Another Poem to be submitted..Please honestly critique!

[mother/babyRN, RN]

Moving On...

My thoughts are no longer

centered on sad,

or punishing episodes

which I may have had,

or friendships that changed,

or just passed away,

or love in my future

being eons away-

My heart has been battered;

I've experienced doubt,

but thats not the thing

that I'm thinking about,

rather, the choices

I've elected to choose,

whether spectacular

or destined to lose,

were mine in entirety,

with faith amazingly strong,

and that is close to me always

whether right or ALL wrong...

God decided, with humor,

to grant me this life,

so along with the laughter,

comes a "smidgen" of strife....

Life is like baseball;

each miss or great hit,

is transient only,

not the essence of it.

Chances, like innings

temporarily end,

but there is always a new game,

another chance to begin...

It's not EVER over-

just fades away,

WE make the decision

to leave or to stay...

We can drown in the sadness,

or leave it behind,

in search for the splendor

we are destined to find...

God made all of us perfect,

not an error in sight,

though WE seldom believe it,

try as we might...

It's the essence of love

which sets us apart-

not our sizes or faces-

it's straight from the heart....

So, I'M back on my journey;

Goodbye to my past,

I'm off to my future

and a love that will last....

Thank you to those

whom I left behind,

your lessons and sweetness

I have etched in my mind....

Even the tough times

and those which were sad,

have graced me with visions

I might never have had....

To you, I am grateful-

because, as you will see,

You've helped sculpt that treasure

which is soon to be ME!

Written by: Martha Crowninshield

O'Brien August 1993

[neonatalRN]

I love it!!

[Noney]

Are you a nurse or a poet? Apparently both! Excellent! Wonderful!

Noney

[Jamiers]

WOW!!!

I had to print this out to show everyone! You are a great poet, have you ever submitted these to publication? Amazing!

You have the words honey! idea:

Jamiers

[mother/babyRN, RN]

Awww.....I have written poetry since I was a little girl and thinking about getting more into it, but I would have to say I am a nurse first...Should I be a nurse poet???I certainly could bore all of you with some more of them.....

[SmilingBluEyes]

i am disappointed there are not more responses.

i found it lovely.

you are talented.

[EastCoast]

Originally posted by mother/babyRN

Moving On...

Life is like baseball;

each miss or great hit,

is transient only,

not the essence of it.

Chances, like innings

temporarily end,

but there is always a new game,

another chance to begin...

GO red sox.

honestly,

i love your poem . it reminds me of those turbulent times from years ago when it was so easy to write when you were feeling so sad. still it is not easy to articulate feeling that are so personal, much less let the whole world peek.

Nice . and i would submit it.

[mother/babyRN, RN]

Thanks so much. I was hoping for some more also...But am happy that people enjoyed the work....Positive responses count for the chances of publication.....They really want to see how people feel about the work being submitted..Thanks for taking the time.....Martha

[mother/babyRN, RN]

Speaking of the Red Sox whom I love, in the beginning my toes were curled at the closeness of some of their games. If they keep this up they will be permanently contracted..Lol....I did find the base ball analogy kind of apropo....

[bellehill, RN]

What a beautiful poem, gave me chills!

Go Yankees!

[Pretzlgl]

Great poem. I am going to give a copy to my mother who frequently reminds me of my "choices" from the past. It is a great way for me to express to her what I want to say to her - but couldn't cause I haven't found the right words. Thank you.