Cover Letter Critique

[Notca67]

I'm looking for some constructive criticism for a cover letter for a position as a PCA. I currently work at another hospital as a Nursing Assistant in the float pool, but unfortunately they're trying to go magnate, so I won't be considered as an applicant for a position as a RN after I graduate this spring. . . =( (I'm going into my 4th semester of nursing school.) Securing a position at this facility is pretty high stakes for me, since later on down the road this could very well lead to a position at their facility as an RN, since they do hire ADN's. . .

The original document was formatted with 1 inch margins, times new roman with 11 pt font.

I also wanted to know how to go about finding information for the recruitment team so I can address the letter to a recruiter.

xxx

xxx

xxx

Cell: xxx

Email: xxx

December 9, 2014

Nurse Recruiter

Address

City, State, Zip

Phone: XXX-XXX-XXXX

Dear Blank,

I am writing in response to an employment opportunity for the posted position on your website as a Patient Care Assistant on x floor.

I am currently a Nursing Assistant in the Float Pool at xxx, as well as a Nursing Student pursing a Degree in Nursing at xxx; my graduation date will be May 2015. I am thrilled to see that the position really fits my education and skill-set, and I am confident that I am a perfect fit for the position. I strive to provide high quality care to patients, families, and the community through excellent professional nursing practice and the application of new knowledge and ideas. xxx's dedication to provide the highest quality of patient care with respect and excellence are qualities I seek out and value greatly in an employer.

Through my experience working at xxx, I've had the great opportunity to work in many different settings including the Emergency Department, The Oncology Unit, Telemetry, ICU, Bone and Joint, and Med-Surg. My responsibilities include assessing patients' vital signs, monitoring blood glucose levels, answering call bells, and reporting any changes in status or concerns of the patient. I'm also part of the code grey response team, having an in house certification for preventative management of crisis situations (PMCS). As part of this team it's my responsibility to respond to any situations that might place individuals at danger to themselves or others. I gained the ability to think on my feet, problem-solve, and effectively communicate with other members of the healthcare team. My educational background, clinical experiences, and prior work experience have provided me with a solid foundation that will allow me to be an effective part of your team.

I am interested in the challenges and opportunities provided by the position. I look forward to interview with you. Please feel free to contact me at my cell phone number xxx-xxx-xxx or via e-mail at [email protected]. I have enclosed a copy of my resume with this letter. Thank you for taking the time to consider my application.

Sincerely,

xxx

[Lev, MSN, RN, NP]

Looks great. Just clean up punctuation here and there and make it flow a little better. Read it out loud and see if any words sound extra, such as taking out the word "really" in this sentence. You may also want to take out second half of the sentence because it's repetitive.

I am thrilled to see that the position really fits my education and skill-set, and I am confident that I am a perfect fit for the position

[RunBabyRN]

You can address the letter, "Dear Recruitment Team". I agree with Lev

[labordude, BSN, RN]

You can address the letter, "Dear Recruitment Team". I agree with Lev

Please do not do this, it shows such lack of imagination and no initiative. If you can't find the information online, call up and ask for the name of the person who is handling the job. I think only once has someone not given me the information readily and I quickly realized that was not a place I wanted to work anyway.