Kindly review my cover letter pls thanks

[cavitenurse1990]

an , 2014

The Human Resources Director

(Complete Address)

Dear Sir:

I'm desirous to seek employment as a Nurse in your prestigious medical facility. As a professionally-trained Nursing practitioner, I believe that you will find my qualifications useful in your organization.

I'm a graduate of Bachelor of Science in Nursing, B.S.N. from a leading nursing school in the Philippines with Four (4) years of comprehensive nursing education in my name. In addition, I have had Two (2) years of actual caregiving experience obtained in a facility located in (cite the place of work).

I can bring to the table, among other things, the skills and knowledge in nursing care, an international perspective borne out of having lived and worked across cultural imperatives, a well-rounded belief and values system, and the personal attributes of hard work, driven to excellence and impeccable integrity. I can assure you I'm a fast learner and can adapt to new ideas to meet the requirements of the job.

An updated resume is attached for your evaluation. I can be reached at the contact phone numbers stated above.

Thank you for taking the time and for the opportunity to touch base with your esteemed institution.

Sincerely,

[CrazyGoonRN]

I would change desirous to desire and change all your "I'm"'s to "I am"

Also, if you are spelling out the numbers four and two they need to start with a lower case letter and the actual numbers do not need to be in parenthesis next to the word.