Nursing school application essay - page 2

What do you guys think of my essay? Please comment it would be greatly appreciated! Thanks! ----- When we look up the word "nurse" in the dictionary, we will read something like "somebody who... Read More

  1. by   tm10016
    Hi trepinCT ! I'm new to this forum but I'm applying to a fast track nursing program and need help with my essay. I read your comments and critics towards another member and respect them and find it great constructive criticism. if possible can you please give me your email, Thank you !
  2. by   Tanisha_PCA
    Hello! Can someone read my essay and tell me what you think. I've changed some names for personal reasons. I would appreciate it. Thanks!!!

    September 18, 2012

    I want to pursue an education in nursing because health care is where my heart is. I currently work as A NT (Nursing Technician) at a Hospital in the Med/Surg-Pediatric Patient Care Department and I love what I do. I think helping someone is the next best thing to being A mother, Nothing is more rewarding. Ever since I could remember I always had A heart for helping and doing things for others. I cared about what others were going through in life. I always told myself “you can teach me how to have manners, but you cant teach me how to be compassionate for others". Being compassionate was naturally apart of who I was, and thats why I think becoming A nurse will best fit the type of person I am.

    Who inspired me to pursue my education in nursing was my daughter Kalie and my dad. Before Kalie was born “I thought I knew what it was I wanted to do in life. I thought at first: I wanted to go to school to become A dental assistant, and then some day I would become A hygienist. My focus and my heart wasn’t quite in that field of work. When I had my daughter I began to mature in life. I knew I had to become someone my daughter could look up to, because to be honest I was getting tired of using that same old phrase “I just want you to be better than me”. The same phrase my grandmother told my mother, and my mother told me. I wanted to show my daughter I could be better.

    In the process of becoming someone better for my daughter my dad had gotten sick. Because of the divorce my dad had gone into A deep depression for over A period of time causing him to develop A mental illness called psychosis. On top of both of his kidney's failing, being hypertension for blood pressure, and developing periodontal disease. My parents were divorced, so I felt like because I was the oldest of the three sisters the responsibilities were on me. I always told myself "my dad took care of me as A child, so it's only right that I take care of him". This surely was A full time job. I thought for sure furthering my education was going to be impossible, but my parents always encouraged me to do better for myself. Taking care of my dad was rewarding to me. Made me feel like I had done something or thought about someone else besides myself. I felt like if my dad was to pass tomorrow I would surely be sad, but happy with myself knowing that I did the best for my dad that I could do. That is how I feel at the end of the day when I leave for home from work. I feel I give it my all in taking care of my patients and at the end of the day Im happy with myself and the job I’ve done.

    I am happy and eager to further my education in health care. Just as happy and eager as I was when I started my Nursing Assistant program. Coming from A family were most did not have A high school diploma. Let alone have A college degree, so finishing up my Nursing Assistant Program was A big accomplishment for me. By finishing the Nursing Assistant program I knew I was on my way to doing what came natural of me, and thats helping others. That is why I want to take the next step in becoming A nurse.
  3. by   coffeesmile
    hi! can you please help me regarding my application?
  4. by   antollis
    Hello trepinCT, I am currently writing my essay to get into Nursing school and I find your advice very helpful. Can I email you my essay so you can review it?

  5. by   Ruhi0907
    Hey you seem very intelligent.... Would you mind going over my essay? English is not my first language so I would really appreciate it