Please, Please, Please Critique!!! ;)

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    This is my first draft of my resume. It was not just thrown together. I actually took my time trying to figure out what sounded the best. Please give me some input on it please. I want to start applying for jobs asap and I want to make sure it's put together well. Thanks in advance!

    Hopeful Student
    address
    state
    (999)222-9996
    email

    OBJECTIVE

    • Highly focused and committed professional seeking to transition into healthcare as a registered nurse.
    • Extremely motivated to start nursing career; future goals include further education leading to BSN in nursing.
    • Passionate about providing patient-focused care in compliance with standards of care.
    • Self-motivated and able to work independently as well as part of a team.


    CLINICAL EXPERIENCE/ PRACTICUM
    These experiences provided the opportunity to strengthen my acquired fundamental skills to provide appropriate and accurate care to my patients. I built upon my assessment, planning and evaluation skills of general patient data. Coordinated care planning based on prioritization, delegation, acuity level and available resources to promptly carry out physician orders. Skills implemented, while following standard precautions, included medication administration, wound assessments and dressing changes, IV initiation, catheter insertion/removal, head to toe/focused assessments, patient teaching and therapeutic communication.


    • Practium Hospital, city state


    • 8th floor Orthopedics (120 Clinical hours) Fall 2012


    • Clinical Rotations, hospital, city state

    (Under clinical instructor supervision) Fall 2010- Spring 2011

    • Med Surg/ Telemetry -CCU - Emergency Department
    • Labor and Delivery - Postpartum - NICU
    • Surgical - Mental Health


    EDUCATION
    college, city, state
    Associate of Science in Nursing Degree, expected December 2012
    high school, city state
    High School Diploma May 2004

    WORK EXPERIENCE
    store
    03/2008- 12/2010 Accountant Clerk

    • Processed and prepared checks and monies for accurate bank deposits.
    • Corresponded with team members to complete daily duties in a timely manner.
    • Provided excellent customer service and critical thinking skills to provide an optimal outcome.

    United States Army
    5/2004- 9/2007 Unit Supply Specialist

    • Skilled in the areas of accountability, supply management and customer service.
    • Delegated tasks, instructed and supervised company employees.
    • Evaluated information obtained to determine the needs of the company.


    CERTIFICATIONS
    BLS/ACLS Certified
    Pediatric Abusive Head Trauma
    FEMA: ICS-100, ICS-200 for Health Care/Hospitals, IS-00700.a NIMS

    Professional Affiliations
    American Nurse Association (ANA)
    National Student Association (NSA)
    Kentucky Association of Nursing Students (KANS)

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    Organization is off a bit. I would have my work experience after the clinical experience section and the education after that then the rest. Next your objective bullets should be only one bullet, "resume experts" don't even consider the objective necessicary
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    Organization is off a bit. I would have my work experience after the clinical experience section and the education after that then the rest. Next your objective bullets should be only one bullet, "resume experts" don't even consider the objective necessicary in alot of cases. I still keep an objective in mine but it's one short sentence. However you did a good job with the wording of those bullets. As far as your non nursing experience I would highlight the "transferrable skills" you have from previous jobs.I'm commenting on my iPhone right now so I will gladly come back and finish my critique once i get to my pc
    VanessaRenee1984 likes this.
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    Thanks! I see what you mean about the organizaion. Maybe I should reword "objective" to something else. Maybe Qualification summary?
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    My suggestions...


    Hopeful Student
    1234 ABC Dr. Happyland US, 12345
    Cell: (999) 555-1234 Email: hopefull.student@email.com


    SUMMARY OF QUALIFICATIONS


    (not all inclusive, add and remove things as they apply)

    • Highly focused, motivated, and committed professional
    • (state any certs that you hold that were SPECIFICALLY asked for in job posting)
    • Passionate about providing patient-focused care in compliance with standards of care.
    • Self-motivated and able to work independently as well as part of a team.


    CLINICAL EXPERIENCE/ PRACTICUM

    These experiences provided the opportunity to strengthen my acquired fundamental skills to provide appropriate and accurate care to my patients. I built upon my assessment, planning and evaluation skills of general patient data. Coordinated care planning based on prioritization, delegation, acuity level and available resources to promptly carry out physician orders. Skills implemented, while following standard precautions, included medication administration, wound assessments and dressing changes, IV initiation, catheter insertion/removal, head to toe/focused assessments, patient teaching and therapeutic communication.


    • Practium Hospital, city state
      8th floor Orthopedics (120 Clinical hours) Fall 2012


    • Clinical Rotations, hospital, city state
      (Under clinical instructor supervision) Fall 2010- Spring 2011
      - Med Surg/ Telemetry -CCU - Emergency Department
      - Labor and Delivery - Postpartum - NICU
      - Surgical - Mental Health

    WORK EXPERIENCE

    (word these bullets how you please, I didn't do the jobs so I don't have very many suggestions, just think about what you did and figure what would transfer to the job your applying for i.e. customer service can relate to patient care, if you were the safety rep you can use that, think of all the extra "hats" you have wore (especially in the army))
    Store
    03/2008- 12/2010 Accountant Clerk

    • Securely processed and prepared checks and monies for accurate bank deposits
    • Corresponded with team members to complete daily duties in a timely manner
    • Provided excellent customer service and critical thinking skills to provide an optimal outcome

    United States Army
    5/2004- 9/2007 Unit Supply Specialist

    • Skilled in the areas of accountability, supply management and customer service.
    • Delegated tasks, instructed and supervised company employees.
    • Evaluated information obtained to determine the needs of the company.



    EDUCATION

    Happyville University
    Associate of Science in Nursing Degree, completion date-December 2012 (your not expected you WILL graduate show confidence)

    Happyville High School

    High School Diploma May 2004


    CERTIFICATIONS

    BLS/ACLS Certified
    Pediatric Abusive Head Trauma
    FEMA: ICS-100, ICS-200 for Health Care/Hospitals, IS-00700.a NIMS


    PROFESSIONAL AFFILIATIONS

    American Nurse Association (ANA)
    National Student Association (NSA)
    Kentucky Association of Nursing Students (KANS)






    If you want to keep this format this is how I would go, but I also suggest you look at whats called a "combination resume". Its very similar to what you have here but think of it as a 2 part resume. Your SUMMARY OF QUALIFICATIONS tells them what makes you qualified, and your EXPERIENCE or RELEVANT SKILLS contains the situations that prove your qualified (EXPERIENCE is different from WORK HISTORY) A combination resume will allow you to not focus so much on the specific duties of previous jobs and focus more on the skills you have obtained.

    If I have confused you here is an example,

    SUMMARY OF QUALIFICATIONS:
    - Maintain current ABC DEF and GHI qualifications
    - Passionate, caring professional with a "patient first, patient always" mentality
    - etc. etc.

    RELEVANT EXPERIENCE:

    Compassion:
    -
    Volunteered over 200 hours last year with organizations such as American red cross etc.
    - Add as many bullets as you need in these areas

    Sanitization:
    - Ensured the sanitation of dormitory buildings, keeping over 750 soldiers safe and healthy

    Etc.:
    - etc etc etc.


    then work experience but it would just include the company name, your position, dates worked and maybe address. Then include the rest of what is on your other resume like your education, certs, professional affiliations, etc.

    These are just suggestions, remember to make sure the resume reflects YOU so when your being interviewed, they don't see a different person on paper than who's in the chair in front of them.
    jadelpn likes this.
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    I like your resume mostly the 1-st part


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