Resume critique, please!

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Hi, everyone!

I will be graduating soon, so I am getting my resume together. I am afraid that my resume might suck. I have a couple different versions. I have attached what I have so far.

Please look them over and let me have it. I have my crash helmet on and I am ready for impact! :jester:

Thanks a bunch!

RN_Resume_AN.pdf

RN_Resume_AN_II.pdf

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Here is the first one (unformatted):

Can I. Graduate

Address

Address

Phone

Email

OBJECTIVE

To secure a position as a registered nurse where I can apply my teamwork, time management, multi-tasking, and critical thinking skills to provide excellent patient care and a positive patient experience

EDUCATION

My School of Nursing City, ST

Diploma - Nursing December 2011

A Great University City, ST

BA - Studio Art and Graphic Design May 2000

ACTIVITIES

My School of Nursing

SGA Volunteer Coordinator August-December 2011

School Group Volunteer Coordinator August-December 2011

Peer Tutor January-December 2011

Community Activities

Heart of a Champion 2011

Susan G. Komen Race for the Cure 2011

WORK HISTORY

Patient Care Technician (CNA II) March 2010-Present

Medical Services Floor, My Hospital

My Healthcare System City, ST

• Served on Policy and Procedure Committee where I helped develop new policies and streamline existing ones

• Responsible for collaborating with RNs to provide patient care

• Trained new hires

Certified Nurse Aide I July 2009-March 2010

LTC/Assisted Living/Rehab

My Healthcare System City, ST

• Responsible for collaborating with RNs and LPNs to provide patient care

• Trained new hires

Graphic Designer 2002-2009

Print Shop City, ST

• Responsible for designing multiple products including business stationery, newsletters, brochures, catalogs, and promotional items and preparing them for printing

• Provided customer service and account maintenance

• Trained new hire

Server 2006-2008

Seafood Place City, ST

• Responsible for providing an excellent dining experience

Graphic Designer 2001-2002

Local Real Estate Magazines City, ST

• Responsible for designing advertising for Realtors, compiling magazines, entering data for real estate listings, and maintaining archives

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Here is the second one:

Can I. Graduate

New Graduate RN

The Address • Where I Live

###.###.#### • [email protected]

PROFESSIONAL PROFILE

Caring, compassionate, dedicated, and team-oriented professional experienced in time management with superior organization skills. Able to prioritize and handle multiple tasks successfully. Proven expertise in customer service skills. Known for taking on additional responsibilities as necessary. Adaptable to new situations.

✓ Listed as NA I and NA II with the STBON

✓ Certified in Basic Life Support for the Healthcare Provider

✓ Sound knowledge of safety and privacy practices

EDUCATION

MY SCHOOL OF NURSING City, ST

Diploma - Nursing anticipated graduation December 2011

COMMUNITY COLLEGE City, ST

Certificate - Nurse Aide Training I May 2009

GREAT UNIVERSITY City, ST

BA - Studio Art and Graphic Design May 2000

WORK HISTORY

MEDICAL SERVICES UNIT, MY HOSPITAL, MY HEALTHCARE SYSTEM

City, ST March 2010-Present

Patient Care Technician (CNA II)

Assisted general medical services patients with ADLs including toileting, incontinence care, personal care, feeding, bathing, and transfers. Also received training to check blood glucose levels and to monitor surgical drains. Specialized in geriatric patients on NICHE (Nurses Improving Care for Healthsystem Elders) unit. Floated to other units, including PCCU, Neuro, Ortho, and others, to assist as necessary. Demonstrated team mentality, time management skills, and willingness to learn and grow.

• Emotionally supported many patients during acute illnesses

• Versatility and willingness to tackle challenges led to filling staffing gaps

LTC/ALF/REHAB FACILITY, MY HEALTHCARE SYSTEM

City, ST July 2009-March 2010

Certified Nurse Aide I

Assisted residents and patients with ADLs including toileting, personal care, feeding, bathing, and transfers. Also performed customer service functions. Demonstrated ability to prioritize and complete tasks in a timely manner.

• Cheerfully completed all tasks delegated by nurse

• Conscientious about completing all assigned tasks in a quick, safe manner

PRINT SHOP, INC. City, ST 2002-2009

Graphic Designer

Hired to work primarily as typesetter and back-up office personnel. Expanded role to include graphic design, building and maintaining digital archives, vendor relations, and customer service. Created organization scheme to improve operational efficiency. Continually streamlined procedures in order to make workflow more efficient.

• Increased department efficiency 30% by streamlining operations

• Decreased time spent on non-billable tasks 75% by updating technology and organizing archives

• Developed and maintained customer relationships

SEAFOOD PLACE City, ST 2006-2008

Server

Hired as a hostess and was quickly promoted to server. Praised as “one of my best servers” by former Hospitality Manager. Demonstrated ability to handle customers, correctly input information into computer system, as well as prioritize and complete multiple tasks successfully.

• Frequently took over “problem” tables and turned unhappy guests into repeat customers

• Constantly helped other servers, hostesses, kitchen staff, and management to ensure restaurant ran smoothly

LOCAL REAL ESTATE MAGAZINES City, ST 2001-2002

Graphic Designer

Provided creative ads for area Realtors and real estate companies. Maintained archive of old magazine issues. Helped Data Entry and Sales departments as needed.

• Increased department efficiency by creating and maintaining an organized archive

• Prevented the need for creating new support positions by assisting in other departments

LOCAL CAR MAGAZINES City, ST 1998-2000

Lead Desktop Operator

Advanced through a series of increasingly responsible positions to Lead Desktop Operator. Supervised Graphic Designers and ensured that all ads were completed on time. Compiled, paginated, and laid out Car Magazine with assistance from the Proofreader.

• Ensured that all magazines were delivered to the press at deadline

• Kept department running smoothly by coordinating with Sales and Accounting departments

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Specializes in Hospice, ONC, Tele, Med Surg, Endo/Output.

Love the second resume; you have a good vocabulary--lots of adjectives. With a resume like that you will impress; however the first one is also great, though shorter and less descriptive. Keep the resume one or two pages long maximum. I would send the short one to some places, and the long one to others. See what happens. I can't believe you think either of these resumes suck. Give yourself some credit. Show as much confidence at the interview as you show in your resumes, and you will soon have a job. :yeah:

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Love the second resume; you have a good vocabulary--lots of adjectives. With a resume like that you will impress; however the first one is also great, though shorter and less descriptive. Keep the resume one or two pages long maximum. I would send the short one to some places, and the long one to others. See what happens. I can't believe you think either of these resumes suck. Give yourself some credit. Show as much confidence at the interview as you show in your resumes, and you will soon have a job. :yeah:

Thanks! I feel a lot better. I haven't had to do this in a long time, so I'm a little anxious. I really appreciate what you said!

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Specializes in Physician's Office.

I like the second one better, as well. One thing I noticed about the second one is that you stated clearly and quantifiably how you were an asset to your previous employers. I think it has a stronger impact than the first one. I also like the idea of the professional profile....it gives future employers an idea of who you are, in addition to what you can accomplish :) I might borrow that idea, if you don't mind.... :)

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I like the second one better, as well. One thing I noticed about the second one is that you stated clearly and quantifiably how you were an asset to your previous employers. I think it has a stronger impact than the first one. I also like the idea of the professional profile....it gives future employers an idea of who you are, in addition to what you can accomplish :) I might borrow that idea, if you don't mind.... :)

No problem. Borrow away! Thanks for the feedback.

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