CL help - RPN candidate

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Hi there,

I'm due to write my RPN (LPN) examinations in May/14, but I'm currently applying to jobs. Unfortunately most jobs ask for experience (and a completed exam), but I'm taking a shot in the dark anyway.

My question is this: Should I put that I'm a RPN Candidate in my first line, or should I stick it somewhere lower in my cover letter so they actually read what I've written rather than just throwing it out at the first sentence?

I'm applying to a Family Health clinic that has administrative sides to it as well as RPN skills/knowledge.

Here's my CL:

I am a caring and compassionate Registered Practical Nurse candidate, due to write my examinations in May, 2014. I have recently completed my Practical Nursing program and am eligible for a Temporary License from the College of Nurses. I am eager to enter the workforce and establish myself as a competent, professional, and accountable nurse. My experience in providing care to a wide variety of patients makes me an excellent contender for a position as a Registered Practical Nurse.

I chose to pursue nursing to help people and make a positive difference in the lives of others. I left a technical background to focus on health and wellness, and have thoroughly enjoyed the opportunities my clinical placements have provided. I have clinical experience in departments such as medicine, surgery, mental health, obstetrics, and long term care and have worked with patients in complex continuing, rehabilitative, and palliative care. I am passionate about family health and community health promotion. My previous experience as a computer technician provided me with excellent administrative skills such as ordering supplies, completing documentation, and servicing clientele. I am highly efficient, detail-oriented, and thrive in a fast-paced environment. The values of confidentiality, trust, accountability, and leadership are vital to my practice.

I have a final paragraph stating courses I hope to take upon becoming registered plus phone number and full availability. I'd love some feedback if my CL is awful - but mostly I'm wondering if I should leave the first sentence be or move it.

Thank you!

[mimigins]

Alright... I've been reading over many of the posts here and trying to edit my resume according to feedback from others. I've attached some pictures - feedback would be greatly appreciated. I trimmed the fat on my resume (I thought details as to duties I'd performed in each individual clinical rotation were important, but the census appears to be "delete that ****" so it's gone.)

My resume is now one page long. It makes me nervous seeing that there's not a whole lot for me to say about myself now. Oh well

Thanks to anybody who reads this.