Why I want to be a nurse essay

[jwood416]

I need some input on my essay of why i want to be a nurse. I feel like it's missing something. Any feedback would be greatly appreciated!

Why I want to be a nurse

My experience in a healthcare setting inspired my interest in nursing. I am currently a certified nurses aide and have been in practice for 8 years. My passion for taking care of others is why I want to be a nurse. Nursing is not just a profession, it is an opportunity to make a difference in someone else's life.

I have had my own personal experience that struck a chord. I was in a car accident a few years back . A couple of nurses were headed home from their shift at our local hospital and immediately stopped to see what they could do to help. They assesed my injuries to make sure none were life threatening while we waited for an ambulance. I was scared and in pain but those two nurses were my anchor in my time of need. They held and comforted me at my worst. It didn't matter that they were tired from being on their feet for 12 hours taking care of patients, or that their families were waiting for them at home. What mattered was that someone was in trouble and they put my needs before their own. The selflessness and compassion I witnessed reflected in the way they cared for me.

I have been given the opporotunity to develop my skills to become the best nurse I can be. Learning to treat patient illness, help maintain health, and better their quality of life. Becoming a nurse is like winning the metaphorical lottery, where wealth isn't measured in money, but in the knowledge you aquire and the reward you recieve in touching someone's life.

[MyAimIsTrue, BSN]

I think you should start with the car accident story. Otherwise your essay starts off sounding like everybody else's essay. Ho-hum. Flesh out the car accident scenario a bit--like how did they assess you? How did they comfort you? This will help show that you know what nurses do, besides "help people."

[jwood416]

Well I was 24 hour post-op from a cholecystectomy, the nurses checked my incisions making sure I didn't have any bleeding. One nurse held my hand while the other literally had me half way across her lap giving me reassurance that everything was going to be ok. I'm having a bit of trying trouble making everything flow together.