Nursing essay help. ASAP please!!

[Stphnie]

So the only thing the school is asking for in the essay is what are your objectives and why are you applying to the school. I know that that isnt all they want but I've spent forever trying to figure out how to put everything. This is a rough rough draft and I need help getting it to flow better or suggestions on what to add or change. Your help is much appreciated!!

Nurses provide a patient's hospital experience, supplying information and care before & after their visit with their doctors. It is often the Advice Nurse who assists a patient with health related inquiries, arranging appointments, and related services. Nurses embody the traits of compassion, apprehensiveness, and communication, and I believe that they are the backbone of the medical field.

Having the opportunity to work with RNs and LPNs for the past year, I understand that it takes an exceptional type of character to become a nurse. While nursing is rewarding, it is also a challenging profession that only dedicated individuals can adhere to. My experience as a nursing assistant has helped me realize that I'm capable of executing the duties in an efficient manner.

I graduated from Portland State University this past August with a Bachelors of Science in Psychology. My initial interest in psychology is what led me to become interested in the field of nursing. The idea of nursing was brought to my attention when my professor was discussing the different careers one could obtain with a degree in psychology. The aims of psychology are to benefit society and understand humanity, goals that follow closely to the goals of nursing.

Upon realizing a career as a nurse would be most fulfilling, I took a course to become a nurses assistant in order to get more of an idea of what being a nurse would be like. This was the most humbling experience I have ever encountered and I have enjoyed every bit of it. I work for a nursing home that provides care for patients with mostly Alzheimer's or dementia. As a CNA I assist the residents with daily activities of living which includes dressing, bathing and more. My job is taxing physically and mentally but it has never caused me distress. Although I am not able to help the residents with pain via medication, I try to make every day as enjoyable as it can be. Being close to my family, I do my best to treat the patients how I would want my family members to be treated.

The close relationship I share with my family has had the greatest impact on my life. Growing up in a hispanic family and being surrounded by Mexican culture I learned to value family, hard work, be understanding, open-minded and have compassion towards others. Being the oldest and only daughter of three kids has instilled a need to lead by example for my younger brothers. The positive and encouraging mentality the members of my family posses have been influential in making me who I am today. I am the first person in my family to attend college and obtain a degree and they are the reason it was possible.

International travel has also played a significant role in shaping me into the person I am today. In my travels abroad I have pushed myself to experience challenging and unfamiliar situations. I have gained a greater perspective and confidence that I can face the difficult and uncommon. My journeys around the world and my volunteer and leadership roles have led me to the path I am currently on and I feel that enrolling in nursing school is the next step needed to maximize my abilities.

My goal is to further my career in the medical field by becoming a Registered Nurse and eventually a Nurse Practitioner. This program will help me use my principle strengths of compassion, motivation and understanding effectively. As I believe that these three attributes are necessary to finding success in the field of nursing. I am also able to bring an ethnic and international perspective to the classroom that is sure to enrich discussion, and serve as a catalyst for new insight amongst my peers. My positive energy is infectious, and I feel it has the power to keep myself and others motivated through trying times. Throughout my life I have challenged myself by pursuing difficult goals, and thriving in uncommon situations, and although I know I will face both throughout my tenure in your nursing program, I feel confident your program will help shape me into the leader I can be and into a true asset for your university.

[Student4_life]

Its strong, but tighten it up. They are reading anywhere from Hundreds to thousands of these essays, one after the next (just think how tedious that is). Keep it clean.

For my style of writing I stay away from defining, or assigning attributes to things that I am a novice to and the audience is an expert on. I also stay away from "I feel, and I believe"

I get that you can play the minority card, honestly I am jealous. But it doesn't add alot and it's as played out as "I want to help people" and "this one time my (insert person of value here) got sick...". Your heritage is a very real part of you, but to have a paragraph centered on that and to mention it later is a stretch. Be unique, make them want to read about you. I had a similar assignment and used a bit of humor in my essay to open, used a modified 5 paragraph format so they could skip my body paragraphs if they chose to, and tied it all together at the end with why I will succeed (snuck in a chance to include my GPA as hard data to go with other qualities.

You bring alot to the table, you just need to express your greatness that will get your paper into the file that is not circular.

I am sorry I can only be a constructive critic, but I hope I helped.