Please read and Comment-Statement of goals and objectives for nursing school

[baileyzt]

Hi!! I am applying for UMDNJ/Rutgers part time nursing program. I am attempting to write my admission essay. They want an essay of goals and objectives. If anyone could please please please read my essay and give me feedback. ANY AND ALL help is welcomed!!!!!

]My love and appreciation of healthcare began the first night I spent in a hospital. As a child my brother and I were taken from my mother and put into foster care. The night that we were taken I remember being terrified and confused. Scared of the police that were trying to help me because in my adolescent mind, all I could see was that they were the people that were taking me from my home and away from my mother. We were taken to the hospital before we were put into a temporary home. The hospital provided a sense of safety that I had yet to experience that night. The hospital was bright and full of doctors and nurses that smiled at me and answered some of my questions, helping to dispel some of my confusion. As the next few years of my life unfolded I would always remember this night as one of the few times that I felt safe and cared for.

This first brief introduction into the healthcare field would leave a lasting impression. It showed me the ability of doctors and nurses to provide a sense of safety to their patients. Once I entered college I knew that I wanted to be able to do the same for others, so I decided to major in biology with a concentration in health professions. During school I volunteered at the local hospital while working full time at a bank in order to afford my education. I volunteered on the neonatal unit of the hospital. On the neonatal unit I was able to assist the nurses with the babies whose mothers were not able to be at their side by comforting the babies and providing the nurses with any supplies that they might need. The time that I spent volunteering was able to show me the compassion that nurses had for their patients and helped me to solidify my interest in the healthcare field.

During college I attempted to get a job within the healthcare field so that I could get a better idea of what I wanted to do once I graduated. However, it was not until after I graduated that I was able to secure a job in the field that I wanted. I was hired as a Unit Clerk at ABC Hospital in ABC, NJ. It was during my time as a clerk that I was able to see and understand that I wanted to go to nursing school. During my college years I had always worked with people while in banking. But as a clerk I was able to work directly with patients and beside nurses, doctors, physician assistants, and other healthcare professionals; giving me a better understanding of the field that I wanted to enter.

Working with patients allows me to better realize how much patients depend on the nursing staff and doctors to care for them and give them a voice when they need one. During my time as a clerk I am quickly able to realize that the units I work on in the hospital depend on everyone; doctors, nurses, nursing assistants, LPNs, clerks, and housekeeping to help the unit run smoothly. It was clearly evident that the importance of teamwork is emphasized in the hospital. I am able to see the demanding job that nurses have. I see nurses that have six to eight patients that work on medical surgical floors of the hospital while also seeing the nurses that only have two to three patients that work on intensive care floors. I see that both kinds of nurses are able to provide individual attention to every one of their patients no matter the circumstance. I have come to understand that a nurse's job is not just dealing with patients but dealing with their families as well. Working as a clerk has helped me realize that there could be some frustrating difficult days as a nurse; but that there are also rewarding ones. My dream of working in healthcare has become more focused and concrete because of my experiences as a unit clerk. I now hope to go to nursing school and get my bachelors of science in nursing degree. My ultimate goal is to further my education even more and eventually obtain my master's degree in nursing.

[LoriRNCM, ADN, ASN, RN]

Hi!! I am applying for UMDNJ/Rutgers part time nursing program. I am attempting to write my admission essay. They want an essay of goals and objectives. If anyone could please please please read my essay and give me feedback. ANY AND ALL help is welcomed!!!!!

]My love and appreciation of healthcare began the first night I spent in a hospital. As children, my brother and I were taken from my mother and put into foster care. The night that we were taken I remember being terrified and confused. I was afraid of the police that were trying to help me because, in my adolescent mind, all I could see was that they were the people that were taking me from my home and away from my mother. We were taken to the hospital before we were put into a temporary home. The hospital provided a sense of safety that night that I had yet to experience. The hospital was bright and full of doctors and nurses that smiled at me and answered some of my questions, helping to dispel some of my confusion. As the next few years of my life unfolded, I would always remember this night as one of the few times that I felt safe and cared for.

This first brief introduction into the healthcare field would leave a lasting impression. It showed me the ability of doctors and nurses to provide a sense of safety to their patients. Once I entered college, I knew that I wanted to be able to do the same for others, so I decided to major in biology with a concentration in health professions. During school I volunteered at the local hospital while working full time at a bank in order to afford my education. I volunteered on the neonatal unit of the hospital. On the neonatal unit I was able to assist the nurses with the babies whose mothers were not able to be at their side by comforting the babies and providing the nurses with any supplies that they might need. The time that I spent volunteering was able to show me the compassion that nurses had for their patients and helped to solidify my interest in the healthcare field.

During college I attempted to get a job within the healthcare field so that I could get a better idea of what I wanted to do once I graduated. However, it was not until after I graduated that I was able to secure a job in the field that I wanted. I was hired as a Unit Clerk at ABC Hospital in ABC, NJ. It was during my time as a clerk that I was able to see and understand that I wanted to go to nursing school. During my college years I had always worked with people while in banking, but as a clerk I was able to work directly with patients and beside nurses, doctors, physician assistants, and other healthcare professionals, giving me a better understanding of the field that I wanted to enter.

Working with patients allows me to better understand how much patients depend on the nursing staff and doctors to care for them and give them a voice when they need one. During my time as a clerk I am quickly able to realize that the units I work on in the hospital depend on everyone; doctors, nurses, nursing assistants, LPNs, clerks, and housekeeping in order to help the unit run smoothly. It was clearly evident that the importance of teamwork is emphasized in the hospital. I am able to see the demanding job that nurses have. I see nurses that have six to eight patients that work on medical surgical floors of the hospital while also seeing the nurses that only have two to three patients that work on intensive care floors. I see that both kinds of nurses are able to provide individual attention to every one of their patients no matter the circumstance. I have come to understand that a nurse’s job is not just dealing with patients but dealing with their families as well. Working as a clerk has helped me realize that there could be some frustrating difficult days as a nurse, but that there are also rewarding ones. My dream of working in healthcare has become more focused and concrete because of my experiences as a unit clerk. I now hope to go to nursing school and get my bachelor of science in nursing degree. My ultimate goal is to further my education even more and eventually obtain my master’s degree in nursing.

Very good, I noted a few grammatical and punctuation issues which I edited in your quote, but I loved it.