Please, Please, Please Critique!!! ;)

ARock&AHardplace · Nov 12, 2012

Organization is off a bit. I would have my work experience after the clinical experience section and the education after that then the rest. Next your objective bullets should be only one bullet, "resume experts" don't even consider the objective necessicary

ARock&AHardplace · Nov 12, 2012

Organization is off a bit. I would have my work experience after the clinical experience section and the education after that then the rest. Next your objective bullets should be only one bullet, "resume experts" don't even consider the objective necessicary in alot of cases. I still keep an objective in mine but it's one short sentence. However you did a good job with the wording of those bullets. As far as your non nursing experience I would highlight the "transferrable skills" you have from previous jobs.I'm commenting on my iPhone right now so I will gladly come back and finish my critique once i get to my pc

VanessaRenee1984 · Nov 12, 2012

Thanks! I see what you mean about the organizaion. Maybe I should reword "objective" to something else. Maybe Qualification summary?

ARock&AHardplace · Nov 12, 2012

My suggestions...

Hopeful Student

1234 ABC Dr. Happyland US, 12345

Cell: (999) 555-1234 Email: [email protected]

SUMMARY OF QUALIFICATIONS

(not all inclusive, add and remove things as they apply)

Highly focused, motivated, and committed professional
(state any certs that you hold that were SPECIFICALLY asked for in job posting)
Passionate about providing patient-focused care in compliance with standards of care.
Self-motivated and able to work independently as well as part of a team.

CLINICAL EXPERIENCE/ PRACTICUM

These experiences provided the opportunity to strengthen my acquired fundamental skills to provide appropriate and accurate care to my patients. I built upon my assessment, planning and evaluation skills of general patient data. Coordinated care planning based on prioritization, delegation, acuity level and available resources to promptly carry out physician orders. Skills implemented, while following standard precautions, included medication administration, wound assessments and dressing changes, IV initiation, catheter insertion/removal, head to toe/focused assessments, patient teaching and therapeutic communication.

Practium Hospital, city state
8^th floor Orthopedics (120 Clinical hours) Fall 2012

Clinical Rotations, hospital, city state
(Under clinical instructor supervision) Fall 2010- Spring 2011
- Med Surg/ Telemetry -CCU - Emergency Department
- Labor and Delivery - Postpartum - NICU
- Surgical - Mental Health

WORK EXPERIENCE

(word these bullets how you please, I didn't do the jobs so I don't have very many suggestions, just think about what you did and figure what would transfer to the job your applying for i.e. customer service can relate to patient care, if you were the safety rep you can use that, think of all the extra "hats" you have wore (especially in the army))

Store

03/2008- 12/2010 Accountant Clerk

Securely processed and prepared checks and monies for accurate bank deposits
Corresponded with team members to complete daily duties in a timely manner
Provided excellent customer service and critical thinking skills to provide an optimal outcome

United States Army

5/2004- 9/2007 Unit Supply Specialist

Skilled in the areas of accountability, supply management and customer service.
Delegated tasks, instructed and supervised company employees.
Evaluated information obtained to determine the needs of the company.

EDUCATION

Happyville University

Associate of Science in Nursing Degree, completion date-December 2012 (your not expected you WILL graduate show confidence)

Happyville High School

High School Diploma May 2004

CERTIFICATIONS

BLS/ACLS Certified

Pediatric Abusive Head Trauma

FEMA: ICS-100, ICS-200 for Health Care/Hospitals, IS-00700.a NIMS

PROFESSIONAL AFFILIATIONS

American Nurse Association (ANA)

National Student Association (NSA)

Kentucky Association of Nursing Students (KANS)

If you want to keep this format this is how I would go, but I also suggest you look at whats called a "combination resume". Its very similar to what you have here but think of it as a 2 part resume. Your SUMMARY OF QUALIFICATIONS tells them what makes you qualified, and your EXPERIENCE or RELEVANT SKILLS contains the situations that prove your qualified (EXPERIENCE is different from WORK HISTORY) A combination resume will allow you to not focus so much on the specific duties of previous jobs and focus more on the skills you have obtained.

If I have confused you here is an example,

SUMMARY OF QUALIFICATIONS:

- Maintain current ABC DEF and GHI qualifications

- Passionate, caring professional with a "patient first, patient always" mentality

- etc. etc.

RELEVANT EXPERIENCE:

Compassion:

- Volunteered over 200 hours last year with organizations such as American red cross etc.

- Add as many bullets as you need in these areas

Sanitization:

- Ensured the sanitation of dormitory buildings, keeping over 750 soldiers safe and healthy

Etc.:

- etc etc etc.

then work experience but it would just include the company name, your position, dates worked and maybe address. Then include the rest of what is on your other resume like your education, certs, professional affiliations, etc.

These are just suggestions, remember to make sure the resume reflects YOU so when your being interviewed, they don't see a different person on paper than who's in the chair in front of them.

Zazak · Nov 18, 2012

I like your resume mostly the 1-st part