Hi, I was just wondering if anyone could give me a little feedback about my nursing admission essay. I am acutually working on two. One has a specific question for Umass Boston, about how a specific decision impacted my life and the other is for a community college. This one is to adress why I want to be a nurse and why I would be a good candidate for their program. I had an idea to incorporate my military experience into the essay. I decided to join when I was just 17 (now 35), I did this to have money for college and obtain the medical training that I always knew I wanted. I stayed in for 13 years. During which they sent me to school for Respiratory Therapy. I have been doing that for the past 11 years. My children are now grown enough to go back and expand upon my medical experience and obtain my RN. I have repeated all of my science courses over the past year (summer included) and got all A's. (They were over 10years old). What I love about nursing is the many doors it will open up for me and the opportunities to continue my education. It encompasses everything I love about being a respiratory therapist, except it adds so many more opportunities and new challenges for me. I am very interested in pursuing a role in education. I am not sure which way I should go with this, It seems "all over the place". Any suggestions?