Rewrite of Admission Essay

[DanaRNoneday]

I'm applying to a local LPN program with the intent to continue on to an RN program. I'm stuck on the essay, and have already rewritten it a few times, so many help would be appreciated. The only prompt was "Why are you choosing nursing as a career?". I tried to keep it personal an honest, and less cliche. Thanks for your input!

My start in the medical field was different than you might expect. Like many medical professionals, I worked long hours, often staying after my shift ended. I never minded, I enjoyed the work, enjoyed the action, the medicine, and how we were able to use technology to better treat our patients. The work wasn't easy, but that was half the reason I loved the job. The difference with my job and your average medical professional is that I had little interaction with people. I worked at a veterinary clinic, and while I loved my job, I missed people.

For whatever reason, nursing didn't click in my head right away. I loved the medical atmosphere, and I missed people, but I still had no idea what I wanted to do with my life. It happened on a day I was killing time at my school, wandering the halls, when I ended up in the nursing wing.

I watched the students, they were either studying or talking about their most recent clinical experiences. I felt a tremendous amount of respect for them and the profession they were going into, even envied them. That's when I had it, my epiphany moment. Why do I have to envy them? Why can't I be them? I already knew I loved medicine, and it would give me plenty of human interaction. It was perfect, and I wanted to kick myself for not coming to this realization sooner.

As I considered it further I realized how nurses had already impacted my life. When I was young and my father had to have surgery they were there to comfort me about what an easy procedure it would be. When an old family friend had a very close call with cancer it was the nurses she couldn't say enough about, and how gentle and patient they were with me whenever I had a procedure of my own.

The more I thought about it, the more I knew. Between my undying curiosity and love for medicine along with the need for human interaction, nursing is not only the perfect career for me. Every day brings a new situation and a new story, and that is the kind of environment I thrive in.