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ok, so here is an updated version of my resume thanks to supermeghan! :) if you see anything that needs to be taken out (it is over one page at a readable font) or added in, give your critique!!! i really would like to have a solid resume that shows what i'm capable of although i am inexperienced. i left out the "objective" because i heard they were becoming obsolete and they're boring.

name

address

phone

email

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summary

i have broad knowledge in the life sciences, such as, anatomy, physiology, microbiology, and chemistry. i also encompass experience in the social sciences like sociology and psychology. i am a serene individual who is kindhearted and considerate to the needs of others. i am self-sacrificing and committed to outstanding resident care. i demonstrate leadership in being self-reliant, which inspires others to do so as well. i'm willing to broaden my education and increase knowledge of new skills that may help me maximize my effectiveness with the residents.

education/ certification

- 20008-2011: clinical lab science, wright state,

2010: certified nurse aide, medical career center

- 2012: medical laboratory technician, clark state college

clinical experience/accomplishments

- *providing care in assisted daily living activities, such as, bathing, shaving, bed making, feeding, and taking vital signs to assure the residents well-being.

- *applying adaptive equipment and mobility aids to ensure residents can ambulate safely.

- *maintaining sterile and homeostatic environments for residents and co-workers to diminish the risk of infection.

strengths

● caring ● dependable

● adaptive ● responsible

● consistent ● conscientious

● empathetic ● compassionate

- *educated in safety procedures, medical terminology, anatomy, physiology, microbiology, chemistry, etc.

- *demonstrates a consistently professional positive attitude and optimism to guarantee satisfaction with all residents.

- *possesses exceptionally competent interpersonal communication skills to encourage open communication with the residents.

employment

- 2011-2012: server, frisch's

o assisted guests with their seating.

o aided guests with menu items and helped them determine food items on the menu.

o served guest's beverages and meals in a without delay.

o reassured food was up to par with guest's standards.

o expedited checks to guests to ensure a quick dining experience.

- 2010-2011: server assistant, longhorn steakhouse

o catered to guests' dining experience through opening the door and greeting everyone.

o maintained hostess station to ensure guests are seated in a timely manner.

o aided other hostesses with cleaning, seating, and greeting guests.

o stabilized high volume nights by preserving a professional and energetic attitude which helped to calm guests and take full advantage of seating space.

- 2009-2010: cashier, wal-mart

o assisted customers in check-out lane.

o sustained clean and orderly check-out area.

o relieved upset customers and referred them to management in order to achieve customer satisfaction.

o screened customer activity to encourage public safety throughout the store.

rferences

i have 4 references. each has their name, job title, address, and phone number

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There are so many things wrong with this resume. Is this a serious post.?If this is serious, I would look on a website like indeed.com for resume advice and templates.Good luck.

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Yes, this is a serious post or I wouldn't have wasted my time posting it. I know the layout may not be the best but if there "are so many things wrong with this resume" could you atleast be helpful and give some advice on how to improve it?

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Yes, this is a serious post or I wouldn't have wasted my time posting it. I know the layout may not be the best but if there "are so many things wrong with this resume" could you atleast be helpful and give some advice on how to improve it?

Here is a link that may help.

Resume Writing Tips articles, Resumes & Letters resources | Monster

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Some of your word choices are either too dramatic, or they don't make much sense.

And your job descriptions are kind of silly, IMO. We have all eaten in a restaurant before; there's no need to be over the top about what your duties were. That, combined with the huge lists of "strengths" makes it look like you're trying way too hard. A lot of your job duties are clearly just fishing for things you think they want to hear (screened customer activity to ensure public safety at walmart?????) . I know that's the whole point of a resume, but this is just too obvious. Whoever reads it is going to know you're full of it.

I also think it's redundant when people list what they did in clinicals. If you passed the CNA course then knowing how to do these things is already expected of you.

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Thank you for your reply!

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Too much stuff on here man. Employer's don't need to know your life story. Just point out the highlights like your current education level (High School Diploma or w/e,) any certifications that are related to the job you are applying for, your work history, and references. You can attach a cover letter and write a small paragraph about why you want to be a CNA if you want to be fancy.

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so here is a revision of my resume. i know my name is different but i couldn't remember my other password so i just used my old account. sorry for the confusion.

summary **should i delete this summary altogether and just use an objective???

i have broad knowledge in the life sciences, such as, anatomy, physiology, microbiology, and chemistry. i also encompass experience in the social sciences like sociology and psychology. i am a compassionate individual who is kindhearted and considerate to the needs of others.

education/ certification **added my hs education

- 2004-2008: general education, walter e stebbins high school

- 20008-2011: clinical lab science, wright state university

- 2010: certified nurse aide training, ohio medical career center

- 2012: medical laboratory technician, clark state community college

clinical experience/accomplishments

- applying adaptive equipment and mobility aids to ensure residents can ambulate safely.

- maintaining sterile and homeostatic environments for residents and co-workers to diminish the risk of infection.

- providing care in assisted daily living activities, such as, bathing, dressing, oral care, grooming, shaving, bed making, feeding, and taking vital signs to assure the residents well-being.

strengths **cut out some strengths so it wasn't so long

- educated in safety procedures, medical terminology, anatomy, physiology, microbiology, chemistry, etc.

- demonstrates a consistently professional positive attitude and optimism to guarantee satisfaction with all residents.

- possesses exceptionally competent interpersonal communication skills to encourage open communication with the residents.

employment **i cut out some duties that seemed useless

- 2011-2012: server, frisch’s

o assisted guests with their seating.

o reassured food was up to par with guest’s standards.

o served guest’s beverages and meals in a without delay.

- 2010-2011: server assistant, longhorn steakhouse

o maintained clean hostess station to ensure guests are seated in a timely manner.

o aided other hostesses with cleaning, seating, and greeting guests.

o stabilized high volume nights by keeping a professional and energetic attitude.

- 2009-2010: cashier, wal-mart

o assisted customers in check-out lane.

o maintained clean and orderly check-out area.

o relieved upset customers and referred them to management in order to achieve customer satisfaction.

rferences

**i have 4 references

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so here is a revision of my resume. i know my name is different but i couldn't remember my other password so i just used my old account. sorry for the confusion.

summary **should i delete this summary altogether and just use an objective???

i have broad knowledge in the life sciences, such as, anatomy, physiology, microbiology, and chemistry. i also encompass experience in the social sciences like sociology and psychology. i am a compassionate individual who is kindhearted and considerate to the needs of others.

education/ certification **added my hs education

- 2004-2008: general education, walter e stebbins high school

- 20008-2011: clinical lab science, wright state university

- 2010: certified nurse aide training, ohio medical career center

- 2012: medical laboratory technician, clark state community college

clinical experience/accomplishments

- applying adaptive equipment and mobility aids to ensure residents can ambulate safely.

- maintaining sterile and homeostatic environments for residents and co-workers to diminish the risk of infection.

- providing care in assisted daily living activities, such as, bathing, dressing, oral care, grooming, shaving, bed making, feeding, and taking vital signs to assure the residents well-being.

strengths **cut out some strengths so it wasn't so long

- educated in safety procedures, medical terminology, anatomy, physiology, microbiology, chemistry, etc.

- demonstrates a consistently professional positive attitude and optimism to guarantee satisfaction with all residents.

- possesses exceptionally competent interpersonal communication skills to encourage open communication with the residents.

employment **i cut out some duties that seemed useless

- 2011-2012: server, frisch's

o assisted guests with their seating.

o reassured food was up to par with guest's standards.

o served guest's beverages and meals in a without delay.

- 2010-2011: server assistant, longhorn steakhouse

o maintained clean hostess station to ensure guests are seated in a timely manner.

o aided other hostesses with cleaning, seating, and greeting guests.

o stabilized high volume nights by keeping a professional and energetic attitude.

- 2009-2010: cashier, wal-mart

o assisted customers in check-out lane.

o maintained clean and orderly check-out area.

o relieved upset customers and referred them to management in order to achieve customer satisfaction.

rferences

**i have 4 references

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