Rough draft of my personal statement

This is rough draft #2 of my personal statement for possible employment after graduation, I will take any and all advice, thank you!

Growing up I never pictured myself becoming a nurse; my family thought otherwise. I was never the kid who was afraid of blood or became worried when someone was sick. I was always the one with a positive attitude and provided a support system for my family. I have chosen to pursue a career in nursing because it is a natural extension of my want and talent for helping people through particularly stressful circumstances. Nursing offers me a one of a kind opportunity to combine my crisis management experience with a precise set of science-based assessment and intervention skills that will have a substantial impact on the health and well-being of an individual.

I'm currently a student at Mercyhurst University, graduating at the end of May. During my time here I have been able to gain many hours of clinical experience ranging in numerous different specialties. I've had experience on the oncology, medical/surgical, outpatient, cardiac, mental health, critical care and maternity floors. I am also completing forty hours of independent study work in a critical care field to further my understanding.

While completing my clinical hours I've had a lot of one on one patient time since we are only assigned one patient to care for at a time. This is something a lot of patients aren't used to and I find this makes their stay a lot more enjoyable. In one particular case I had a patient with severe cerebral palsy and MR and he was not able to speak. After caring for him for a few hours I noticed his eyes lit up every time I came into the room and a huge grin crossed his face. I decided I would sit in his room with him for a while, talk and hold his hand. After while his dad came to visit and was elated to see his son with such a big smile on his face and thanked me for spending more time with him because other nurses hadn't done that. I walked out of the hospital that day with a sense of elation knowing that I had made the care for that individual and his family that much better.

Through all of my clinical experience I've tried to absorb as much as I possibly can while aiding the staff so that they may give the best patient care available. Throughout my training I've been able to better my communication, leadership, and care-giving skills. Everyday I strive to be the best possible nurse, friend, family member and person I can be. I am excited for the opportunity to put everything I've learned and all of the skills I've attained to good use.