ABSN/Personal Statement

[cjpowers]

Hey everyone,

I am currently applying to a variety of ABSN programs, which are located in Mississippi, Tennesse, and Alabama. Out of six schools, two of them require a personal statement. I have something, but I believe it could be a lot better. Let me know what you all think.

When we consider the definition of a nurse in a dictionary, we will find a description of one who cares for a person who is sick. However, reality dictates that there is more into this field than what is described in a dictionary. As we may know being a nurse is a very rewarding and influential profession. Those who pursue nursing with a passion understand that they are not only caring for a sick person but someone's family member.

Nurses do not just care for patients, but they are the patient advocate. It is the nurse's responsibility to help prevent diseases, promote health, and work towards educating the public. I completely understand that nursing is the one field which is rightly concerned with caring for a patient. However, it is very important for nurses to be strong, compassionate, empathetic, and thoughtful. All of these qualities reflect on how to provide holistic care for your patient in their most vulnerable moments.

I strongly believe that I firmly belong to this field because since I was a young child, I had no other desire but to become a good influence in the lives of other people. I have always felt the need to take care of someone because first and foremost, I know that I have the choice, and the power to do so. I have seen at first-hand different people who are living in poverty. From where I grew up, too visiting another country and seeing that they would receive their next case of medication in the next two week or months.

I understand that the work of a becoming a nurse and living as one is difficult. However, at the end of the day, I know that I would feel a different kind of fulfillment knowing that I am able to help those who cannot care for themselves.

[elkpark]

Well, I was going to say, when I saw the title of the thread, for god's sake, whatever you write, don't say you want to become a nurse because you want to "help people," but ...

I've taught in nursing programs and served on the committees that screened applications. Essays that say, basically, "I want to be a nurse because I want to help people" get rolled eyes and tossed into the "circular file." They are looking for something more specific and thoughtful than "I have always wanted to help people." You mention having lived in (or having been exposed to) poverty and traveled abroad -- what, specifically, about those experiences drew you toward nursing and would make you a stronger candidate for a rigorous, demanding nursing program than the next person in line who wants to "help people"? I would encourage you to pursue that direction. Also, there's a lot more to nursing than just the altruistic aspect; what about the scientific/intellectual aspects? What about that side of nursing appeals to you? Hope this is at least a little helpful. Best wishes!