My application to NYU College of Nursing

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Specializes in ER Nurse/Entrepreneur.

Hello all,

I am currently filling out my application to The NYU College of Nursing and I was asked to write a haiku, limerick, or short 8 line poem. I never heard of a haiku prior to this application but I decided to write one of them for the very first time. Please provide some feedback so that I may rewrite it if necessary:

Photography is sort of my passion

But for others I show much compassion

So I've searched high and low

And for Nursing I'll go

Because caring is my greatest elation

Thanks!

Jason

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Photography is sort of my passion

But for others I show much compassion

So I've searched high and low

And for Nursing I'll go

Because caring is my greatest elation

A haiku only has 3 lines. The first line usually contains five (5) syllables, the second line seven (7) syllables, and the third line contains five (5) syllables. Haiku also doesn't rhyme. So, at the moment the poem you have written isn't really a haiku.

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Specializes in ER Nurse/Entrepreneur.

Hmmm, you are right. I just researched it. My professor must have made a mistake when I explained to him I have to write either a haiku or a limerick. I guess he told me this was how to write a haiku instead of a limerick. So I present to you the limerick... is it any good?

Here is the subject matter, which NYU asked that I write about:

"Write a haiku, limerick, or short (eight lines or less) poem that best represents you."

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Specializes in Gastroenterology.

I think as a limerick it's good. My only suggestion is to change 'sort of' to something else that sounds less wishy-washy. Maybe "..is my chief passion" or 'main'? Something like that.

I think it's good though.

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Specializes in ER Nurse/Entrepreneur.

Lets see..

Photography is my chief passion

But for others I show much compassion

So I've searched high and low

And for Nursing I'll go

Because caring is my greatest elation

i like it.. does anyone else have any other suggestions?

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I dont necessarily agree with using "my main" or "chief" passion when referring to photography. But agree that a different choice of words may sound better. Also the last line could be modified a bit. Just sounds a bit awkward. Overall I think its good :) Good Luck to you.

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Specializes in ER Nurse/Entrepreneur.

How about this?

Photography is my love and my passion

But for others I show much compassion

So I've searched high and low

And for Nursing I go

Because in it I find much elation

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Oh I like it!! I think it sounds perfect now and flows much better!

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