Nursing School Admission Essay

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Okay so I have to submit an essay, the topic is "What Does Becoming a Nurse Mean to Me"

Let me know what you all think. The essay must be between 300-350 words.

For as long as a I can remember, Ive always had this drive to help people. I knew I wanted to work in the health field when my grandmother was diagnosed with Alzheimer's Disease more than 18 years ago. I spent countless hours helping her with daily activities and self care at such a young age. It wasn't until I started working as a nursing assistant 12 years ago that I knew becoming a Nurse was my calling. The thought of being there for those in their time of need still gives me a great sense of joy and fulfillment. To become a nurse, in my opinion is one of the most selfless acts. There are so many things that you do for your patients' that exceed what some of society sees as just a medication distributor in scrubs. Becoming a nurse means that I will be able to be an advocate for my patients while they're in their most vulnerable state. I will have the clinical skills to successfully meet their individual care plans; and the knowledge to educate my patients. I will have the ability and opportunity to be there for them medically, emotionally, psychologically and spiritually. Becoming a nurse means that I will be able to make a patients unfortunate stay in the hospital not only a good experience but as comfortable as possible. While patients are the main and most important focus of the nursing practice, we can't forget about the families' of our patients. In many instances, the family is who we must focus on. Like we would with patients, we then provide advocacy to the families and give them the comfort needed in their situation. While I hold many of the personal qualities that make a great nurse, the most important thing now is getting the proper education in Nursing School. That in the end would give me the knowledge and clinical tools necessary to perform my job successfully.

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Specializes in Med/Surg, Ortho, ASC.

I would divest your essay of words such as "selfless" and "calling." Nursing schools want to know that applicants are ready & able to get down to work. Not that they feel "called" to a profession. Feeling a "calling" should be limited to those entering a ministry-focused profession.

Nursing is not a ministry to underserved souls. It is a profession that requires education, hard work & dedication.

P.S. Please review your use of plural and possessive forms of words. Grammar, spelling & punctuation mistakes can send your essay to the discard pile.

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Specializes in Psych (25 years), Medical (15 years).
"What Does Becoming a Nurse Mean to Me"

Let me know what you all think.

I admire your endeavor for feedback on your essay, Sara_Ashley.

I truly appreciate Roser13's opinion. However, I believe identifying the reason why you desire nursing as a calling is okay by me. Like the ministry, nurses too can feel a compulsion. I felt nursing was a calling for me, and I've been in the medical field for nearly 38 years. I continue to feel that nursing was a calling and believe that feeling has kept me going.

I would also suggest the use of paragraphs. The split second it takes the eyes travel over a blank space from one major area of information to the next allows the brain to process the information in readiness for more.

Large paragraphs are read as a string of speech similar to someone who speaks in a hyperverbal mode.

Otherwise, I enjoyed reading your short essay, Sara_Asheley and wish you the best of luck in your endeavor!

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For as long as a I can remember, Ive always had this drive to help people. I knew I wanted to work in the health field when my grandmother was diagnosed with Alzheimer's Disease more than 18 years ago. I spent countless hours helping her with daily activities and self care at such a young age. It wasn't until I started working as a nursing assistant 12 years ago that I knew becoming a Nurse was a career that I would endeavor upon. The thought of being there for those in their time of need still gives me a great sense of joy and fulfillment.

To become a nurse, in my opinion is one of the most rewarding career choices. There are so many things that you do for your patients' that exceed what some of society sees as just a medication distributor in scrubs. Becoming a nurse means that I will be an advocate for my patients while they're in their most vulnerable state. I will have the clinical skills to successfully meet their individual care plans and the knowledge to educate. I will have the ability and opportunity to be there for them medically, emotionally, psychologically and spiritually. Becoming a nurse means that I will be able to make a patients unfortunate stay in the hospital not only a good experience but as comfortable as possible. While patients are the main and most important focus of the nursing practice, we can't forget about the families' of our patients. In many instances, the family is who we must focus on. Like we would with patients, we then provide advocacy to the families and give them the comfort needed in their situation.

While I hold many of the personal qualities that make a great nurse, the most important thing now is getting the proper education in Nursing School. Therefore, being accepted into your program would allow me to gain the knowledge and clinical tools necessary to become a successful Nurse.

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Specializes in Med/Surg, Ortho, ASC.
For as long as a I can remember, Ive (I've) always had this drive to help people. I knew I wanted to work in the health field when my grandmother was diagnosed with Alzheimer's Disease more than 18 years ago. I spent countless hours helping her with daily activities and self care at such a young age. It wasn't until I started working as a nursing assistant 12 years ago that I knew becoming a Nurse was a career that I would endeavor upon (look up "endeavor". One doesn't endeavor upon.). The thought of being there for those in their time(s) of need still gives me a great sense of joy and fulfillment.

To become a nurse, in my opinion is one of the most rewarding career choices. There are so many things that you do for your patients' (patients) that exceed what some of society sees as just a medication distributor in scrubs. Becoming a nurse means that I will be an advocate for my patients while they're in their most vulnerable state. I will have the clinical skills to successfully meet their individual care plans and the knowledge to educate. I will have the ability and opportunity to be there for them(y) medically, emotionally, psychologically and spiritually. Becoming a nurse means that I will be able to make a patients (patient's) unfortunate stay in the hospital not only a good experience but as comfortable as possible. While patients are the main and most important focus of the nursing practice, we can't forget about the families' (families) of our patients. In many instances, the family is who we must focus on. Like we would with patients, we then provide advocacy to the families and give them the comfort needed in their situation.

While I hold many of the personal qualities that make a great nurse, the most important thing now is getting the proper education in Nursing School. Therefore, being accepted into your program would allow me to gain the knowledge and clinical tools necessary to become a successful Nurse.

Just some suggestions.

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Thank you Roser13!!!!

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