i need some help from my fellow nursing members. i am applying for a scholarship
to help with nursing school
and like most scholarships
you must answer an essay question. i would just like everyone's
on my essay that i wrote. don't be afraid to speak up and say, "hey this essay really sucks!" keep in mind that it is shorter than most because we only have about half of a page to write it in. oh by the way the topic is "why you want to be a nurse". alright here it goes:
on the 27th of june, 2009, my little brother will be deployed, over seas to serve our country. as i look back at the time-line of my family, i realize that serving our country has become an honored tradition. grandfathers, aunts, uncles, cousins, brothers, have all served in a branch of the military. i "am" proud of what sacrifices they have "gave for other's". the feeling of serving our country must run deep in my family's veins, because i also have the yearning, in my heart to serve people! this is my way of giving back to my country and man kind. if i can just help one person live, then i will have done more than i ever thought i could do. so, while my brother is on the front lines defending our country, i will be also fighting my own battle of becoming the best nurse i can be.
so what do you think
? i am trying not to be too cheesy but put some feeling into it.
thanks in advance for taking the time to help me out :d