I am applying for nursing school and I have to turn in my application this week. I am so nervous about the essay I wrote because I don't think it says enough. I had a sociology teacher recently tell me my writing pretty much sucks and I am scared the school will think so as well. Please give me your brutally honest opinion. We had to answer (1) Any experiences, activities, or accomplishments that have fostered your personal growth and prepared you for a leadership role in nursing; (2) Your reasons for selecting nursing as a career; and (3) What influenced you to select XXX School of Nursing. I don't know if it's detailed enough, too long or too short lol. Please any insight would be appreciated.
Growing up, I have always felt that my mother was different from others. She was continually courageous, eloquent, and never afraid to take the lead. She attributed this bravery to her training as a registered nurse. Her confidence lit a spark of fascination in my young mind, and I knew I wanted to build a career that would challenge me to be the best person I could be. I worked hard throughout primary school and was accepted into an academically challenging high school in Philadelphia, PA. I quickly discovered a passion for science and excelled in Biology.
Though I did well in high school and graduated with honors, I decided to join the work force to experience diverse occupations. Eventually, I gravitated towards the customer service field. I was already self-aware of my love for working with others, but it was customer service that uncovered my desire of solving problems for people in need. This satisfied me for a time, but eventually I felt incomplete.
I thought back on a time that I felt most proud, and remembered how exhilarated I felt after volunteering to help refugees relocated from the Hurricane Katrina disaster. These people, who were not much different from my own family and friends, needed not only my physical support, but emotional as well. I only required instruction once from the shelter I was assisting, and was able to lead a team in acclimating refugees to their temporary homes, while providing a sympathetic ear and encouraging words. I welcomed the challenge of thinking critically in a fast-paced environment and making decisions based on my observations. It would be an honor to work among medical professionals and assist physicians in a team effort to treat and encourage people in their time of need. The memory of this experience only assured that not only did I want to be a nurse; I was born to be a nurse.
After researching multiple nursing programs
in Pennsylvania, I read an article listing XXX School of Nursing as a top ten nursing program in the state. It highlighted XXX's high completion rate and state of the art facility. I consulted several registered nurses and they advised that hospital-based nursing institutions were difficult, but prepared you more efficiently for the rigors of the nursing field. Being aware of the demanding nature of nursing school, I sought to continue my education in a more rural area than Philadelphia. I needed to ensure a successful immersion into my collegiate career.
In 2016, I made the decision to move my two children to XXXX to pursue my goals. Currently, I am enrolled at XXXXX Community College, taking courses to prepare myself to be a potential student of this program. I maintain my passion for biology as I excel in my classes. I believe I can become a XXXX School of Nursing graduate and begin my nursing career at the best institution possible. Teaching my daughters that we all have the ability to evolve and persevere is a lesson that I want to show, rather than tell.