Just got rejected by CU Denver, how can I improve my essay & application?

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hi everyone,

i just got rejected to the accelerated spring 2011 program at cu denver and i am scrambling trying to improve my application. here is a little background info about myself:

overall gpa: 3.4

pre-reqs gpa: 3.8

bachelor: communication

healthcare experience: 1 volunteer experience in nursing oncology unit

professional experience: senior marketing coordinator with 5 years of related experience (still do this as my day job)

essay: (would love to email my complete essay to someone who got into the program!!)

diversity—talked about how my experience as a minority (i am hispanic from colombia) has shaped my tolerance and understanding of other cultures and ethnicities. mentioned my drive to become a hispanic nurse in order to better serve the hispanic community in denver. gave specific examples of how i was able to assist nurses in the oncology unit by being a translator.

role as a nurse & preparation to be nurse—talked about how i was inspired to be a nurse when taking care of my mother while she battled cancer. mentioned how my experience as a busy marketing coordinator who deals with many different people and deadlines has helped me become a great multi-tasker and team player. said the role of the nurse is to care for and coordinate the care of patients, teach and advise; their responsibilities are shifting and ever-growing. with the rapid evolution of the healthcare sector, today’s nurses continue to take on more responsibilities.---is this ok?

critical skills—talked about how i use critical thinking skills in my job on a daily basis. my role as a proposal coordinator is to analyze proposals, gather information from multiple sources, coordinate the activities of several individuals—both in my firm and at outside companies—and then apply my knowledge, experience and technical skills to develop a concise written and visual document that presents my firm in a compelling and unique manner---not sure if this is relevant??

can someone give me some pointers as to how i can improve my application? are my grades just too low?

should i get a cna certificate and gain some real healthcare experience?

is my essay not hitting the right points?

help!!! :crying2:

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Hey, I would love to help you out. I just got accepted to CU Denver summer 2010 traditional program. I have no previous health care experience besides 6 months volunteering at National Jewish Health in pediatrics. I think it's my essay that really got me in. I've heard of 4.0 students not getting in. I think your grades are fine. Your credentials sound great, you may just need to polish your essay up a bit. Send it to me.

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Hi Ada324,

THANK YOU so much for offering to help. Can you please email me your personal email so that I can send my essay along?

[email protected]

thanks again!!

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You are welcome. I sent it to your email.

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hmmm... not sure why i did not get an email from you.

did you send it to this address? [email protected]

sorry for the confusion... thanks!

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I just got an email back saying invalid address. Here's my email: [email protected]. See if that will work.

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ok - i just sent it to your email. thanks:)

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Get a CNA certificate and some part time CNA work experience. Perhaps repeat some classes to improve overall GPA although your prereq GPA is good enough in my book. Can't really see repeating English to raise a C to an A though. You would have to raise a lot of grades to an A to bring 3.4 up to a more competitive number. Your most cost effective bet is to go with the CNA and start looking at other schools as options.

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would anyone else who got into the program be willing to look over my essay? THANK YOU!!!:redbeathe

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Hey enfermera,

I went to the an admissions info session at CU Denver in February, and they said prior healthcare experience was not even considered in the application process. If you wanted to do the CNA thing, I think it'd still be good for you. However, I don't think it would make you more competitive in the admissions process.

Seems like your GPA seems pretty good, just make your essay awesome!

Good luck!

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Thanks everyone for your posts. Here is my update: I re-sent my application and I am still waiting to get their decision letter. I did interview with Regis and I will know if I got into that program in the next week. Hopefully I'll get into Regis as they are now my top choice.

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Hi,

I'm applying for 2012. I was wondering if you ended up getting accepted to CU Denver. I am concerned about my essay which I'm submitting soon.

Thanks!

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