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[Judy18]

i am applying fur nursing school and started on my personal statement i never wrote one before and i am not sure if i set the right tone can you guys help me this is what i have so far

[color=#333333]growingup in a large family it was inevitable that at some time, somehow someone willend up needing medical attention, i was no stranger to sickness and disease,

[color=#333333]from a very young age i admired those who healed. strangely enough it was not for the right reasons. i was yet too young to understand the concept of altruistic behavior or selflessness in my eyes these people were magicians or maybe superhuman, they took away pain, sickness, and prolonged death; it wasa dream of mine to be in that category. i envied their knowledge on the mostuseful and valuable thing; how to restorehealth to an ailing human being.

as a child and teen i had my fair share of doctors andhospitals. i was 10 years old when my father, a mountain of a man, in perfecthealth, was diagnosed with stage 4 stomach cancer (endino carcinoma) and wasgiven a year to live. i am the sixth child of a family of ten and we were allstill living at home. the worry lines etched in my mother's face and thewhispering of my older siblings between themselves did nothing to alleviate thefear of i had of what is happening with my father. admittedly i was achild where my biggest worry was if my teacher would pick on me in school, butbeing a rather sensitive and intuitive child i picked up that things werereally going from bad to worse. terms like radiation, chemotherapy and biopsiesbecame household conversations, hospital and doctor visits became a way of life and our sleep and eating schedules started revolving around myfather's intravenous and pain medication. i watched as my father wentfrom being the quintessential giver to the involuntary taker. in the end the disease consumed him in eight months.

[color=#333333]therapists may pinpoint the scars the death of a father leaveson a young child and i will admit that it took some doing to adjust myself in acommunity where pain is shelved and two parent families are the status quo.there is but one thing that i can point back and say it is a direct result ofus going through this reality of life at that age. every one of my oldersiblings has taken first aid, lifeguarding and/or emt training as soon as theywere eligible to do so, myself included. we felt a familiarity and a connectionto a way of life where helping others is important and satisfying, let alonethe demand to be prepare and available to help others.

[Success88]

I love it! You go girl!