Cover letter assistance

[Lrtx82]

Hello y'all!:)

Just got done writing my cover letter for a Unit Secretary position at a local children's hospital.

could you look it over and offer any suggestions if needed?

XXX XXXXX

3800 XXX XXXX

XXX, TX 76244

Email address

December 12, 2017

Children's Hospital

Department-(Hematology/Oncology Unit)

Sub: Application for Unit Secretary

Dear Hiring Manager,

I'm writing you to express my interest in the Unit Secretary position. I'm aware of your hospitals great reputation and believe my skills and abilities match the requirements you are looking for.

Some of my key attributes which make me the ideal candidate are listed below:

-Extensive experience greeting and assisting customers and meeting their individual needs

-Adept at answering telephones in a quick and timely manner

-Quick and efficient typing capabilities

-Familiar with basic medical terminology

-Well organized, efficient in operating computer systems, and ability to multitask

-Current BLS certified

As I'm currently a pre-nursing major taking prerequisites, I'm positive that this position will be a solid foundation in my future endeavors as a nurse.

Thank you for taking the time for considering my application for the position. I look forward to discussing my abilities in detail.

Sincerely,

[Lrtx82]

I was thinking about adding this statement in place of the statement "As I'm currently taking my prerequisites for nursing school, I'm highly passionate about providing quality care in a patient environment".

in place of the statement "I'm positive that this position will be a solid foundation in my future endeavors as a nurse".

Not sure though?

[Sour Lemon]

I was thinking about adding this statement in place of the statement "As I'm currently taking my prerequisites for nursing school, I'm highly passionate about providing quality care in a patient environment".

in place of the statement "I'm positive that this position will be a solid foundation in my future endeavors as a nurse".

Not sure though?

I'm not sure being a pre-nursing student has anything to do with the position. Both sentences sound awkward and "reaching", to me. I'd also be expecting lots of scheduling conflicts if you got accepted into a nursing program ...and for you to quit as soon as you graduated. I don't do the hiring, though. Anyone else have an opinion? Maybe some people would see it as a plus.

[Lrtx82]

Thank you for the response. I thought as I've never worked in a nursing/medical related field, it would be a good starting point while in school. And I have a while till I will get into a nursing school. I just started my prerequisites.

[Lrtx82]

I also wanted to add taking prerequisites courses for pre nursing, to show what I'm doing in my time. I'm not currently working, but am volunteering.

And I've looked over my two statements, and I'm not crazy how I worded it.

[Lrtx82]

Bump. Anyone?

[Nurse Beth, MSN]

Leaving in your intention to become a nurse can be a good thing because it shows your goals and may appeal to nurse managers who like to develop their staff.

Check your letter for grammar (ex., "hospitals" should be "hospital's" and "taking the time for considering" should be "taking time to consider") to add polish and not distractors.

Consider adding a brief example of your skills as examples are memorable (ex., Aidet training, familiar with Studor, perfect attendance- the idea is to customize to the organization and match their needs to your skill set).

Have you researched the organization enough that you could customize it more? What makes it a "great" organization? Be specific (ex., JC disease specific accreditation, community outreach).

Hope this helps, it's really good as it stands but you can take it to the next level. I have so many more tips and strategies for you in my book (link below).

Best wishes!