Admission letter

[jessikhamarie]

Hello,

I am writing my admission letter to the nursing program and would like a second opinion on it. The topic is" How do you plan to be successful in the nursing program" and I feel that I got off topic or wrote little on the topic. This is my first draft and I know I have some touching up to do. I don't know if I should just start over or just add on to the question asked, I`m just getting so stressed out over this whole letter. Please be as honest as you can, I can handle it.

The health field has always sparked my interest when my grandparent`s physical well-being declined I took the initiative to help them physically, emotionally, and mentally. I feel that I was given a gift that most people don't have. Being a nurse isn't just providing safe, effective care to an ill or injured patient, but being compassionate, sympathetic, and caring told an individual and their families. Being a nurse has its benefits, rewards, and many opportunities to advance in the health field.

I knew nursing was my calling since I was a child, caring for my grandfather who suffered from three heart attacks and my grandmother who was diagnosed with type 2 diabetes gave me this feeling of accomplishment and motivation to help others who are in need of help or are unable to care for themselves anymore. I volunteered at my local hospital in the hospice unit, where I got the opportunity to get a better understanding of what a nurse handles on a day-to-day basis. I learned while volunteering in the hospice unit the skills and knowledge to know how to address individuals facing an end of life issues, and how proper palliative care is administered, in addition, learning how to correctly approach mortality. This opportunity inspired me more to pursue my dreams of becoming a nurse. I worked with elderly patients who suffered from dementia, arthritis, respiratory diseases, osteoporosis, and so on. Though I worked with elderly patients, and I enjoy every aspect of it, my heart is set on becoming a pediatric nurse.

The nursing program will be a challenge and an adventure for me, but I plan to be successful in the nursing program by staying organized, being prepared, joining a study group, and balancing my social and work life. I`ve accomplished many of my goals thus far in my life and I'm determined and dedicated to doing what it takes to accomplish my dream goal of becoming a registered nurse. I believe my friendly and energetic personality is what draws children of all ages to me. The feelings I get when I see a child smiling gives me this warm feeling, a feeling that I could be potentially making a change in their life.

After completing the nursing program, I plan on working in the hospital as a registered nurse and continuing my education in hope of working in the neonatal unit as a pediatric nurse. The day my daughter was born she had to have emergency surgery, while she stayed at the hospital I witnessed several infants who had no family support or sympathy.

With my experience and knowledge, I feel that I can make an impact on society and continue to show compassion, sympathy, and warmth to those around me. I`m hoping that I will be given the opportunity to contribute to my community and to help change lives. I don't believe there is any other profession that would bring me as much joy and happiness than becoming a nurse.

[xxstarrynitesxx]

I definitely feel that you need to talk more about the topic and connect some of the other sections to why you they will help to make you successful. For example, you mention continuing your education in part because of your experiences with your daughter after she was born. You could mention that this helped to give you motivation throughout your prerequisites and will continue to give you motivation to put your best foot forward. Is there already a section about why you want to get into nursing? If so, shorten or eliminate the reasons you give as to why it is your calling.

Some ideas about how to expand your answer to the question are the following:

-Mention meeting frequently and often with your professors

-Mention seeking help from your professors early on if you are struggling

-How do you plan to stay organized? Planner? Will you write down (or type up) your schedules and look at them in a weekly and monthly format?

-How do you plan on being prepared? What does being prepared mean to you?

-How do you plan on balancing out your work and social lives? Is work=school or is work=work? Are you willing to make any sacrifices for your education?

-I would perhaps even mention that even though your focus will be on school, that you also find it important to make time for yourself and your mental health. This could be exercising for an hour, reading a book, etc.

-You could tie your volunteer/experiences with family to the clinical aspect. Connecting with family, familiar with blah blah blah, etc.

You probably do not need to get in as much detail as possible, but I would be impressed if I were to come across a letter than had a clear plan. Wanting to be a nurse, thinking it is your calling, and having volunteer experience is not an indicator for how successful you will be in nursing school. On a side note, I would also not use contractions like "I've or isn't" and use "I have or is not" instead. Double check for typos as well (I am always the worst offender here). Coming off my nap I spotted a "told" in the first actual paragraph that I think should be "to". All-in-all, it is written quite nicely and I hope my suggestions help!

[Thanksforthedonuts, BSN, RN]

I would have to agree with the previous poster.

While I liked what you had to say in your response, you touched on the actual topic very little.

Answer the question more clearly and in-depth. You can use what you wrote in your first draft to illustrate some ideas but you are too off topic for most of your letter.

Talk about the nursing process and how you will need to learn more about it and how to apply it in your approach to work and clinicals.