Judge My Objective!!

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Specializes in Geriatrics/Sub-Acute.

Hey everyone!

I have been "lurking" for well over a year now and finally have something worth posting, LOL! I am an LPN with just over a year's experience. Even though thats hardly anything, the quality of my experience has been incredible. I was presented with an opportunity early on at my job that offered an EXCELLENT learning curve and now i'm sort of known at my job as a "go to" person to get questions answered or certain skills taught. Due to recent changes in my life and at my job, I've decided it would be best if I look for employment elsewhere (maybe stay at my job Per Diem). I would like to think that even though the quantity of my experience is limited, I am still pretty marketable.

In this economy, I figured the best way to sell myself is through my resume since they'll see that before they ever meet me. So. . . I updated my resume and tried to make it as marketable as possible. After reading it though, I realized I included waaay too much info and seemed like a miss know-it-all so I edited it quite a bit. Now though, it seems. . . off. I can't quite put my finger on it. Obviously I won't post my entire resume but I have posted my objective. I would REALLY appreciate it if some of you wise minds (especially those with hiring experience) can critique it.

Please be as candid as you like. . . I'm not sensitive. I just want honest opinions so I can improve my job prospects. My objective is below.

OBJECTIVE

To obtain a challenging and rewarding LPN position, with a progressive company, where my work experience will have valuable application. I have a vast spectrum of knowledge to include Geriatrics, Orthopedics, Cardiac Rehabilitation and Health Insurance Management, and I am interested in functioning in a capacity that will put my best assets to work.

Thanks In Advance

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Specializes in NICU.

Your objective should only be one sentence as far as I know. So....

"To obtain a challenging and rewarding LPN position at a progressive healthcare institution where I am able to fully utilize my past experience, skills, and knowledge."

Or even just

"To obtain a challenging and rewarding LPN position at a progressive healthcare institution where I am able to fully utilize my skills and knowledge to help colleagues and patients alike".

The rest of your objective where you talk about experience should all be written in your resumé.

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Specializes in Geriatrics/Sub-Acute.

Thanks for your reply. You're right, I was always taught one sentence as well, and i was thinking it seemed a little wordy. But the template for my resume doesn't leave much room to add that info so i just tried to squeeeeze it in! Lol! Do you think I can turn it all into one sentence or will it seem really long winded?

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With a year on the floor, stating that you have a "vast experience" about ANYTHING, is hyperbole. and bound to be seen as a red flag.

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Specializes in MPH Student Fall/14, Emergency, Research.

I believe your strengths should not be included in your objective.

I would put it something like this:

Objective: Utilizing my experience and knowledge in a challenging and rewarding LPN position with a progressive company, where my work experience will have valuable application.

Then, your strengths can be highlighted on your resume under your work experience, or a "skill set" section, and emphasized at your interview.

Good luck :)

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Specializes in Geriatrics/Sub-Acute.
With a year on the floor, stating that you have a "vast experience" about ANYTHING, is hyperbole. and bound to be seen as a red flag.

Point well taken. What would you say is a good way to mention my knowledge base without being overzealous? Thanks for the reply.

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Specializes in Geriatrics/Sub-Acute.
I believe your strengths should not be included in your objective.

I would put it something like this:

Objective: Utilizing my experience and knowledge in a challenging and rewarding LPN position with a progressive company, where my work experience will have valuable application.

Then, your strengths can be highlighted on your resume under your work experience, or a "skill set" section, and emphasized at your interview.

Good luck :)

Good point. I'm just so worried that those points will get lost in the resume if I include it with everything else. I have seen too many people get a resume, read the objective and skim through the rest so i tried to make my objective inspire an employer to read further. It does seem a bit out of place though. . . I guess i'll have to get over it and hope my objective (minus my "vast experience;)") can stand on it's own.

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Specializes in Med/Surg, DSU, Ortho, Onc, Psych.

You need to post the whole lot without any identifying information (names, phone numbers, etc). It's a bit hard to just critique what u have put here.

Why can't u post the whole thing?

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Good point. I'm just so worried that those points will get lost in the resume if I include it with everything else. I have seen too many people get a resume, read the objective and skim through the rest so i tried to make my objective inspire an employer to read further. It does seem a bit out of place though. . . I guess i'll have to get over it and hope my objective (minus my "vast experience;)") can stand on it's own.

Don't forget about your cover letter. That will be the first thing your prospective employer sees so I would put those points in the cover letter.

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Specializes in ER, ICU, Medsurg.

I agree with skyblue. Your cover letter is your opportunity to re-iterate or say what is not included in your resume, such as strengths you don't want "lost" in your actual resume. Secondly, the cover letter is what needs to catch the attention. It is the first thing read by the employer that says "whew, this person is well spoken and could be a great asset, let's see what her resume says". Keep your objective to one sentence and use your cover to highlight what you don't want lost. Good luck....fingers crossed for ya

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Specializes in Geriatrics/Sub-Acute.
You need to post the whole lot without any identifying information (names, phone numbers, etc). It's a bit hard to just critique what u have put here.

Why can't u post the whole thing?

Well, the nature of my position is very. . . specific. It was actually created, and I'm the only one at my job to have held it. My resume is pretty detailed in describing my duties at this particular job since it has been my primary source of experience. For fear of being identified by coworkers who may possibly be members of allnurses, I'm hesitant to post it. I know it seems overly cautious but when I was in NS, I was identified on another forum with much less!

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Specializes in Geriatrics/Sub-Acute.
Don't forget about your cover letter. That will be the first thing your prospective employer sees so I would put those points in the cover letter.

I agree with skyblue. Your cover letter is your opportunity to re-iterate or say what is not included in your resume, such as strengths you don't want "lost" in your actual resume. Secondly, the cover letter is what needs to catch the attention. It is the first thing read by the employer that says "whew, this person is well spoken and could be a great asset, let's see what her resume says". Keep your objective to one sentence and use your cover to highlight what you don't want lost. Good luck....fingers crossed for ya

Awesome Idea!! Can you believe I completely forgot about including a cover letter!? :rolleyes: I will definitely take that advice! Thanks!

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