Cover letter critique?

[dalsor]

Hey guys, I'm having a difficult time writing a cover letter. I just finished my rough draft and was wondering if you guys had any suggestions! I'm a telemetry nurse looking to move to a LA for a position in the CTICU or ER. Thanks!

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ME, BA, BSN, R.N. ADDRESS

March 25, 2014

Nurse Recruitment [HOSPITAL INFO]

To Whom It May Concern:

I am writing in response to the advertisement posted on the HOSPITAL WEBSITE for a UNIT registered nurse. I currently live in Place, California but am willing and able to relocate at any time.

As indicated on my resume, I have been employed as a Registered nurse on the cardiovascular unit at Medical Center in Place, CA for the past year. Through my experience to date, I have managed care for a diverse patient population with complicated medical issues including CHF, post cardiac bypass patients, and more. I have also been heavily involved in my unit development through my position as co-chair of my unit based council, unit representative for the hospital wide falls committee, and project chair for the unit wide photo project.

My strong initiative and exceptional organizational skills, combined with my ability to work well under pressure, will enable me to make a substantial contribution to Hospital. I believe that a challenging environment such as yours will provide an excellent opportunity for me to best utilize my skills while contributing to the healthcare community, patients and their families.

Thank you for taking the time to review my resume. I would be delighted to begin my career with [Hopsital] and I would welcome the chance to speak with you to discuss possible employment opportunities. I will be available at your convenience and may be reached at #, or via e-mail at [email protected][1] . I look forward to hearing from you. Best Regards, ME, BSN, R.N.

[SoldierNurse22, BSN, RN]

This is something I always recommend for cover letters, across the board: do some research on the hospital that you're applying to. What do they advertise about themselves? What are their big projects? What do the TELL you on the website that makes you want to come to their hospital? Focus on one or two of those things and tell them how you can contribute.

For example, say that X Hospital's Y Unit (the one you're applying to) is known for increasing mobility results through XYZ research standards and XYZ advanced therapy. Mention that and how you see yourself contributing to those things that help them stand out/better patient incomes/attract business. It tells them you 1) did your research and 2) are already actively taking steps to integrate into their system and 3) will likely continue to be an active contributer to their hospital.