery; educating patients on preoperative and postoperative care and instructions; administering and dispensing medications per physician's order.

Student Nurse Volunteer, Free Medical Clinic October 2010 - December 2010

Provided intake of patients, basic assessment, and triage. Performed many tasks under supervision of NP including vitals, urinalysis tests, wound care, and diabetes education to a high-risk population.

Professional Affiliations

American Nurses Association January 2012 - Present

References and most recent evaluation available upon request.

thanks for looking!

[KelRN215, BSN, RN]

If you are an experienced nurse, IMO, experience goes before education.

[ivyleaf]

My thoughts:

Take out "with all members;" it's implied. Take out "also" in "gladly accepts delegation." I don't know if I'd say "all situations," as this is a blanket statement and makes me question the validity of other statements. Also "healthcare team members" is implied. No need to put BLS in prof. summary.

I'd take out "tests" after "urinalysis." Also, consider adding other work exp. even if it doesn't relate to nursing-- it will show that you have a work history and these aren't your first few jobs.

Just my two cents ; )

My name, address, phone, email

Professional Summary

Registered Nurse with hospital and outpatient surgical training. Self directed and highly organized, with well-regarded work ethic. Team player with all members, efficiently delegates tasks as necessary, and also gladly accepts delegation. Reliable and calm in all situations, allowing for proper assessment, intervention, and collaboration with healthcare team members. BLS and NRP certified.

License and Certifications

Registered Nurse, License #xxxxxxxx: January 2012 BLS: January 2012 NRP: May 2012 ACLS: June 15, 2012

Education

Associate in Applied Science, Nursing, with Honors, December 12, 2011

My College, my town, state

Honors: Phi Theta Kappa International Honor Society, 2008-2011

Completed clinical practicum included 816 hours of experience at X Hospital and Y Healthcare facilities, with a final preceptorship of 96 hours in Labor and Delivery at X hospital.

Bachelor of Science in Nursing, December 2013

My University, My town, State

Experience

Registered Nurse, Outpatient Surgical March 1, 2012 – Present

Prepare rooms, instruments, medications, and supplies for surgery. Prepare recovery room prior to beginning of clinic. Orient new members of healthcare team. Provide pre-operative preparation and recovery for up to 20 patients daily, including beginning and monitoring intravenous access; assisting patients before and following procedures with emotional and physical support; monitoring vital signs, bleeding, and pain during recovery; educating patients on preoperative and postoperative care and instructions; administering and dispensing medications per physician’s order.

Student Nurse Volunteer, Free Medical Clinic October 2010 – December 2010

Provided intake of patients, basic assessment, and triage. Performed many tasks under supervision of NP including vitals, urinalysis tests, wound care, and diabetes education to a high-risk population.

Professional Affiliations

American Nurses Association January 2012 - Present

References and most recent evaluation available upon request.

[Seas]

Put experience before schools for sure.

For BSN, put "anticipated graduation date" instead of just the date.We aren't in December 2013 yet.

And after reading the post above mine, I would discourage you from putting the other job history that aren't related to nursing. It would be unnecessary junk. You need to keep it short and concise.