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Hello! i'm a new RPN grad from Humber College in Toronto and I'm having trouble finding work in my field... It's even difficult to find a casual position. If anyone could please critic my resume and cover letter it'd be much, MUCH appreciated! any advise would be amazing... I'm trying to keep my head up and improve my resume and interview skills, thanks everyone!-Paulina

Cover Letter:

PAULINA PETIT

Address

Cell Phone

Email

Friday, April 13th 2018

Hiring HR Manager

[institution name]

Dear Hiring Manager,

Please accept my application for the position for Registered Practical Nurse at [institution name]. As a new graduate from Humber College's PN program, I had completed my pregrad hours on the H7 Inpatient Respiratory floor at Michael Garron Hospital and have learned much about evidence based practice and client centered care, as well as utilize my knowledge, skills and judgement to prioritize client needs while balancing full patient load (6-8 patients per shift).

My current position at ParaMed as a community PSW and my previous experience from the McCall Longterm Health Care facility, Humber River Hospital and from Michael Garron Hospital has greatly equipped me to serve my clients and to provide quality client centered care. I want to be able to keep learning from you and your team so I can one day obtain my RN license to serve a broader spectrum of clients within Toronto. I also plan to one day work with Nurses Without Boarders and the Canadian Forces to help clients worldwide. I truly believe I can contribute to the quality service of care of the hospital. Please feel free to email me at (email) or call (cell number).

Thank you for your consideration, I hope to hear from you soon!

Sincerely,

Paulina Petit

(Resume enclosed)

PAULINA PETIT

Address

Cell Phone

Email

PROFESSIONAL SKILLS

•Enjoys fast paced work environments

•Has advanced interpersonal skills

•Enjoys working within a team environment

•Can effectively multitask

CERTIFICATIONS AND LICENSES

•College of Nurses of Ontario (CNO) RPN Registration Number: AH021463

•First Aid and CPR/ AED for HCP

•ASIST- Applied Suicide Intervention Skills Training

•N95 Mask Fit Certification

•Humber College's Sickle Cell Workshop 2017- Changing the Faces of Pain

•Smart Serve Certificate

•Customer Service Skills Certificate

EDUCATION

Humber College Institute of Technology and Advanced Learning

Tourism Management- Travel Industry Services (Diploma)Completion: April 2014

Practical Nursing (Diploma) Completion: July 2017

CLINICAL PLACEMENT EXPERIENCE

Michael Garron Hospital- East York GeneralJanuary 2017-April 2017

825 Coxwell Ave, East York ON. M4C 3E7

H7- Respiratory

•Provide independent student RPN care under delegation of RPN preceptor to full load of patients (6-7 patients)

•Worked 8 hour day shifts with Preceptor for 480 hours for full semester (4 months)

Humber River Hospital September 2016-December 2016

1235 Wilson Ave, Toronto ON. M3M 0B2

9W- Acute Medicineo

•Introduction to acute care and provide student RPN care under supervision of RN clinical instructor (3-4 patients)

•Worked 12 hour shifts with clinical instructor for 192 hours for full semester (4 months)

McCall Center for Continuing CareJanuary 2016-April 2016

140 Sherway Drive, Etobicoke ON. M9C 1A4

Fourth Floor- Palliative Care

•Introduction to palliative care and provide student RPN care under supervision of RN clinical instructor (3-4 patients)

•Worked 6 hour shifts twice a week for full semester (4 months)

WORK HISTORY

PSW- Personal Support WorkerMay 2017- Present

ParaMed Home Healthcare

•Support client quality of life and health, and support emotional and social needs of each client

•Assist with ambulation, meal prep, feeding, bed baths, changing bed sheets and other household duties

Waitress August 2017- Present

Brass Rail Tavern

•Serve drink orders to multiple tables while ensuring comfortable and enjoyable client environment

Housekeeping SupervisorMay 2012- Feb 2017

Quality Suites Toronto Airport

•Conduct daily inspections for cleanliness of all hotel areas: public areas, rooms, laundry etc.

•Ensure smooth work operation so that areas is clean and safe; take immediate action to rectify safety concerns

Server Oct 2013- June 2016

Airport Gate Bar and Grill

•Take orders and ensure quick, fluid service so that guest experience was pleasurable

•Clean kitchen, dining areas, washrooms, patio, staff areas, prep areas, fridges, freezer and storage areas

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OK, I'm going to be super picky, because you want your materials to be perfect. It's your chance to make an impression, don't give them any chance to put your materials aside.

Hiring HR Manager

[institution name]

Dear Hiring Manager,

Please accept my application for the position for Registered Practical Nurse at [institution name]. As a new graduate from Humber College's PN program, I had completed my pregrad hours on the H7 Inpatient Respiratory floor at Michael Garron Hospital and have learned much about evidence based practice and client centered care, as well as utilize my knowledge, skills and judgement to prioritize client needs while balancing full patient load (6-8 patients per shift).

My current position at ParaMed as a community PSW and my previous experience from the McCall Longterm Health Care facility, Humber River Hospital and from Michael Garron Hospital has greatly equipped me to serve my clients and to provide quality client centered care. I want to be able to keep learning from you and your team so I can one day obtain my RN license to serve a broader spectrum of clients within Toronto. I also plan to one day work with Nurses Without Boarders and the Canadian Forces to help clients worldwide. I truly believe I can contribute to the quality service of care of the hospital. Please feel free to email me at (email) or call (cell number).

Please consider writing out all abbreviations: PSW, ParaMed, etc.

Watch your spelling and grammar, I think it's long term, not longterm, borders not boarders.

I'm sorry, but this reads a little like you want to use your prospective employment as a stepping stone to other things, like getting your RN and working with Nurses Without Borders and the military. I would focus on what you can offer them, and talk about longer term goals in an interview only if you are asked about them.

Thank you for your consideration, I hope to hear from you soon!

Sincerely,

Paulina Petit

(Resume enclosed)

PAULINA PETIT

Address

Cell Phone

Email

PROFESSIONAL SKILLS

• Enjoys fast paced work environments

• Has advanced interpersonal skills

• Enjoys working within a team environment

• Can effectively multitask

Consider rewording these. I'm not sure this is the place to let your prospective employer know what you enjoy doing. Professional skills are areas in which you have ability or expertise. Better to say you are adept with multitasking, excel at working within a team environment, you are proficient with using advanced interpersonal techniques, and you have proven success in fast paced work environments.

Emphasize that you are good at doing these things, not just that you have the ability or like something. See the difference?

CERTIFICATIONS AND LICENSES

• College of Nurses of Ontario (CNO) RPN Registration Number: AH021463

• First Aid and CPR/ AED for HCP

• ASIST- Applied Suicide Intervention Skills Training

• N95 Mask Fit Certification

• Humber College's Sickle Cell Workshop 2017- Changing the Faces of Pain

• Smart Serve Certificate

• Customer Service Skills Certificate

No need to put in (CNO) as you have it spelled out.

CPR/AED is OK, but spell out Health Care Providers

I think the Sickle Cell Workshop goes under other education unless you received a certificate for the course.

EDUCATION

Humber College Institute of Technology and Advanced Learning

Tourism Management- Travel Industry Services (Diploma)

Completion: April 2014

Practical Nursing (Diploma) Completion: July 2017

CLINICAL PLACEMENT EXPERIENCE

Michael Garron Hospital- East York General January 2017-April 2017

825 Coxwell Ave, East York ON. M4C 3E7

H7- Respiratory

• Provide independent student RPN care under delegation of RPN preceptor to full load of patients (6-7 patients)

• Worked 8 hour day shifts with Preceptor for 480 hours for full semester (4 months)

Spell out RPN

Humber River Hospital September 2016-December 2016

1235 Wilson Ave, Toronto ON. M3M 0B2

9W- Acute Medicineo

• Introduction to acute care and provide student RPN care under supervision of RN clinical instructor (3-4 patients)

• Worked 12 hour shifts with clinical instructor for 192 hours for full semester (4 months)

McCall Center for Continuing Care January 2016-April 2016

140 Sherway Drive, Etobicoke ON. M9C 1A4

Fourth Floor- Palliative Care

• Introduction to palliative care and provide student RPN care under supervision of RN clinical instructor (3-4 patients)

• Worked 6 hour shifts twice a week for full semester (4 months)

WORK HISTORY

PSW- Personal Support Worker May 2017- Present

ParaMed Home Healthcare

• Support client quality of life and health, and support emotional and social needs of each client

• Assist with ambulation, meal prep, feeding, bed baths, changing bed sheets and other household duties

No need to have PSW, you have it spelled out.

Waitress August 2017- Present

Brass Rail Tavern

• Serve drink orders to multiple tables while ensuring comfortable and enjoyable client environment

Housekeeping Supervisor May 2012- Feb 2017

Quality Suites Toronto Airport

• Conduct daily inspections for cleanliness of all hotel areas: public areas, rooms, laundry etc.

• Ensure smooth work operation so that areas is clean and safe; take immediate action to rectify safety concerns

Server Oct 2013- June 2016

Airport Gate Bar and Grill

• Take orders and ensure quick, fluid service so that guest experience was pleasurable

• Clean kitchen, dining areas, washrooms, patio, staff areas, prep areas, fridges, freezer and storage areas

I wouldn't break out the responsibilities for the non-nursing jobs. I would definitely keep the role titles, especially the supervisor role. I would also add 'for ___ bed hotel' . Is your role at the tavern specifically called waitress? Or is it maybe server? Also, the airport job needs a role title. It sounds like you were a Customer Service Specialist; the cleaning, stocking and prepping go with that role.

Good luck! As someone who has reviewed many, many packets of materials, I can say you are someone I would take a second look at.

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You're welcome?

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Thank you!!! Sorry for the late response, I appreciate the critic! I love how you went in full detail!!

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