Professional Organization Conference - page 2

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The student applied for and was awarded the grant to attend the Professional Organization conference. Due to the intransigence of an administrative assistant, the student was forced to pay the $200 required for the conference,... Read More


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    To give you some honest feedback as a college teacher that might help you improve your grade ...

    I didn't think it was very well written. It seemed more of a "blow by blow account" or a "stream of consciousness" paper than an organized summary of the events and your impresssions. I don't know what your exact writing assignment was, but I suggest you review the directions/guidelines carefully. If I were your teacher, I would be taking serious deductions for the writing itself for not drawing conclusions, making an argument, etc.. I would want to see you identify and clarify main themes or ideas, using examples to support your assertions, etc. -- not just a play-by-play account of events and your emotional reactions to them. In other words, I would want the report/essay to be more professional and scholarly -- even if you did not like that particular conference.

    Separate your task of writing a college-level paper from your emotions about the conference. Don't let the fact that you didn't appreciate the conference (or other things about your school experience) influence the style and intellectual rigor of your academic work. If you didn't like the conference, that's OK -- but that's no excuse not to write a less than rigorous intellectual summary and analysis of it. Follow the guidelines of the assignment and write at the level expected by other college-level assignments.

    Good luck to you. I hope you can edit the paper to the level at which you can pass the course.
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    Quote from llg
    To give you some honest feedback as a college teacher that might help you improve your grade ...

    I didn't think it was very well written. It seemed more of a "blow by blow account" or a "stream of consciousness" paper than an organized summary of the events and your impresssions. I don't know what your exact writing assignment was, but I suggest you review the directions/guidelines carefully. If I were your teacher, I would be taking serious deductions for the writing itself for not drawing conclusions, making an argument, etc.. I would want to see you identify and clarify main themes or ideas, using examples to support your assertions, etc. -- not just a play-by-play account of events and your emotional reactions to them. In other words, I would want the report/essay to be more professional and scholarly -- even if you did not like that particular conference.

    Separate your task of writing a college-level paper from your emotions about the conference. Don't let the fact that you didn't appreciate the conference (or other things about your school experience) influence the style and intellectual rigor of your academic work. If you didn't like the conference, that's OK -- but that's no excuse not to write a less than rigorous intellectual summary and analysis of it. Follow the guidelines of the assignment and write at the level expected by other college-level assignments.

    Good luck to you. I hope you can edit the paper to the level at which you can pass the course.
    thank you. that is very helpful. the blow by blow account section is only there because of the grading rubric. I should have edited that for length and just summarized- honestly the paper was not easy to write because I just wasn't into it. a re-write is not possible but I did ace the class despite the horrific grade I received.
    Last edit by gypsyd8 on May 21, '13
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    I'm glad it didn't hurt your grade in the end. I think llg makes good points about organization, but honestly without seeing the assignment and grading rubric it's impossible to say whether you deviated from the guidelines.

    Totally off-topic, but did you pick that picture? It's so odd, it cracks me up every time I see it.


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