FNP Personal Statement Feedback

[art1stic]

Need some feedback prior to submission. Thank you in advance.

-Eugene

XX

Personal Statement

xx

Degree Objective: MSN-FNP

My nursing journey began as a young boy who learned how much human beings could make a positive impact in the lives of others. Visiting my terminally ill grandfather at the hospital for the first time, seeing his frail, weakened state, gave me a sense of sadness and helplessness. I would always see members of the health care team, specifically the physicians, assessing my grandfather as if he were another task on their checklist, never acknowledging him holistically. Later that night, other staff members would frequently visit him, wore different colored scrubs, and had an overwhelming desire to care for my grandfather. These individuals deeply cared for my grandfather, they fed him when he was too weak, turned him when he was aching, and gave him encouragement when he was approaching his final days. I eventually learned these individuals were called nurses, and at that moment, I wanted to be called a nurse too.

Twenty years later as a professional nurse working in the emergency room on Christmas day, we had an incoming call from xx fire department indicating a cardiac arrest was soon arriving. Upon the client's arrival, the paramedics had a look of despair, and seeing his lifeless body on the gurney, I knew he was dead on arrival. Seeing the client's family grieve gave me new insight of nursing's impact on client care, and what strategies could be utilized to prevent early mortality.

This client rarely visited a primary care provider during his lifetime; he did not have annual physical examinations or management of his disease processes. He was oblivious to his risk factors. Had a nurse practitioner managed his care, he may have prevented an early death, and may have spent time with his loved ones on Christmas morning.

Since that experience, I have made it my mission to dedicate myself to learn how to care for those who require primary care. I wish to provide comprehensive, holistic healthcare for clients of all ages, genders, cultures, values, and beliefs. I firmly believe that our nation's healthcare environment is becoming increasingly complex each day. By learning enhanced nursing concepts at a graduate level, I can provide professional, compassionate, and culturally diverse care to these complex healthcare populations. I believe that there is a nursing shortage, and acquiring an advanced practice degree will help the nursing demand, and assist with moving the nursing profession forward.

Becoming a student at xx will not only help me achieve my goals and aspirations of becoming a family nurse practitioner, it will also contribute to shaping my nursing profession in a positive way. xx is a strong advocate in providing competent, responsible client care through a biblical worldview. As a Christian, this school's mission is what will help shape me as a nurse, and as an individual to think at a graduate level, and comfortably work in an advanced practice role. I believe in absolute faith that I can make a positive impact at xx that can help shape what it means to be a Christian Family Nurse Practitioner. This positive impact will result in impeccable client outcomes, unremarkable application of nursing theory, serve as a leader in nursing, and implement evidenced based practices. By becoming a family nurse practitioner, I will improve the overall health of clients within the primary care setting, and surrounding communities.

[art1stic]

REVISED, disregard first post:

XX

Personal Statement

XX

Degree Objective: MSN-FNP

My passion for helping people began when I was a young boy as I learned how much helping people impacts not only their lives but also enriches my own. Visiting my terminally ill grandfather at the hospital for the first time, seeing his frail, weakened state, gave me a sense of sadness and helplessness. I would always see members of the health care team, specifically the physicians, assessing my grandfather as if he were another task on their checklist, never acknowledging him or treating him utilizing a holistic approach. However I also recall other staff members would frequently visit him, wore different colored scrubs, and had an overwhelming desire to care for my grandfather. These individuals deeply cared for my grandfather, they fed him when he was too weak, turned him when he was aching, and gave him encouragement when he was approaching his final days. I later learned that these incredible individuals were nurses, and it was then that I realized that I wanted to become a nurse too.

Twenty years later as a professional nurse working in the emergency room on Christmas day, we had an incoming call from XX fire department indicating a cardiac arrest case was soon arriving. Upon the patient's arrival, the paramedics had a look of despair, and seeing his lifeless body on the gurney, I knew he was deceased upon arrival. Seeing the patient's family grieve gave me deep insight of how nursing influences not only patient's lives but their families as well.

I later learned that the deceased patient rarely visited a primary care provider during his lifetime; he did not have annual physical examinations and lacked management of his disease processes. He was oblivious to his risk factors. Had a nurse practitioner managed his care, it may have prevented an early death.

Since that experience, I have made it my mission to dedicate myself to learn how to care for those who require primary care. I wish to provide comprehensive, holistic healthcare for patients of all ages, genders, cultures, values, and beliefs. I firmly believe that our nation's healthcare environment is becoming increasingly complex. By learning advanced nursing concepts at a graduate level, I can provide professional, compassionate, and culturally diverse care to these complex healthcare populations. I believe that there is a nursing shortage, and acquiring an advanced practice degree will help the primary care provider shortage.

Becoming a student at XX will not only help me achieve my goals and aspirations of becoming a family nurse practitioner, but it will also contribute to shaping my nursing profession in a positive way. XX is a strong advocate in providing competent, responsible patient care through a biblical worldview. As a Christian, this school's mission is what will help shape me as a nurse, and as an individual to practice at a graduate level, and comfortably work in an advanced practice role. I believe in absolute faith that I can make a positive impact at XX which can help shape what it means to be a Christian Family Nurse Practitioner. This positive impact will result in impeccable patient outcomes, unremarkable application of nursing theory, serve as a leader in nursing, and implement evidenced based practices. By becoming a family nurse practitioner, I will improve the overall health of patients within the primary care setting, and surrounding communities.