FNP admission essay critique

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Wanting to submit my application before the weekend and would love some feedback on my essay!

Here is the prompt: Describe the reason for selecting the our school for graduate studies in nursing. Explain your plans for pursuing the MSN degree. Briefly summarize your background professional experience relevant to your specialty selection and rationale for the specialty selected and future career goals, and how does the University of Alabama School of Nursing influence your decision. An account of the patient populations you have worked with and the roles you have performed assists in the understanding of your experience. Additionally, using APA format, provide a clear and succinct explanation to illustrate the need for master's prepared nurses in each specialty area selected.

 

Reflecting upon my journey to become a registered nurse and now practicing as one, I have not only developed professionally, but also individually. I wanted a career that challenged me on a daily basis and a job where there was continuously more to learn. Since completing an accelerated nursing degree program, I learned hard work is never easy but the outcome is always worth it. Continuing my education at the University of to receive a Master's of Science in Nursing (MSN) would be my greatest challenge and largest accomplishment. I would love to attend the MSN program at where the commitment to academics and nursing parallels my own. is ranked nationally for their MSN program giving me confidence that I will receive an education of admirable quality and excellent opportunities for hands on experience.

While attending nursing school, I spent my last month in the emergency department. Patients frequently came in with stroke level blood pressure and no primary care provider. Complications from prolonged elevated blood pressure usually resulted in a hospital admission to get it under control. These patients resonated with me because education and access to health care could have saved them an admission. Advancing my degree will allow me to provide the community with more resources for healthcare. I will work to decrease the prevalence of preventable conditions in our community and help my patients avoid unnecessary health care costs.

As a nurse at Children's of , I have learned to relate to my patients and their parents. Often I am comforting a child before a procedure and answering questions from anxious parents. Building a relationship makes them feel comfortable with me as their nurse and helps build a trusting environment. My goal is to work in a primary care clinic where I can get my patients interested and enthusiastic about their health by building relationships that will last a lifetime. As a family nurse practitioner, I will utilize the skills I learned as a nurse while extending my scope of practice to treat them from the beginning of their illness until their recovery.

According to the Association of American Medical Colleges, there will be a shortage of 130,000 physicians by 2025 (Iglehart, 2014). The shortage stems from the increasing number of people covered by insurance and our growing elderly population. Family nurse practitioners can provide high quality care and effectively meet the demand for health care services ultimately decreasing the overall shortage of healthcare providers (Iglehart, 2014). According to Naylor and Kurtzman (2010), studies found when comparing nurse practitioner and physician costs, a nurse practitioner was more cost effective. Access to health care is of the utmost importance and family nurse practitioners are the solution. Treating patients across their life span, formulating health plans, follow-up visits, and educating patients are reasons I look forward to becoming a family nurse practitioner. As John Wesley said, Do all the good you can. By all the means you can. In all the ways you can. In all the places you can. At all the times you can. To all the people you can. As long as you ever can.�

thanks!! ?

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It is not formatted yet correct? NOT being negative just asking.

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Specializes in ICU, Military.

@roc23

I think this is a great start. When is your deadline for submission? It took me well over a month to write my admission essay and i edited and tweaked it many times, in addition to having others read and edit it also. Is there a word count limit?

I applied to and was accepted into a state school back home and begin in Fall 2017. I met their minimum gpa requirement barely (3.07, minimum was 3.0) and I feel that my personal statement is what got me in due to the competitiveness of the program. You may not be in the position I was in, but I know from my research that many schools weigh the personal statement heavily so if you have time, use it to pour your heart into your statement.

I'll admit I'm not the best at critiquing, so hopefully you'll get more feedback than the above comment who just took a jab instead of offering constructive criticism. Good luck to you, keep us updated on your submission and admission decision in the future!

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Nope not formatted. I'm well aware of APA so I just wanted this post to critique my content!

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Was not taking a jab which is why I stated not being negative but I was still misunderstood. Anyway the content is good reading. I would have someone who knows you personally read it and see if it reflects who you really are. Hope that helps and good luck.

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Thanks for taking the time to read!

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Specializes in Adult Nurse Practitioner.
roc23 said:
Wanting to submit my application before the weekend and would love some feedback on my essay!

Here is the prompt: As a family nurse practitioner, I will utilize the skills I learned as a nurse while extending my scope of practice to treat them from the beginning of their illness until their recovery.

thanks!! ?

Your essay is pretty good for the first pass. As PP notes, you will revise this numerous times before finally sending in. I do however have some reservation on this statement you made. Unlike the critical setting in which as a nurse we help them through the process and "recover" enough to go home, this is not the position of a clinical NP. If you were applying for an acute NP route, this would be an appropriate statement...I'm just saying :yeah:

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