Nursing essay

[PnutButterJelly]

So I am about to be a new grad and I am applying to a pediatric new grad program. One of the requirements is to write an essay on why I want to be a pediatric nurse. I have already written the essay, but I am still struggling with if it is what I really want to say. I want to make it stand out. So my question is this--if you had to soft through a million essays, what would make one stand out to you? I really want this position and I think that is why I am having such a hard time. Thank you for any input!

[tryingtohaveitall]

I agree with minimizing the cheese and heart strings sections. Honestly, you've been given great advice by Jan and llg. As a veteran peds nurse, I can't stand schmaltz, so I wouldn't go that route. Most of us who have worked peds for many years have seen so many real tear-jerker stories that its hard for something I read to have the same emotional impact. Emphasize your strengths,special experiences.

[PnutButterJelly]

This is sort of the direction I went with. The prompt was this--Why do you want to work here? What makes a good pediatric nurse? So I kind of utilized good traits within myself to explain a good peds nurse (without ever coming out and saying "ME!!"). Haha. I ended with a teeny tiny bit of cheese, but also used it to complement the hospital and relate it to working there. I actually think I did a really good job, so fingers crossed that I get a call back! Thank you all so much. You have given such good advice and I don't think I would feel as confident about my essay without everyone's input.